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9/14/2010 c1 Ali
It's a great story so far and I can't wait for more but maybe you could add more detail to it.
9/13/2010 c1 1AugustBaby.X
Great so far. Don't forget to put punctuation at the end of their speechs and at the end of sentences; "Alvin do you really think this is a good idea spying on the girls like this?" said Simon. Like that and a bit more description. I need to do some work in those areas too (:
9/12/2010 c1 Guest
Uh that waz it?
9/6/2010 c1 2spidermaster14
This should be interesting
9/4/2010 c1 IamtheMoMo
I loved it, but it was really confusing, anyway i love it so keep ritin!
9/4/2010 c1 9TyRocks15
i'm so sick of jeanette singing that song

but anyways

it sounds really interesting!

can't wait for more!

^date soon!
9/4/2010 c1 14Davey13
That was an awesome chapter just make the upcoming chapters longer with a bit more description but overall it was a really good chapter

update soon plz! (=
9/4/2010 c1 34ScorpiusMalfoyIsMine
Like it,just a few tips:

Give more description,like where are they?Are they in there beds?Are tehy on the floor?How are the chipmunks listening?Where are the chipmunks while there listening?Also,make the chapters longer and its very easy for them to be longer if description is in them.

I need some work in a few areas too like this.

Good luck,keep writing,update, Kaylee alvinsSister:)
9/4/2010 c1 Cy23
This seems like a cool story, please continue soon.

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