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2/22/2016 c1 97ImpalaLove
This story is five years old but I really freakin' loved it so I figured I would review anyway. I love that you kind of throw us into the whole 'stream of consciousness' idea without really falling into it wholeheartedly- we as the reader are separated from Dean's innermost thoughts in the way Ben and Lisa and Sid are, aside from the bits of truth he says in his drugged state. It was just a really cool way to show his unraveling, and I stayed glued to the story throughout. Awesome!
12/24/2015 c1 CoffeeMe
Oooh- little chill at the end there. Love it!
2/9/2011 c1 bartlebead
extremely good! Second time better than the first.
12/3/2010 c1 4Bartlebead
Very good -really tight.
11/11/2010 c1 10RogueWhisper
Deano makes me think it's Gabriel.

I'm confused though.

Sid is Sam? right?

and that comment about "your flashbacks aren't this bad. "

It's probably Sam.

Six foot five, casper.

I like it.
11/9/2010 c1 7Death-Muncher
I super duper loved this story. Very interesting take on Dean's post supernaturalish life. :)
10/31/2010 c1 15ariex04
I really like this. Dean still having emotional scars from his time in hell is something that's realistic. I'm glad you included that. The "assbutt" thing made me smile. Dean using Cas's insult... You did a great job with this!
10/29/2010 c1 Haylia Jones
nice visuals and your fic takes events that actually matter and have depth into account which I think of as creative writing. So very nice.
10/29/2010 c1 LittleLurker
Hi Zat,

thanks for this short story. Loved it. Very nice Halloween touch to it, though I loved it even more that Sid really appears to be a good friend to Dean and manages even despite the ghost-dress to ground him in the now and support him very Sam-like.

Best, D.
10/28/2010 c1 218MeAzrael
Hey Zat, what a wonderful tidbit for the upcoming Halloween. The last few days I was sitting at home with a frontal sinusitis, incredible fun - and the one thing that made me smile (and we don't have to speak about people who enjoy Dean suffering) was your story :-)

Loved the time and place you chose - it played like a movie before my eyes. And the way you described his relation to Ben - kinda heartbreaking, especially how Ben covers Deans "flashbacks" with a clever little lie, and he's so like little Dean, even if Dean likes to see Sam in him.

And his "What the fuck am I doing here"? Yep, as nice as his white-picket-fence-life may be, it's just not him, and it probably will never be. Brilliant idea with the jinxed "olive branche" of that Carmicheal kid and Dean's advice for kissing and braces ;-)

And aw, the horror trip that follows the Kool-Aid - and the "holy spit" - that's so you, I just loved it! Ok, first I thought: Wow, Sid isn't as dumb as I thought when I first saw him. And after a while I thought: wait a minute - is this really Sid? Tell me, is it? I mean: ghost, white sheet, and the familiar feeling when he helps Dean get up and going... huh? Perfect ghost story, sweetie!

Whoever it is (my bet is Sam): it's so sweet how he grounds Dean in the reality with simple things like date, clothes, breakfast (oh, and nice reminder to the Trickster episode :-)

So: yummie yumm! Enjoyed it very much. Now tell me: what is wrong with hash brownies. Has it something to do with Mary Jane? Really? Kids?

xxx Kate
10/26/2010 c1 54Cerridwen7777
"his baby didn’t feel like home any more"

This one kinda hurts.

I hate Ben, but the thought of him protecting Dean during a flashback made my stone heart crack a tiny bit.

"sucks in more of the lurid colored drink, crunches on an ice cube, presses it right up against his front tooth so the cold freezes right through to the nerve, this is reality. A dog barks, from over to the left, and he zeroes in on it, sound, don’t blot it out, it’s the now, not then, focus on it. He stares at the people, sight, list what you see, connect with the moment, stay here, and his last conscious thought is that it isn’t working, because touch means pain, because howling means hellhounds, because where he is people aren’t people, they’re demons, and they’re watching, waiting, slavering for the moment Alastair picks up his razor."

This. Wow. Love it. And how they talk Dean back from the brink...

Oeuf, that Ricky Carmichael kid needs an ass whooping.

" it’s a knee-deep swamp he plods through every day, loss like mud that sucks at his shoes as he struggles to lift each foot and go through the motions."

This.

And the last bit about being watched is great...watched by a giant sasquatch of a winchester.
10/26/2010 c1 47Scullspeare
Fabulous job with this one-shot.

Love the relationships you've created between Dean and Ben, and Dean and Sid - perfect fit with canon. Love, too, how protective Ben is of Dean when his suffering a 'flashback' and that Sid knows the cover story - although obviously not the truth - but is right there for Dean when he's in trouble, as a good friend would be. And, of course, how protective Dean is of Ben.

Great idea to offer a glimpse into Dean's life during the year he spent with Lisa; I think the show's doing an awesome job at showing it was far from a cakewalk for Dean and this fic wonderfully illustrates how much he misses his brother and how the apocalypse and loss of Sam have really done a number on him.

Thanks for a great read.

Cheers, Sculls
10/25/2010 c1 52sandymg
Oh stab me through the heart why don't you? The I miss my brother part? Guh. Needless to say I want to think that was Sam. But, from what we've seen. Ugh. Never mind. It was Sam and all will be sunny and bright again one day. La la la.

Beautiful stuff as ever. And Dean wearing Sam's hoodie! Makes this an unofficial sequel to my 5.22 coda where I had Dean pull out Sam's hoodie from his duffel :) Between us, we've made this canon, right? ;)
10/25/2010 c1 Tareei
Wow- I really liked this! Simple summary drew me in and I'm glad I stayed. This is an awesome slice of life for that inbetween year. Loved Dean passing along the curses, lol.
10/25/2010 c1 CanadaNL
Great story! I like the idea of Dean having a friend (Sid) knowing about his time downunder. Makes it, I don't know, some what easier for him to cope without Sam.
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