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6/24/2017 c9 6my 2 guys
that was good
10/17/2015 c9 russia2774
Please more updates
7/3/2011 c1 Concerned Reader
Umm...so like-I think you need to like go back and read this story AGAIN! Half of the sentences do not make sense...like you've left words out, resulting in nothing but a lot of words on a page. Maybe you should like go buy a dictionary and learn to use it...like you really have no concept of the English language-like not capitalizing words, using the wrong homophone, and like using "like" way too much. Do I need to post what these big words mean so little kids like you can understand what I am saying?
3/23/2011 c8 myra21
please update
12/24/2010 c7 7Guardian2Be
Kewl luv it I wanna no wat they did to dream boy!

All the best,

Guardian2Be
12/19/2010 c1 7UnnaturalKetchupTaco
Your writing style is dry and boring. You keep /telling/ us what's going on, and not showing us. In the first seven paragraphs, you start with 'I' six times.

I ran towards and quickly got in.]

Got in what? The next paragraph clear that up a bit, but it was not previously stated that she was taking a shower. And, really, if she was going to be late to work/school/training, would Rose really take time for a ten minute shower? Seems pretty OOC.

Your grammar could be worse, but you don't know how to insert dialogue properly into a paragraph, or how to set it off with commas.

Other than that, not terribly bad. Cliche, yes. Boring, yes. OOC, very. It could be worse.
12/14/2010 c7 gracey
there I'm reviewing. pleeeeaaaaasssssseeeee kepp going
12/8/2010 c7 28Nicia
I can't wait for the nextt chapter! xx
12/7/2010 c7 Steers.and.Roses
this story is gr8t keep writing pleaz
10/26/2010 c9 Nicia
Please update! I can't wait to see what they made Adrian do! xx
10/26/2010 c3 Nicia
lol Rose is cruel! :D brill chapter! xx
10/24/2010 c1 Nicia
lol Adrians reaction made me giggle :D I can't wait to read the rest; and thank you for adding True Love to your faves list! xx
9/19/2010 c6 5littlebeachhut
Romantic and Dramatic, I like it, love it!
9/19/2010 c5 littlebeachhut
If I had dimitri in detention he woulndt have time to talk. I'd have him very very busy... with me... hhahaha
9/19/2010 c3 littlebeachhut
Ok, I'm sure whatever you have in store will send dimitri to the shrink. hahaha.
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