for Dye7/19/2012 c1 
4InSaNeAngelsgottanAK47
Haha, this is awesome, but I agree with the first reviewer. Plus, every now and again, you need to watch the names. I forget who's were and saying what and all. But then again, it could just be me, so don't worry about it to much.:( But this is still AwesomeXD!
4InSaNeAngelsgottanAK47Haha, this is awesome, but I agree with the first reviewer. Plus, every now and again, you need to watch the names. I forget who's were and saying what and all. But then again, it could just be me, so don't worry about it to much.:( But this is still AwesomeXD!
8/6/2011 c1 Guest
Crapness. Pure, utter crapness.
Crapness. Pure, utter crapness.
10/30/2010 c1 2Namine025
I loved it! It's cute and enjoyable. Finally a death note story with L, Mello, AND Near in it.
2Namine025I loved it! It's cute and enjoyable. Finally a death note story with L, Mello, AND Near in it.
9/23/2010 c1 coloredsparks
hahaha, this was really funny! But... you could work on your organization. It was hard to understand the story when the dialogue was all mushed into a single paragraph. Next time, do the dialogue like this:
"hi"said _
"what?" he answered
"dunno"
"..."
"penguins"
it makes it so much easier to read, and the story becomes more enjoyable! Good job for a 1st though.
hahaha, this was really funny! But... you could work on your organization. It was hard to understand the story when the dialogue was all mushed into a single paragraph. Next time, do the dialogue like this:
"hi"said _
"what?" he answered
"dunno"
"..."
"penguins"
it makes it so much easier to read, and the story becomes more enjoyable! Good job for a 1st though.