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17Fiend Maz
I like the fic. The plot is interesting and the characters are very well-outlined. Just that... it lacked... fire and content. And there were quite a few glaring mistakes that I had to rephrase or reword in my mind to make sense of what was being said. Other than that, it's good - interesting.
17Fiend MazI like the fic. The plot is interesting and the characters are very well-outlined. Just that... it lacked... fire and content. And there were quite a few glaring mistakes that I had to rephrase or reword in my mind to make sense of what was being said. Other than that, it's good - interesting.
1/3/2014 c1 Guest
Yaoi loving nincompoops. DOWN the yaoi lovers!
Yaoi loving nincompoops. DOWN the yaoi lovers!
9/20/2011 c6 noname00
The fic was great:-D
I simply loved it^^
The fic was great:-D
I simply loved it^^
9/16/2011 c6 3JlovesGaara
This was a great little story. Good lemon and I just love the ItaDei pairing! I like the stories in which Sasuke is like a whole other person when he's around Naruto. It's cute.
3JlovesGaaraThis was a great little story. Good lemon and I just love the ItaDei pairing! I like the stories in which Sasuke is like a whole other person when he's around Naruto. It's cute.
9/10/2011 c6 SH1ZU-CHAN
Wow, I really loved this story ;w;
My heart kept pumping at Sasuke and Naruto's sex scene ;w;
XDD it was amazing and I hope to read more of your work!
Wow, I really loved this story ;w;
My heart kept pumping at Sasuke and Naruto's sex scene ;w;
XDD it was amazing and I hope to read more of your work!
9/6/2011 c6 1beachqueen17
this was a great story! i loved every bit of it...and hope you have the best of luck and fun in College.
1beachqueen17this was a great story! i loved every bit of it...and hope you have the best of luck and fun in College.
9/4/2011 c6 51Juura99
Hehe. A very nice ending to a very nice story! ^_^ Congrads on finishing it! I enjoyed reading it, so thank you for sharing it!
51Juura99Hehe. A very nice ending to a very nice story! ^_^ Congrads on finishing it! I enjoyed reading it, so thank you for sharing it!
2/26/2011 c5 4AngeSama
i don't know why you didn´t like it the 5th chapter.
i like it. sasuke made up with itachi.
i can't wait to read the reaction of itachi to the exposition of deidara...
4AngeSamai don't know why you didn´t like it the 5th chapter.
i like it. sasuke made up with itachi.
i can't wait to read the reaction of itachi to the exposition of deidara...
2/12/2011 c5 LillyTigress
I love your writing. I have a difficult time believing that you are as young as you are because your writing is mature beyond your age.
I encourage you to write more. I wonder that you get as few reviews as you do when I see much less talented writers who are heavily reviewed. Please know that the number of reviews is not a reflection of the quality of your work.
As far as constructive criticism goes I would offer just a little although it makes me slightly uncomfortable since I don't really feel qualified but, hey, you asked for it so here I go: in this story I feel like something is missing or confusing about the characters' past. Hard to explain but as I read I feel like the hints about the past are not building upon each other - does that make sense? For example, when Naruto says, ""You were…that really scared me. It reminded me of…before," is he talking about the time Sasuke tried to kill him (mentioned earlier in the story) or is he talking about when he had to subdue Sasuke in the bedroom?
Anyway, love your stuff and look forward to more!
I love your writing. I have a difficult time believing that you are as young as you are because your writing is mature beyond your age.
I encourage you to write more. I wonder that you get as few reviews as you do when I see much less talented writers who are heavily reviewed. Please know that the number of reviews is not a reflection of the quality of your work.
As far as constructive criticism goes I would offer just a little although it makes me slightly uncomfortable since I don't really feel qualified but, hey, you asked for it so here I go: in this story I feel like something is missing or confusing about the characters' past. Hard to explain but as I read I feel like the hints about the past are not building upon each other - does that make sense? For example, when Naruto says, ""You were…that really scared me. It reminded me of…before," is he talking about the time Sasuke tried to kill him (mentioned earlier in the story) or is he talking about when he had to subdue Sasuke in the bedroom?
Anyway, love your stuff and look forward to more!
11/12/2010 c5 lo
This is a cute story and I like how you are developing the relationships in it.
This is a cute story and I like how you are developing the relationships in it.