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9/15/2010 c1 59Angel Peach Blossom
I like how you wrote this. It was easy to see Grovyle actually saying these things. I liked how you indicated that he was tougher, but had suddenly gotten softer now. Since you don't know what it was really like for the hero and Grovyle in their past.

I also liked how he was able to see the familiarity of Neppa in the Treecko too. I've kinda always wondered if he did notice certain things, and even something such as a cocky smirk could work just as well.

I noticed at least one mistake, but it isn't major. You don't need a k in order to spell Torchic. Aside from that though, I thought this was well written! Nice job!

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