for He Will Be Mine9/20/2024 c25 TheGoodDoctor13
This is the 3rd Naruto fic I've read this week where Sakura threw up on someone. All from different authors too, this is getting to be a pretty weird coincidence
This is the 3rd Naruto fic I've read this week where Sakura threw up on someone. All from different authors too, this is getting to be a pretty weird coincidence
9/18/2024 c51 
1bleachorange
Yeah, I still wish this didnt make a 90 degree turn off into the authors demon land. I basically started reading this just to see how hinata and naruto would do in the authors vision if she womaned up at the start of shippuuden, but now that Ive made it to the end of the currently posted chapters, I cant say I intend to keep following this.
On the other hand, this is well written overall, with nice characterizations for those who arent put off by the plot direction.
1bleachorangeYeah, I still wish this didnt make a 90 degree turn off into the authors demon land. I basically started reading this just to see how hinata and naruto would do in the authors vision if she womaned up at the start of shippuuden, but now that Ive made it to the end of the currently posted chapters, I cant say I intend to keep following this.
On the other hand, this is well written overall, with nice characterizations for those who arent put off by the plot direction.
9/18/2024 c49 bleachorange
Im pretty sure the kyuubi could take on all 3 and win. He would just need to escape naruto first and use his full power. These shits dont strike me as more challenging than the paths of pain.
Though I do admit I think the characterization of the demons has been done well, I do also think the focus of the story shifting into revenge for a perceived slight is a bad arc. This feels like a naruto movie, in that I dont really care what is going on in regards to the story atm. Im just hoping its done with and we can get back to our regularly scheduled shinobi stuff.
Im pretty sure the kyuubi could take on all 3 and win. He would just need to escape naruto first and use his full power. These shits dont strike me as more challenging than the paths of pain.
Though I do admit I think the characterization of the demons has been done well, I do also think the focus of the story shifting into revenge for a perceived slight is a bad arc. This feels like a naruto movie, in that I dont really care what is going on in regards to the story atm. Im just hoping its done with and we can get back to our regularly scheduled shinobi stuff.
9/18/2024 c48 bleachorange
The story has done a good job of showing both how entitled these demons are, and how much they bristle, like a small dog that yaps because it knows it has no bite compared to the other dogs (demons in this case). They are not strictly evil, they just have different priorities to our protagonists, mostly in that they dont care for human niceties when it comes to their own ego.
The story has done a good job of showing both how entitled these demons are, and how much they bristle, like a small dog that yaps because it knows it has no bite compared to the other dogs (demons in this case). They are not strictly evil, they just have different priorities to our protagonists, mostly in that they dont care for human niceties when it comes to their own ego.
9/17/2024 c37 bleachorange
Wait... I have a bad feeling Rimona was in love with Asura or some bullshit and now wants to steal Naruto from Hinata. Where the fuck else would Rimona be, and why else would some random girl be written going to Konoha?
Ok, first of all I am either slow on the uptake or pretty on target with these predictions Ive had. Secondly, really?
Wait... I have a bad feeling Rimona was in love with Asura or some bullshit and now wants to steal Naruto from Hinata. Where the fuck else would Rimona be, and why else would some random girl be written going to Konoha?
Ok, first of all I am either slow on the uptake or pretty on target with these predictions Ive had. Secondly, really?
9/17/2024 c36 bleachorange
If there were any more ominous foreshadowing in this fic, Naras would rule the world.
If there were any more ominous foreshadowing in this fic, Naras would rule the world.
9/17/2024 c32 bleachorange
Let me guess. The Hyuuga will be too stuck up to ask for assistance from the village.
Yep, called it.
So, this little honeymoon Naruto and Hinata are having doesnt seem to be focusing on the main purpose of it. You know, fucking like rabbits? Seriously, author, its like youve dumbed everyone down for this arc. Theyre literally wandering the countryside and treating this like a vacation.
Let me guess. The Hyuuga will be too stuck up to ask for assistance from the village.
Yep, called it.
So, this little honeymoon Naruto and Hinata are having doesnt seem to be focusing on the main purpose of it. You know, fucking like rabbits? Seriously, author, its like youve dumbed everyone down for this arc. Theyre literally wandering the countryside and treating this like a vacation.
9/17/2024 c28 bleachorange
Them leaving the village randomly makes zero fucking sense. This is one of the first times the author has been nutty here. What Tsunade suggested is to get Lilith out as soon as possible. Well, there is one way to do that. And Aru tracked them down to the Leaf village inside a month. Whereever they would hide, it would need serious distance or protection. Somewhere like Mt Myoboku. Not skipping town for a honeymoon. If you cant hide, the best thing is to just let them fuck like rabbits while in town and give them a protection detail, with reinforcements being nearby. If the current direction doesnt turn out to be a mistake, I will eat my hat.
Them leaving the village randomly makes zero fucking sense. This is one of the first times the author has been nutty here. What Tsunade suggested is to get Lilith out as soon as possible. Well, there is one way to do that. And Aru tracked them down to the Leaf village inside a month. Whereever they would hide, it would need serious distance or protection. Somewhere like Mt Myoboku. Not skipping town for a honeymoon. If you cant hide, the best thing is to just let them fuck like rabbits while in town and give them a protection detail, with reinforcements being nearby. If the current direction doesnt turn out to be a mistake, I will eat my hat.
9/17/2024 c6 bleachorange
Itll do Neji good to actually have a romantic relationship with Tenten. She is a catch, even if she isnt the strongest kunoichi ever. She is dedicated and caring.
Itll do Neji good to actually have a romantic relationship with Tenten. She is a catch, even if she isnt the strongest kunoichi ever. She is dedicated and caring.