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10/15/2011 c2 1kira86
love it
6/10/2011 c2 2MCRDanime
Please continue this story it's really good. Update soon and please soon!
11/23/2010 c2 6Alice Blue Rain
I'm a fan of very, and I mean very few FaixOcs; and when I saw few, I mean literally two, and there are bunches out there. I'm not a big fan of the pairing any more, partly because of KuroFai which is canon no matter how you look at it. On to the main point, the apostrophes. That's pretty much the only thing I notices. YOu seem to use them wrong(like in the first chapter in the A/N; villager's and guy's). Apostrophes should only be used when something is shortened or when something belongs to someone. I'm sure that didn't make much sense so I'll do this:

Right:

Kurogane's

Mokona ate Kurogane's chocolates when he wasn't looking.

Wrong:

Chocolate's

Mokona ate Kurogane's chocolate's when he wasn't looking.

Sorry if I'm not making sense, I'm terribly at explaining things. ^^'

Well, otherwise I suppose I'm looking forward to how this will turn out.

Ja ne-

Fox
11/9/2010 c1 5KawaiiAnimeLuverGirl
How about this you update your story, I'll update mine :) Please continue!

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