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10/27/2014 c4 Guest
It would be nice to have an update... Because this story is actually interesting and I would like to read more, but waiting 2 years for an update? Come on now...
8/17/2014 c4 Cera
Hey there,
I just finished Exile and continued with that one here.
Starburst, Moonshadow, Curious, Dynamite... seriously? Who would punish their children giving them names that would fit much better to a pokemon? I can totally understand the guy who complained about the weird names people have in this region!
As to the story itself: Just keep it up, please. I am really curious what will happen once Volkner and Flint meet again. Or what Will's great plan is and how he will react once Lance finds out and Will knows that Lance and Koga know. And I still wonder what you meant in the description about Volkner having trouble with his emotions. Are we going to see more spontaneous outbursts like the one when he threw Flint out?
Anyway, that's it for now. I'm looking forward to another chapter soon.
Greetings
7/1/2014 c4 User938409234
This was great. I just read through the entire thing. I like the many different point of views that keeps you updated on everyone in the story. I feel really bad for Will though since he is pretty much suffering alone and Koga can't do anything and Volkner had to leave Sinnoh because of Flint. I'm still not sure what exactly happened that made Flint almost get arrested and I hope that will be explained sometime.
11/16/2013 c4 7grasswhistler
Thanks for updating! I read 'Exiled' last year, didn't know how to review, and just left it...but, hmm. Wrestling a wolf in the Pokémon world might be...fun.

Looking forward to the next chapter.
8/12/2013 c4 Anonymous
I really like this story so far :D
And of course I cant wait to see what happens next, so pleeease keep posting
12/28/2011 c3 1Lauri3n
This is great!
5/1/2011 c3 2Nirazilaa
'Don't help Volkner unless he's about to be eaten'.

That's probably one of the best instructions I've ever heard. xD

It's great to see an update for this! ^^ I just about exploded when I saw this update. :D This region seems interesting, though.. Volkner seems to be doing well, away from the others and safe from electromagnetic-obsessed scientists. The Ferocifox seems like an awesome pokémon. Dynamite seemed like a really neat leader, though. I had been wondering what Volkner would do against the rock trainers. Probably just try and use Octillery and Lanturn.

And Starburst's frog sounds so much cooler than Palpitoad or whatever. o_o They need cooler frog pokemon. Not just stereotypical water types.

Curious and Enigma sound like awesome-r versions of Tate and Liza. Creepy twins are always good.

So Flint's freaking out and drinking vodka like there's no tomorrow and Karen's under evil-Will's control. Looks like the E4 is breaking apart...

"It's called genetics and trainingm stupid."

I think I like Billy...

Anyways, awesome job with this chapter. I'm really... curious to see the twins. They sound so unorthodox it's amazing. :D
1/20/2011 c2 Nirazilaa
So... Will is using his powers for mind control? I assume his incident was the cause of the sudden ability, or something. ;) Koga really IS a good guy-I'm glad he's so paranoid. Even if Will's cute, we don't need him taking world over.

Volkner's got his first badge, and from Molly and Eusine? Correct me if I'm wrong, but I'm pretty sure Molly was the girl from the cave under the Bicycling Road in D/P/Pt... Garret sounds pretty cool, and I loved Volkner's comment about his supernaturally clean clothing. xD

Aww, Flint. I still don't like him thanks to this story, but no one can NOT feel a bit bad for his plight. :) Good luck Flint.
1/19/2011 c2 25KsandraMallan
YAY for update!

Hope the next update will come soon, haha. Glad to see Will's back up in action, though that alt personality may cause trouble... And shouldn't Karen be more immune due to training Dark types?

Anyway, looking forward to the next one :)
9/20/2010 c1 18karrot bear
ahem~just a little rhyme for you

Will the psychic went kind of crazy

Will the psychic went a bit hazy

And while Karen sat by

And tried not to cry

Will decided to kick Flint's lazy...ass...

I kind of gave up on the the last line. Sorry.

Crazy Will concept seems awesome and yay Volkner didn't die.

I seriously mean that.
9/3/2010 c1 36SharkbaitSekki
Well my internet's been dead for the past 3 days so I could only read this right now, but it was really worth it O:

I mean, Maybelene's a douche, Volkner's alive, Flint is on a guilt-trip (you really don't like Flint, huh? O_o) and Will... is... uhh... crazy. Yeah _

But I liked it O: It's a nice start. Now you gotta pump some action in this and you'll have another amazing story on your hands O:

I'm kinda sad it's Will-centered this time and not Volkner-centered, but hey, gotta share the spotlight, huh? :/ In any case, whatever-centered it is, I'll read it from start to end ^_^

Also, I love the Twilight reference, from Maybelene's diary entry xDDD I mean, she's such a douche, I kinda think it's insulting that Volkner-sama was replaced by this baka-chan "

Then again, is she gonna die in an extremely explosive fashion at some point? O: I could bring Deidara in :D But then again, I'm not a fan of crossovers, soo... I think we should both stick to our own fandoms xD

In any case, thank you so much for the mention, even though I didn't do anything at ALL. You deserve so much more than just 5 reviews (6 with mine ^^) and whenever, wherever, you can expect my feedback for sure :D

Unless my internet dies once again "

good luuuuuck~

VOLKNER RULEZ :DD
9/1/2010 c1 2Nirazilaa
It's good Volkner's starting out anew. ^^ Thanks for contacting us about the new chapter; it was really exciting to see.

...0_e Half a chapter in, and Volkie's being attacked. How joyous. I hope he can live against the Eeveezillas.

Poor Will. Your writing really showed his confusion. Stupid Flint... :( It's good he's not in a coma, with what Flint did to him, but the fact he's so damaged is just sad.

""Well, there was an incident where some kid, Barry something-or-other was bothering a group of Aquas telling them that he was going to fine them a million dollars if they didn't give him directions. And well, you know how Team Aqua is. Never accepting threats. In short they attempted to feed him to the fishes.""

Wow. Just... wow Barry.

Anyways, awesome job with this chapter. I'm excited to see how this goes, and how you continue "Exiled." ^^
9/1/2010 c1 75Rikkamaru
thanks for telling me about the new fic! Will's not going to stay crazy is he? T.T anyway, it sounds interesting. please update soon.

ja ne!
8/31/2010 c1 5Poopsie
Very nice chapter for a very nice new story x3 I liked it a lot! Perhaps you should start thinking about little markers to tell us when you're switching characters/POV? I got really confused at first :P Anyway, thanks for telling me about this, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
8/31/2010 c1 5winterkitten
The part about Barry was epic. :D

And that part about Maybelene was really funny too. XD I wonder how a girl who can't spell properly was actually offered to replace Volkner...are the Elite 4 that dumb or is there really no one better out there? Hm. Poor Kronus, whose identity I have no idea of.

Anyway, I think you should have line breaks to seperate what's happening with Flint, Volkner, Kronus, etc. The different scenes are a bit mixed up as they are.

And Moonshadow's name sounds a bit...ehhh. Names like that aren't usually for humans.

Other than that, nice sequel! Keep writing!
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