1/3/2011 c1 3Bright-Eyed Athena
Mmmm... sounds like an interesting beginning. Where are you going from here? Is this story solely about Necia or is Tiasalle as well? It would make it a little easier on the eyes if you break up your story a bit more too. Like more distinction between different times/places. Otherwise, a good read and well constructed, I would like to read more.

Sorry it took so long to get back to you, haven't been on FanFiction for a while.