for Why Me?7/19/2011 c15 
17Mad-Hatter-103
I absolutely love this :) Not the *best* grammar in the world, but personally, I think it was worth it. I can't wait for Emilia's next adventure! Will it be here soon?
17Mad-Hatter-103I absolutely love this :) Not the *best* grammar in the world, but personally, I think it was worth it. I can't wait for Emilia's next adventure! Will it be here soon?
7/4/2011 c15 dreamer girl134
The story was...okay. I hate to be rude but you have very poor grammar skills and that strongly detracts from the story. Maybe working with a Beta could help.
The story was...okay. I hate to be rude but you have very poor grammar skills and that strongly detracts from the story. Maybe working with a Beta could help.
6/21/2011 c15 1Royal Gryphon
an interesting story. i really don't know what else to say about it. once your revising is finished it should be much better but for the future i suggest working on plot development some more. on a side note it is very rare for a story with an epilogue to have a sequel. normally people would just have the epilogue as the first part of a new story or just have a very short scene of what may come in the future.
1Royal Gryphonan interesting story. i really don't know what else to say about it. once your revising is finished it should be much better but for the future i suggest working on plot development some more. on a side note it is very rare for a story with an epilogue to have a sequel. normally people would just have the epilogue as the first part of a new story or just have a very short scene of what may come in the future.
2/11/2011 c15 1fhl1234
Cute. Like your oc very much. Thanks for writing such a fantastic fic. That being said, there's only one way in which you could improve the quality of your writing, throughout the story you keep switching tense. It doesn't bother me at all when reading though. But perhaps since some of the story takes place in Porta Rico its common for individuals of that nationality to speak in that manner since English is probably their second language. Plz write a sequel. I would very much like to see their tale continue!
1fhl1234Cute. Like your oc very much. Thanks for writing such a fantastic fic. That being said, there's only one way in which you could improve the quality of your writing, throughout the story you keep switching tense. It doesn't bother me at all when reading though. But perhaps since some of the story takes place in Porta Rico its common for individuals of that nationality to speak in that manner since English is probably their second language. Plz write a sequel. I would very much like to see their tale continue!
1/3/2011 c15 92Glorioux
How cute...it is the first non hermione I have read. And I enjoyed, a different take.
Bonita history. Viva puerto Rico
92GloriouxHow cute...it is the first non hermione I have read. And I enjoyed, a different take.
Bonita history. Viva puerto Rico
12/4/2010 c1 teachergirl
You desperately need to get a Beta. You keep switching between present tense and past tense. You need to write in the past tense. The story just isn't readable as it is.
You desperately need to get a Beta. You keep switching between present tense and past tense. You need to write in the past tense. The story just isn't readable as it is.
10/20/2010 c1 7jabarber69
interesting first chapter, gonna have to read this one, now if I can just find the time...
7jabarber69interesting first chapter, gonna have to read this one, now if I can just find the time...
10/5/2010 c1 Obsidian Sin
I really like this story so far, it's very interesting, can't wait to read more keep up the good work.
I really like this story so far, it's very interesting, can't wait to read more keep up the good work.