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9/28/2010 c4 always.theheartbeat
Ah. Tense. But that's mmk, cause I have more to read. :D

Anyway! Sucha long wait to read this...yeah. Monday I was stressed so I didn't get the chance...anyway! Awesome job! I love Sam's person, and how she's so tiny. Made me laugh. Great job!
9/27/2010 c7 31TwilightPony21
Oh, this was a good chapter! I liked the beginning with Eric trying to get to DC with a book. And Abby is great. And I liked the end with Gibbs making coffee. And I just realized that I didn't put this story on alert - must fix that!
9/27/2010 c7 bookworm002
Great chapter! I don't watch a lot of the original NCIS, but I have seen a couple of shows here and there, plus the shows that overlap with NCIS LA, and I think you have Abby and Gibbs' characters down really well. And I particularly liked Eric's undercover attempts here. I think he did a pretty good job for a non-agent in getting there undetected. We'll see if all the name changes and out-of-the-way flights, and general sneakiness pays off...Can't wait for the next chapter!

P.S. I don't know how picky you are about grammar/spelling issues and, given that I've never posted stories, I don't know how hard/easy it is to make changes once it's been uploaded, but I thought I'd point out one I noticed and you can do with it what you want :)

About midway through it says ""Make sure the coffee's on. You know who I like it," Gibbs replied." I'm thinking that "who" should be a "how".

Other than that, the chapter was perfect :)
9/26/2010 c6 TwilightPony21
Wow, very good chapters! (I know, I'm behind with reading again.) Ha ha, I love all their banter about driving. Your OCs are all really interesting. And I love how Hetty is in charge of everyone and how they have to do more than disappear. Looking forward to seeing where this goes next!
9/26/2010 c6 jeps
great story so far, i'm not usually a fan of oc's however both Annabel & Grey intrigue me. Cant want to find some more.
9/26/2010 c6 Skyler1510
awesome chapter cant wait for the next
9/26/2010 c6 Angelpoint
i wanna know what's happening?
9/26/2010 c6 4coreymason
Thanks for getting 2 chapters up this weekend! I like the camraderie of this episode. Callen and Sam were worried about Kensi, she was worried about Nate, and Hetty was worried about everyone. It just seems true to their characters. I hope the M16 team doesn't get all the action though! keep writing on
9/26/2010 c6 bookworm002
Okay, now we have a little bit of an idea of what's going on. Looks like a promising story ahead :) Can't wait for the next chapter!
9/26/2010 c6 montydam
Wow...glad they are all together again, but now where are they going and who is after them!

Can't wait for the next update!
9/26/2010 c6 23MissShellyBabes
Another awsome chapter!

Hope to have another update soon.

xxx Shelly
9/25/2010 c5 Pegasus63
really enjoyed this and I am looking forward to more. Great job keeping the characters from the show in character but also making new characters that we are interested in.
9/24/2010 c5 montydam
Love that everyone is accounted for...at least for now!
9/24/2010 c5 bookworm002
Now that everybody's together we get to find out what is going on right? Looking forward to it :)
9/23/2010 c4 4coreymason
Nothing would start my weekend better than Chapter 5 and to find out what happened to Hetty. I like the comment about Sam not making it easy for her, because that seems Samish. I am nervous about Kensi, she's my favorite...
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