for Patriot's Dawn6/29/2024 c17 DarkHunter10
Wait, naruto was ALREADY told garaa was the jinchuriki and that he would be fighting him, by the hokage, SEVERAL chapters ago...And between all the hints Jiraiya, the senile monkey, Orochimaru AND kabuto have been dropping to him, shouldn't naruto have pieced together the whole oto invasion? Nothing danzo has said SHOULD be "new" news... The ONLY difference between Danzo's "news" and what the hokage said was that bit with "killing garaa"... Naruto was to "neutralize" him, but "permanent solutions" were never discussed... With Danzo? This does NOT surprise me.. Danzo DID let one thing "slip".. (or the author did).. That naruto's previous dream was something that they shared... Well if danzo is THAT OLD? He shouldn't have that dream anymore... He would have HAD to have been passed over A LOT... Soooooo... He should have changed his dream. Grown up... The fact he DIDN'T.. AND has never been heard of by anyone, despite being older then dirt? Does NOT say good things here... (at least to a REASONABLE mind)
Wait, naruto was ALREADY told garaa was the jinchuriki and that he would be fighting him, by the hokage, SEVERAL chapters ago...And between all the hints Jiraiya, the senile monkey, Orochimaru AND kabuto have been dropping to him, shouldn't naruto have pieced together the whole oto invasion? Nothing danzo has said SHOULD be "new" news... The ONLY difference between Danzo's "news" and what the hokage said was that bit with "killing garaa"... Naruto was to "neutralize" him, but "permanent solutions" were never discussed... With Danzo? This does NOT surprise me.. Danzo DID let one thing "slip".. (or the author did).. That naruto's previous dream was something that they shared... Well if danzo is THAT OLD? He shouldn't have that dream anymore... He would have HAD to have been passed over A LOT... Soooooo... He should have changed his dream. Grown up... The fact he DIDN'T.. AND has never been heard of by anyone, despite being older then dirt? Does NOT say good things here... (at least to a REASONABLE mind)
6/28/2024 c16 DarkHunter10
"the barrier corps"? YOU DO HAVE THAT IN THIS ONE? You realize that would have kinda made the "crush" impossible right? Not to mention they should be able to track/find Orochi FAIRLY easily... In canon it is easy to dismiss, since it's a RETCON and kishimoto hadn't THOUGHT OF IT by the crush.. Then went ahead and added it retroactively later (even though it REALLY shoots the konoha crush's "plan" in the foot) bur with them being here now?.. Ohhh so many problems.
Um a team finishes as one OR THEY DON'T FINISH... You had anko tell them all IN THIS STORY, the ENTIRE team finishes or the team is tossed... So how does Kabuto's team being here make sense?
Kinda stupid for the exams to be a "substitute for war".. If MOST of the combatants are from THE SAME VILLAGE... That means even this much of the hokage's speech is BULLSHIT. Never understood why ANYONE from the a village would ever be paired up against someone from the same village... Because then the battle actually means ABSOLUTELY NOTHING.
Jiraiya thinking naruto doesn't know what real problems are?.. ROFL.. The Akatsuki, dealing with demons, death of a sensei, a village that can't seem to stand him and that he's beginning to not stand either, orochi offering to take him in, a heritage stolen from him, his father's last orders being shit all over, a hokge that has an I.Q. lower then his SHOE SIZE... Yup, "NO PROBLEMS AT ALL"... Oh and Tsunade gets to keep whining about a dead brother and lover, that died before MOST OF THE CHARACTERS WERE EVEN BORN!(the brother thing sucks, but seems kinda a common occurrence in leaf.. The lover?.. Just PICK ANOTHER).
"the barrier corps"? YOU DO HAVE THAT IN THIS ONE? You realize that would have kinda made the "crush" impossible right? Not to mention they should be able to track/find Orochi FAIRLY easily... In canon it is easy to dismiss, since it's a RETCON and kishimoto hadn't THOUGHT OF IT by the crush.. Then went ahead and added it retroactively later (even though it REALLY shoots the konoha crush's "plan" in the foot) bur with them being here now?.. Ohhh so many problems.
Um a team finishes as one OR THEY DON'T FINISH... You had anko tell them all IN THIS STORY, the ENTIRE team finishes or the team is tossed... So how does Kabuto's team being here make sense?
Kinda stupid for the exams to be a "substitute for war".. If MOST of the combatants are from THE SAME VILLAGE... That means even this much of the hokage's speech is BULLSHIT. Never understood why ANYONE from the a village would ever be paired up against someone from the same village... Because then the battle actually means ABSOLUTELY NOTHING.
Jiraiya thinking naruto doesn't know what real problems are?.. ROFL.. The Akatsuki, dealing with demons, death of a sensei, a village that can't seem to stand him and that he's beginning to not stand either, orochi offering to take him in, a heritage stolen from him, his father's last orders being shit all over, a hokge that has an I.Q. lower then his SHOE SIZE... Yup, "NO PROBLEMS AT ALL"... Oh and Tsunade gets to keep whining about a dead brother and lover, that died before MOST OF THE CHARACTERS WERE EVEN BORN!(the brother thing sucks, but seems kinda a common occurrence in leaf.. The lover?.. Just PICK ANOTHER).
6/28/2024 c15 DarkHunter10
"the odds of the two meeting during these exams are minimal at best"? SERIOUSLY? NOBODY IS THAT STUPID! How does the third figure that?(tea leaves? Throwing darts at a dart board? tarot cards? It's most CERTAINLY NOT logic).. It's the PRIME TIME that they WOULD meet... Lack of security, LOADS of unknown people coming into the village... Putting naruto up in a neon light to the scrutiny and notice of every village, for some WEIRD reason... YEAH it's nearly GUARANTEED... I know the third is PRETTY STUPID and suffering from Alzheimer's Disease.. But you'd think SOMEONE would point out how faulty this thinking is. Isn't the UCHIHA supposed to be the "bait"? Considering that it's his eyes that KINDA factor into Orochimaru's LIFE LONG DREAM/AMBITION? So TWO baits? That's PRETTY STUPID too. (not to mention, A GREAT WASTE OF RESOURCES)
"What would you have me do instead?".. Well a FEW suggestions come to mind FAIRLY quickly (as in with very little thought involved)... Kill orochimaru (or seal him).. Snatch up garaa while he's in the forest and SEAL HIM, kill the armies that have to AMASS around the village before they do anything... Use "SHARRINGAN kakashi" on the Ichibi... CANCEL the exams... Snatch Kabuto up... There is half a dozen better plans that took about 4 seconds to think of. "any attack would be considered an act that would potentially drag... etc".. Um AREN'T THEY doing an "act of war" already? Seems to me, Orochi and co. have already moved PAST "potentially"... Into "yeah, it's an act of war"... FINDING orochi before the battle, would be impossible? STICK CLOSE TO THE "BAITS", isn't that the POINT OF HAVING THEM! That's why it's STUPID TO HAVE TWO! The "logic" here, is really non-existent. And no, Orochimaru hasn't "outdone himself".. It's a PRETTY STRAIGHTFORWARD play... It's just konoha keeps letting him DO TOO MUCH...
"the odds of the two meeting during these exams are minimal at best"? SERIOUSLY? NOBODY IS THAT STUPID! How does the third figure that?(tea leaves? Throwing darts at a dart board? tarot cards? It's most CERTAINLY NOT logic).. It's the PRIME TIME that they WOULD meet... Lack of security, LOADS of unknown people coming into the village... Putting naruto up in a neon light to the scrutiny and notice of every village, for some WEIRD reason... YEAH it's nearly GUARANTEED... I know the third is PRETTY STUPID and suffering from Alzheimer's Disease.. But you'd think SOMEONE would point out how faulty this thinking is. Isn't the UCHIHA supposed to be the "bait"? Considering that it's his eyes that KINDA factor into Orochimaru's LIFE LONG DREAM/AMBITION? So TWO baits? That's PRETTY STUPID too. (not to mention, A GREAT WASTE OF RESOURCES)
"What would you have me do instead?".. Well a FEW suggestions come to mind FAIRLY quickly (as in with very little thought involved)... Kill orochimaru (or seal him).. Snatch up garaa while he's in the forest and SEAL HIM, kill the armies that have to AMASS around the village before they do anything... Use "SHARRINGAN kakashi" on the Ichibi... CANCEL the exams... Snatch Kabuto up... There is half a dozen better plans that took about 4 seconds to think of. "any attack would be considered an act that would potentially drag... etc".. Um AREN'T THEY doing an "act of war" already? Seems to me, Orochi and co. have already moved PAST "potentially"... Into "yeah, it's an act of war"... FINDING orochi before the battle, would be impossible? STICK CLOSE TO THE "BAITS", isn't that the POINT OF HAVING THEM! That's why it's STUPID TO HAVE TWO! The "logic" here, is really non-existent. And no, Orochimaru hasn't "outdone himself".. It's a PRETTY STRAIGHTFORWARD play... It's just konoha keeps letting him DO TOO MUCH...
6/27/2024 c25 Vegeta - SSGSS
Had to give this a reread after you updated Nightfall. Man, I just binged this too hard, but it was awesome to jump back into this. Awesome. Can't wait to head back to Nightfall!
Had to give this a reread after you updated Nightfall. Man, I just binged this too hard, but it was awesome to jump back into this. Awesome. Can't wait to head back to Nightfall!
6/27/2024 c14 DarkHunter10
Well you've got Kabuto as moronic as ever... By moronic, what I mean is that it wouldn't MATTER how many times Kabuto took the exam.. He shouldn't have info on nins THAT HAVEN'T BEEN THERE BEFORE... It blows his entire story, straight to hell.. How can "collect info each time he has failed" if the people he HAS info on, haven't been there?! It makes the entire argument fall to pieces.. Not only that, but how would a GENNIN have information from ANOTHER village? He has GOT to be the worst "spy" I've ever seen. AND then THERE IS OROCHI who is EVEN WORSE at the whole thing... Only ONE person, PRECISELY ONE person uses the whole "tongue lengthening jutsu" thing...IN ALL OF THE ELEMENTAL NATIONS.. and yet ANKO, ANKO of ALL people, failed to instantly grasp it was orochimaru.. The one she supposedly HATES ABOVE ALL others... The one she has devoted her life to destroying..The one she learned from and she's the ONE JOUNIN who would KNOW only orochimaru uses that ridicules tongue thing... MISSES IT when in PHYSICAL contact with him. I always just thought this scene should be deleted... It just makes konoha look SO DUMB... And doesn't REALLY do anything except scream.. "this village is incompetent" and "orochimaru ISN'T a genius... Just others are BELOW average". It really just hurts ALL characters involved. *almost as much as the hokages' edo tensei scene latter.. That one's pretty bad too.. With Orochimaru AND the third not knowing how a jutsu works... While fighting on top of building, that NOBODY seems to think to bust up through.*
Well you've got Kabuto as moronic as ever... By moronic, what I mean is that it wouldn't MATTER how many times Kabuto took the exam.. He shouldn't have info on nins THAT HAVEN'T BEEN THERE BEFORE... It blows his entire story, straight to hell.. How can "collect info each time he has failed" if the people he HAS info on, haven't been there?! It makes the entire argument fall to pieces.. Not only that, but how would a GENNIN have information from ANOTHER village? He has GOT to be the worst "spy" I've ever seen. AND then THERE IS OROCHI who is EVEN WORSE at the whole thing... Only ONE person, PRECISELY ONE person uses the whole "tongue lengthening jutsu" thing...IN ALL OF THE ELEMENTAL NATIONS.. and yet ANKO, ANKO of ALL people, failed to instantly grasp it was orochimaru.. The one she supposedly HATES ABOVE ALL others... The one she has devoted her life to destroying..The one she learned from and she's the ONE JOUNIN who would KNOW only orochimaru uses that ridicules tongue thing... MISSES IT when in PHYSICAL contact with him. I always just thought this scene should be deleted... It just makes konoha look SO DUMB... And doesn't REALLY do anything except scream.. "this village is incompetent" and "orochimaru ISN'T a genius... Just others are BELOW average". It really just hurts ALL characters involved. *almost as much as the hokages' edo tensei scene latter.. That one's pretty bad too.. With Orochimaru AND the third not knowing how a jutsu works... While fighting on top of building, that NOBODY seems to think to bust up through.*
6/27/2024 c13 DarkHunter10
I've honestly never understood the intellegence behind putting naruto in the chunin exams AT ALL, it's always seemed a very stupid decision... That really doesn't "pay off" as far as risk/reward... Number 1. The jinchuriki are supposed to be secret from the other villages... But naruto is ALWAYS going to have to use his tailed beast... So that blows that COMPLETELY out of the water.. Number 2. Naruto LOOKS exactly like minato and has the last name uzumaki... THIS IS ALL KINDS OF STUPIDITY, if the idea was supposed to be "keep naruto and his heritage a secret from the rest of the world"... It's ANNOUNCING it with a CLARION CALL!. Then there is the problem number 3. Kumo went AFTER kushina BECAUSE she was an uzumaki.. Now the "dead" clan has ANOTHER scion... Even if people don't put the connection together with the fourth... You have AT LEAST one village THAT WANTS AN UZUMAKI! Maybe ANNOUNCING to the whole world at once who he is.. Isn't that "great an idea"...Just seems FOOLISH to "hide" him for SO LONG and for a FIRST outting?... You ANNOUNCE HIM TO EVERYONE AT ONCE!
Why would naruto need to "complete the elemental conditioning tests for the Fire element before he would be ready to try any of those"? He's already DONE the grand fireball jutsu... (or did you forget?)... He did it against yammato.. He doesn't NEED to shape his chakra to the element... He's got enough to just "bull" his way through. Same with Earth (that he's supposed to have like 3 of those jutsu...since chapter 1! But we've never seen em').
No, the uchiha's insanity is MUCH different.. The Uchihas' is HEREDITARY, like the pink eye... It's a "dark, evil, all CONSUMING" insanity that really doesn't have a whole lot in common with most shinobis'... That's just mental stress, that snapped something...The uchiha's is an inbred holdover from Madara, or Indra.. That PROBABLY should've been PUT DOWN several generations ago. But hey.. Konoha's BRILLIANCE, once more shining through.
I've honestly never understood the intellegence behind putting naruto in the chunin exams AT ALL, it's always seemed a very stupid decision... That really doesn't "pay off" as far as risk/reward... Number 1. The jinchuriki are supposed to be secret from the other villages... But naruto is ALWAYS going to have to use his tailed beast... So that blows that COMPLETELY out of the water.. Number 2. Naruto LOOKS exactly like minato and has the last name uzumaki... THIS IS ALL KINDS OF STUPIDITY, if the idea was supposed to be "keep naruto and his heritage a secret from the rest of the world"... It's ANNOUNCING it with a CLARION CALL!. Then there is the problem number 3. Kumo went AFTER kushina BECAUSE she was an uzumaki.. Now the "dead" clan has ANOTHER scion... Even if people don't put the connection together with the fourth... You have AT LEAST one village THAT WANTS AN UZUMAKI! Maybe ANNOUNCING to the whole world at once who he is.. Isn't that "great an idea"...Just seems FOOLISH to "hide" him for SO LONG and for a FIRST outting?... You ANNOUNCE HIM TO EVERYONE AT ONCE!
Why would naruto need to "complete the elemental conditioning tests for the Fire element before he would be ready to try any of those"? He's already DONE the grand fireball jutsu... (or did you forget?)... He did it against yammato.. He doesn't NEED to shape his chakra to the element... He's got enough to just "bull" his way through. Same with Earth (that he's supposed to have like 3 of those jutsu...since chapter 1! But we've never seen em').
No, the uchiha's insanity is MUCH different.. The Uchihas' is HEREDITARY, like the pink eye... It's a "dark, evil, all CONSUMING" insanity that really doesn't have a whole lot in common with most shinobis'... That's just mental stress, that snapped something...The uchiha's is an inbred holdover from Madara, or Indra.. That PROBABLY should've been PUT DOWN several generations ago. But hey.. Konoha's BRILLIANCE, once more shining through.
6/27/2024 c12 
10Wolfone10
RULE NUMBER 1 (apparently)... If you are a jounin, NEVER ask for naruto's "help" when doing a fight with a similarly ranked opponent... He's got a VERY BAD "track record".. First Asuma, now Kurenai... He's not good at "team playing" apparently and it ends badly for the jounin.. Either have him stay OUTTA the way completely, or STAND BACK and have HIM "body" the opponent. Naruto, along with being ENTIRELY too "skittish".. Also seems to be the OPPOSITE of a "good luck" charm.
For the first time since his first meeting with zabuzza he was less confident in himself to... Um not to be overly critical, But that was his ACTUAL LAST FIGHT... So basically he's only been "confident" when he's NOT FIGHTING ANYONE! Which is not a good thing. Also you gotta think after THIS MISSION goes "pear shaped" too.. Um, the hokage (and the elders) shouldn't let this boy OUTTA THE VILLAGE for QUITE a while (they kinda can't afford it, in terms of jounin)
I like "feral naruto"... "what have I done"? PRECISELY what he's SUPPOSED to do... I'm not entirely sure what he was expecting... Just "get over it", wasn't HE the one that kept telling people that "ninja kill"? Well, then so be it... Does it REALLY matter if it's claws, kunai or jutsu that take the lives? DEAD IS DEAD.. And ninja "kill for coin"... So there is ALWAYS going to be SOMEONE that's gonna pay to put someone else to eternal sleep.. This is what naruto SIGNED UP FOR!
10Wolfone10RULE NUMBER 1 (apparently)... If you are a jounin, NEVER ask for naruto's "help" when doing a fight with a similarly ranked opponent... He's got a VERY BAD "track record".. First Asuma, now Kurenai... He's not good at "team playing" apparently and it ends badly for the jounin.. Either have him stay OUTTA the way completely, or STAND BACK and have HIM "body" the opponent. Naruto, along with being ENTIRELY too "skittish".. Also seems to be the OPPOSITE of a "good luck" charm.
For the first time since his first meeting with zabuzza he was less confident in himself to... Um not to be overly critical, But that was his ACTUAL LAST FIGHT... So basically he's only been "confident" when he's NOT FIGHTING ANYONE! Which is not a good thing. Also you gotta think after THIS MISSION goes "pear shaped" too.. Um, the hokage (and the elders) shouldn't let this boy OUTTA THE VILLAGE for QUITE a while (they kinda can't afford it, in terms of jounin)
I like "feral naruto"... "what have I done"? PRECISELY what he's SUPPOSED to do... I'm not entirely sure what he was expecting... Just "get over it", wasn't HE the one that kept telling people that "ninja kill"? Well, then so be it... Does it REALLY matter if it's claws, kunai or jutsu that take the lives? DEAD IS DEAD.. And ninja "kill for coin"... So there is ALWAYS going to be SOMEONE that's gonna pay to put someone else to eternal sleep.. This is what naruto SIGNED UP FOR!
6/27/2024 c11 Wolfone10
"sarutobi was no fool"... We can agree to DISAGREE on this point, I think.
You know if naruto is SO skittish about sharringans? Maybe he should stock up on: tear gas, pepper bombs, flash-tags, ground glass powder, smoke bombs, pollen bombs, acid spray, venom jets, etc.. ALL OF WHICH CAN EASILY DESTROY a sharringan users' ability to fight! And can temporarily or PERMANENTLY destroy those pink eyes... There are so many ways to permanently BLIND those eyes, that I just CANNOT see them as a "threat", let alone believe anyone competent would be TERRIFIED of them for YEARS... Isn't naruto a "prankster"? So shouldn't at LEAST SOME of these things have occurred to him? Heck, even a paint or GLUE bomb would be devastating if triggered in the face of an Uchiha.
I think the main problem with a LOT of the ninja and even Kyuubi here, is that they are trying to fight and just kill the uchihas as ONE entity... "beat the person" kinda thing..Well with the amount of plot armor that the uchiha's wear (all of them) that's pretty difficult... It's also unneeded... Don't fight the "whole", fight the "pieces".. All the above ways disable or destroy the EYES of the opponent.. Well the sharringan is about the ONLY thing powerful to ANY OF THEM... Remove those and killing/beating the rest of the "whole" becomes child's play even for a gennin. All kyuubi would have had to do is "chakra flare" it's chakra YEARS ago and it could have "aced" Madara or Obitdo quite quickly.. But that's not exactly an attack.. Other then "blinding", it doesn't really do anything.. So it probably never entered into kyuubi's head.. Unlike a bijuu bomb.
Wow, you know, you've written konoha shinobi as PRETTY INCOMPETENT... EVERY SINGLE fight they are in with someone of equal rank... THEY LOSE! That's kinda pathetic really... Makes one wonder HOW IN THE HELL their village has continued to exist... Then there is the "I gotta bad feeling" that's getting about as cliche' as "DREAMS OF THE FUTURE".. So is naruto now CLAIRVOYANT or something? Your gonna burn through most of jounin characters at this rate (well, except bad guys... There are DOZENS of them)
"sarutobi was no fool"... We can agree to DISAGREE on this point, I think.
You know if naruto is SO skittish about sharringans? Maybe he should stock up on: tear gas, pepper bombs, flash-tags, ground glass powder, smoke bombs, pollen bombs, acid spray, venom jets, etc.. ALL OF WHICH CAN EASILY DESTROY a sharringan users' ability to fight! And can temporarily or PERMANENTLY destroy those pink eyes... There are so many ways to permanently BLIND those eyes, that I just CANNOT see them as a "threat", let alone believe anyone competent would be TERRIFIED of them for YEARS... Isn't naruto a "prankster"? So shouldn't at LEAST SOME of these things have occurred to him? Heck, even a paint or GLUE bomb would be devastating if triggered in the face of an Uchiha.
I think the main problem with a LOT of the ninja and even Kyuubi here, is that they are trying to fight and just kill the uchihas as ONE entity... "beat the person" kinda thing..Well with the amount of plot armor that the uchiha's wear (all of them) that's pretty difficult... It's also unneeded... Don't fight the "whole", fight the "pieces".. All the above ways disable or destroy the EYES of the opponent.. Well the sharringan is about the ONLY thing powerful to ANY OF THEM... Remove those and killing/beating the rest of the "whole" becomes child's play even for a gennin. All kyuubi would have had to do is "chakra flare" it's chakra YEARS ago and it could have "aced" Madara or Obitdo quite quickly.. But that's not exactly an attack.. Other then "blinding", it doesn't really do anything.. So it probably never entered into kyuubi's head.. Unlike a bijuu bomb.
Wow, you know, you've written konoha shinobi as PRETTY INCOMPETENT... EVERY SINGLE fight they are in with someone of equal rank... THEY LOSE! That's kinda pathetic really... Makes one wonder HOW IN THE HELL their village has continued to exist... Then there is the "I gotta bad feeling" that's getting about as cliche' as "DREAMS OF THE FUTURE".. So is naruto now CLAIRVOYANT or something? Your gonna burn through most of jounin characters at this rate (well, except bad guys... There are DOZENS of them)
6/27/2024 c10 Wolfone10
Naruto wasn't one for blatant stupidity in the face of a serious situation? How DOES he stand to stay in konoha? Blatant stupidity is almost konoha's CREED and MOTTO! Look even here at Sarutobi.. He wants to go on with "physical training"... WHY? Naruto is a jinchuriki with the reserves of an Uzumaki and learns at an accelerated rate..He now has the shadow clones and can make like hundreds if not THOUSANDS to ALSO speed along his learning... Doing more physical work is about the DUMBEST waste of a RARE if not UNIQUE resource I have ever seen.. But the hokage just wants a COPY of Rock Lee... For some DUMBASS reason (and has just wanted that since Asuma was teaching).. Minato was never known for his taijutsu.. NOBODY cares about that.. It probably wasn't even recorded.. He was known for DECIMATING an army with TWO jutsu! Now they have someone that has FAR MORE reserves AND the fox.. And instead of turning him into a ninjutsu specialist.. They have him BRUISING his hands, like ANY civilian can do! Blatant Stupidity? Yup that's a good term for it. If nothing else, have him learn sealing... It's in his blood too... Also, didn't Kiba and Ino supposedly ALREADY learn this shushin jutsu during wave.. It was kinda the reason they couldn't rough up bouncers remember?
Naruto wasn't one for blatant stupidity in the face of a serious situation? How DOES he stand to stay in konoha? Blatant stupidity is almost konoha's CREED and MOTTO! Look even here at Sarutobi.. He wants to go on with "physical training"... WHY? Naruto is a jinchuriki with the reserves of an Uzumaki and learns at an accelerated rate..He now has the shadow clones and can make like hundreds if not THOUSANDS to ALSO speed along his learning... Doing more physical work is about the DUMBEST waste of a RARE if not UNIQUE resource I have ever seen.. But the hokage just wants a COPY of Rock Lee... For some DUMBASS reason (and has just wanted that since Asuma was teaching).. Minato was never known for his taijutsu.. NOBODY cares about that.. It probably wasn't even recorded.. He was known for DECIMATING an army with TWO jutsu! Now they have someone that has FAR MORE reserves AND the fox.. And instead of turning him into a ninjutsu specialist.. They have him BRUISING his hands, like ANY civilian can do! Blatant Stupidity? Yup that's a good term for it. If nothing else, have him learn sealing... It's in his blood too... Also, didn't Kiba and Ino supposedly ALREADY learn this shushin jutsu during wave.. It was kinda the reason they couldn't rough up bouncers remember?
6/27/2024 c10 DarkHunter10
I KNEW you couldn't keep away from taijutsu... NO AUTHOR can.. It's MUCH simpler to have naruto's "training" always be a series of kicks, punches and throws then world breaking super powers... When you put in such an early chapter that naruto wouldn't have to worry about taijutsu anymore... I thought "well that's not going to last", and I WAS RIGHT! Giving naruto just training on jutsu makes him basically a GOD fairly quickly... He can just "super power" his way outta anything and most writers can't think up enough powers to make that viable anyway... So they ALWAYS fall back on either: "control" which gets really OLD since there are really only 3 exercises for that... AND TAIJUTSU because it's easy to write... It's just basically physical exercises... "busy work"... Considering HOW often it's done in this series, I'm SHOCKED that naruto isn't YOKED as f*ing hell by the time he is 15 and a MAN-MOUNTAIN by the fourth war. The guy should be a an UTTER GIANT... Or at least he should be Saitama (from one punch man) with all the physical exercises/katas EVERY author puts in... It's kinda funny, but BY THAT COIN... Authors should be MORE concerned with naruto learning jutsu and affinities then all the physical stuff.. Because he SHOULD be beating everyone in "one punch" with all the extra exercise. (anime logic) Just wait till "shadow clones" and naruto SHOULD be able to about master everything ninja related in a SINGLE year. (given the math.. such a *broken jutsu*).. BUT then again, by the end of the shinobi 4th war (which is AT AN END 4 2/3 years from where your story is NOW) Naruto has ALL chakra affinities, yin, yang, yin-yang affinity AND half a dozen kekkei genkai... AND THAT'S CANON.. You wanted him "better" in this one, according to the synopses... That's gonna take a LOT of "rapid fire" upgrades that have nothing to do with how he throws a punch or how many sit ups he can do in 20 minutes.
I KNEW you couldn't keep away from taijutsu... NO AUTHOR can.. It's MUCH simpler to have naruto's "training" always be a series of kicks, punches and throws then world breaking super powers... When you put in such an early chapter that naruto wouldn't have to worry about taijutsu anymore... I thought "well that's not going to last", and I WAS RIGHT! Giving naruto just training on jutsu makes him basically a GOD fairly quickly... He can just "super power" his way outta anything and most writers can't think up enough powers to make that viable anyway... So they ALWAYS fall back on either: "control" which gets really OLD since there are really only 3 exercises for that... AND TAIJUTSU because it's easy to write... It's just basically physical exercises... "busy work"... Considering HOW often it's done in this series, I'm SHOCKED that naruto isn't YOKED as f*ing hell by the time he is 15 and a MAN-MOUNTAIN by the fourth war. The guy should be a an UTTER GIANT... Or at least he should be Saitama (from one punch man) with all the physical exercises/katas EVERY author puts in... It's kinda funny, but BY THAT COIN... Authors should be MORE concerned with naruto learning jutsu and affinities then all the physical stuff.. Because he SHOULD be beating everyone in "one punch" with all the extra exercise. (anime logic) Just wait till "shadow clones" and naruto SHOULD be able to about master everything ninja related in a SINGLE year. (given the math.. such a *broken jutsu*).. BUT then again, by the end of the shinobi 4th war (which is AT AN END 4 2/3 years from where your story is NOW) Naruto has ALL chakra affinities, yin, yang, yin-yang affinity AND half a dozen kekkei genkai... AND THAT'S CANON.. You wanted him "better" in this one, according to the synopses... That's gonna take a LOT of "rapid fire" upgrades that have nothing to do with how he throws a punch or how many sit ups he can do in 20 minutes.
6/26/2024 c7 DarkHunter10
One has to wonder if all these "training" chapters are REALLY supposed to be taken seriously... They don't seem to be doing naruto a lot of good, if he was struggling so HARD CORE against one pathetic little drop out genin! (and it was a two-on-one fight, with ino helping him)... Just seems kinda LAUGHABLE that he "trains" all the time, is supposed to be SO GOOD at "tai jutsu" and all.. But struggles THAT HARD CORE against someone that SHOULD have been a "flea"... I did notice though, you didn't have naruto remove ANY of his seals.. Didn't drop any of the weights and used NO jutsu... WHY? That's what the fights ALWAYS come down to, in the series... JUTSU BATTLES... Always.
Ino shouldn't REALLY be "catching up" with naruto during these training sessions.. The Uzumaki stamina and chakra are already KNOWN as kekkei genkai... So it should be kinda impossible. (really inconsistent in canon, but it IS known as something FOR THAT CLAN...The fox is just "icing on top of the cupcake").
Never really understood how "holding someone hostage" is supposed to work in the ninja world... Yes, you could have naruto substitute with the victim (like you have a couple times in this one) and then clobber/kill the attacker.. BUT, he could JUST AS EASILY substitute with the attacker.. Then they are just standing there, out in the open, with NOTHING.. Just an easy target, while naruto is RIGHT NEXT to the victim...SO, no hope of regaining them... Just seems a very STUPID tactic against ninja.. But then again for ANY ronin, or civilians, the ONLY logical thing to do when you see a ninja (or group of ninja) come into to town.. Is just RUN THE OTHER WAY AND NEVER COME BACK... It's really the ONLY thing they can do, if they don't have a suicide wish. Like gato here.. "group of ninja come to town"? Time to pack up and pick another town.
One has to wonder if all these "training" chapters are REALLY supposed to be taken seriously... They don't seem to be doing naruto a lot of good, if he was struggling so HARD CORE against one pathetic little drop out genin! (and it was a two-on-one fight, with ino helping him)... Just seems kinda LAUGHABLE that he "trains" all the time, is supposed to be SO GOOD at "tai jutsu" and all.. But struggles THAT HARD CORE against someone that SHOULD have been a "flea"... I did notice though, you didn't have naruto remove ANY of his seals.. Didn't drop any of the weights and used NO jutsu... WHY? That's what the fights ALWAYS come down to, in the series... JUTSU BATTLES... Always.
Ino shouldn't REALLY be "catching up" with naruto during these training sessions.. The Uzumaki stamina and chakra are already KNOWN as kekkei genkai... So it should be kinda impossible. (really inconsistent in canon, but it IS known as something FOR THAT CLAN...The fox is just "icing on top of the cupcake").
Never really understood how "holding someone hostage" is supposed to work in the ninja world... Yes, you could have naruto substitute with the victim (like you have a couple times in this one) and then clobber/kill the attacker.. BUT, he could JUST AS EASILY substitute with the attacker.. Then they are just standing there, out in the open, with NOTHING.. Just an easy target, while naruto is RIGHT NEXT to the victim...SO, no hope of regaining them... Just seems a very STUPID tactic against ninja.. But then again for ANY ronin, or civilians, the ONLY logical thing to do when you see a ninja (or group of ninja) come into to town.. Is just RUN THE OTHER WAY AND NEVER COME BACK... It's really the ONLY thing they can do, if they don't have a suicide wish. Like gato here.. "group of ninja come to town"? Time to pack up and pick another town.
6/26/2024 c6 DarkHunter10
"might makes right"... I have said that many times before with this series... Naruto really needs to GROW A SET! This sniveling naruto is very irritating. He's basically got an invincible demon in him, quit being SUCH a coward about 1 little f*ing enemy.. Naruto's ENTIRE LIFE, past this point, is basically ONE BATTLE AFTER ANOTHER. (he LIVES on the "edge of a knife"), so he REALLY needs to get PAST THIS pretty quick. If he's THIS afraid of some stupid ninja *one* and a midget?... He's gonna "fold like laundry" against the kyuubi itself! I think you "leaned in" a little too hard here.
Oh and naruto doesn't act "jaded", he acts "chicken-livered". I'm shocked he doesn't run screaming from his own shadow!.. And NO, you say "in his own way, he was a proactive person, a man of action"... No, he ISN'T... Training doesn't count.. That's BABY STEPS in a safe environment.. That's an UCHIHA.. You have naruto here, the same kind of cowardly, "hide under the bed, in his own home". kinda person... You seem to have him confused with the uchiha. (remember SASUKE was the one that almost committed "self-deletion" because of zabu's KI in canon, NOT naruto).. Naruto kinda "SHRUGS OFF" that kinda thing (more then likely because he's USED TO IT). Even in the forest of death against Orochi... Naruto was the only one who could MOVE... He wasn't impressed or intimidated. Here, he SHOULD be quite a bit LESS chicken shit.
Really, my only other complaint is that you REALLY have the team having a problem "walking and chewing bubble gum".. Doing two things at once seems QUITE BEYOND them... If naruto is contacting an ally? The rest of the world "zones out"(I have NO IDEA why, if it's a life-and-death struggle)... If he's following someone? "EVERYTHING ELSE IS GONE".. This is NOT A good trait for ninja, who have to do five or six things AT ONCE. (the team can't seem to handle 2!) What's worse, is this ISN'T a teachable or learnable skill.. You either CAN multi-task, or you CANNOT. There is a difference between O.P. and "nerfing a character into the basement"... You might wanna hold back on "the bat" for a while.. While a few of these characters climb back up the steps to ground floor.
Oh yes, "zaubuzza's out of your league".. YES WE KNOW, you made it a POINT TO REITERATE THAT six times last chapter... We get it... He's outta naruto's league.. Until someone gets hurt(probably ino), naruto goes FOX and rips the ninja and his little "butter knife" to shreds, in the blink of an eye, with one hand.
"might makes right"... I have said that many times before with this series... Naruto really needs to GROW A SET! This sniveling naruto is very irritating. He's basically got an invincible demon in him, quit being SUCH a coward about 1 little f*ing enemy.. Naruto's ENTIRE LIFE, past this point, is basically ONE BATTLE AFTER ANOTHER. (he LIVES on the "edge of a knife"), so he REALLY needs to get PAST THIS pretty quick. If he's THIS afraid of some stupid ninja *one* and a midget?... He's gonna "fold like laundry" against the kyuubi itself! I think you "leaned in" a little too hard here.
Oh and naruto doesn't act "jaded", he acts "chicken-livered". I'm shocked he doesn't run screaming from his own shadow!.. And NO, you say "in his own way, he was a proactive person, a man of action"... No, he ISN'T... Training doesn't count.. That's BABY STEPS in a safe environment.. That's an UCHIHA.. You have naruto here, the same kind of cowardly, "hide under the bed, in his own home". kinda person... You seem to have him confused with the uchiha. (remember SASUKE was the one that almost committed "self-deletion" because of zabu's KI in canon, NOT naruto).. Naruto kinda "SHRUGS OFF" that kinda thing (more then likely because he's USED TO IT). Even in the forest of death against Orochi... Naruto was the only one who could MOVE... He wasn't impressed or intimidated. Here, he SHOULD be quite a bit LESS chicken shit.
Really, my only other complaint is that you REALLY have the team having a problem "walking and chewing bubble gum".. Doing two things at once seems QUITE BEYOND them... If naruto is contacting an ally? The rest of the world "zones out"(I have NO IDEA why, if it's a life-and-death struggle)... If he's following someone? "EVERYTHING ELSE IS GONE".. This is NOT A good trait for ninja, who have to do five or six things AT ONCE. (the team can't seem to handle 2!) What's worse, is this ISN'T a teachable or learnable skill.. You either CAN multi-task, or you CANNOT. There is a difference between O.P. and "nerfing a character into the basement"... You might wanna hold back on "the bat" for a while.. While a few of these characters climb back up the steps to ground floor.
Oh yes, "zaubuzza's out of your league".. YES WE KNOW, you made it a POINT TO REITERATE THAT six times last chapter... We get it... He's outta naruto's league.. Until someone gets hurt(probably ino), naruto goes FOX and rips the ninja and his little "butter knife" to shreds, in the blink of an eye, with one hand.
6/25/2024 c5 DarkHunter10
Konoha's "DOGMA" doesn't apply to Jinchuriki. Naruto (if he wants it or NOT) is SUPPOSED to be konoha "ULTIMATE WEAPON" that alone puts him ABOVE jounin. Also, I would say "rank" doesn't really mean a lot... Consider canon.. Naruto beat a "chunin" while technically have NO RANK AT ALL (so civilians) and then kicks Haku's behind.. COULD have tore zabuzza (a jounin) apart too. TECHNICALLY in canon, naruto was beating LEGENDS (madara, kakazu, etc) while a GENIN! So yeah, rank does NOT seem to amount to a pint of cold pee. (just more konoha garbage, that lets them "feel important" over others... Like "rookie of the year"... Konoha REALLY needs those little titles and ranks, because their ninja training isn't really that good)
Wow you got naruto so terrified of so many things, I am SHOCKED he can stand to see his own SHADOW without running in horror! He's scarred of the Akutski, he's scarred of the ninja he might face, he's scarred of himself and becoming numb, he's scarred of caring TOO MUCH and becoming like the fox, he's scarred of the fox (which REALLY MAKES NO SENSE), This much fear should make it VERY EASY for Kurama to take over... In fact, hope he does... Don't really like cringing cowards as protagonists. Just makes me wonder if "shinobi" was really a good "career choice" for this naruto.
"I'm the BEST at what I do"? Ya know, knowing about the existence of the Akatsuki and how powerful they are, makes that statement LAUGHABLE to everyone reading it. That's without taking into account.. Morimodo (the demon from Ogre country), the preacher from Gelell, the alien on the moon, the zero tails, AND assorted monsters demons from shippuden filler... ALL of those would use zabu as a "toothpick" after eating a village. (speaking of which.. Zetsu is ACTUALLY a cannibal that EATS the people the akatsuki catch... ALL these make zabu look kinda ridicules, with his wolverine quote)
Konoha's "DOGMA" doesn't apply to Jinchuriki. Naruto (if he wants it or NOT) is SUPPOSED to be konoha "ULTIMATE WEAPON" that alone puts him ABOVE jounin. Also, I would say "rank" doesn't really mean a lot... Consider canon.. Naruto beat a "chunin" while technically have NO RANK AT ALL (so civilians) and then kicks Haku's behind.. COULD have tore zabuzza (a jounin) apart too. TECHNICALLY in canon, naruto was beating LEGENDS (madara, kakazu, etc) while a GENIN! So yeah, rank does NOT seem to amount to a pint of cold pee. (just more konoha garbage, that lets them "feel important" over others... Like "rookie of the year"... Konoha REALLY needs those little titles and ranks, because their ninja training isn't really that good)
Wow you got naruto so terrified of so many things, I am SHOCKED he can stand to see his own SHADOW without running in horror! He's scarred of the Akutski, he's scarred of the ninja he might face, he's scarred of himself and becoming numb, he's scarred of caring TOO MUCH and becoming like the fox, he's scarred of the fox (which REALLY MAKES NO SENSE), This much fear should make it VERY EASY for Kurama to take over... In fact, hope he does... Don't really like cringing cowards as protagonists. Just makes me wonder if "shinobi" was really a good "career choice" for this naruto.
"I'm the BEST at what I do"? Ya know, knowing about the existence of the Akatsuki and how powerful they are, makes that statement LAUGHABLE to everyone reading it. That's without taking into account.. Morimodo (the demon from Ogre country), the preacher from Gelell, the alien on the moon, the zero tails, AND assorted monsters demons from shippuden filler... ALL of those would use zabu as a "toothpick" after eating a village. (speaking of which.. Zetsu is ACTUALLY a cannibal that EATS the people the akatsuki catch... ALL these make zabu look kinda ridicules, with his wolverine quote)
6/20/2024 c2 DarkHunter10
I don't see much of a difference between here and canon... His growth is STILL "stunted". And it STILL DOESN'T MAKE SENSE. (don't worry though... It doesn't in canon either).
"steal a highly guarded artifact"... If MIZUKI of ALL people stole it? It was not NEARLY as "highly guarded" as naruto seems to think it was. Naruto IN CANON... Beat Mizuki (when mizuki was going all out) WITH NO TRAINING AT ALL, as AN ACADEMY WASH-OUT. Mizuki is a JOKE! The fact that he had an ENTIRE "experimental curse seal formula" somehow tattooed ALL over HIS ENTIRE BACK, and NOBODY noticed it, in all the time he was in a prison, SHOWS even the CANON writer thought of him as NOTHING but a joke! (He then proceeded to make the "curse seal potion".. In the toilet of his cell.. And it killed him. *to repeat... A cuse seal, chakra "magic potion" made in a prison toilet! From a TATTOO nobody noticed, that covered HIS WHOLE BACK! Made with ingredients he smuggled into prison with no allies, and hid THEM too! NOBODY can take this guy seriously.. I dunno why FF authors seem to want to.*) (he might as well be a character that "slipped on a banana peel, and knocked himself out". Then "built a cannon in jail that he used to shoot himself to the moon, only to find out, there isn't air in space and die on the trip!" It makes about as much sense, and has the same level of absurdity!).. So yeah "a SKILLED PROFESSIONAL"? That naruto is worried about here? ROFL suuuuuurrrrrrre. And the Kazekage has some nice lush, verdant farmland to sell him too.
I don't see much of a difference between here and canon... His growth is STILL "stunted". And it STILL DOESN'T MAKE SENSE. (don't worry though... It doesn't in canon either).
"steal a highly guarded artifact"... If MIZUKI of ALL people stole it? It was not NEARLY as "highly guarded" as naruto seems to think it was. Naruto IN CANON... Beat Mizuki (when mizuki was going all out) WITH NO TRAINING AT ALL, as AN ACADEMY WASH-OUT. Mizuki is a JOKE! The fact that he had an ENTIRE "experimental curse seal formula" somehow tattooed ALL over HIS ENTIRE BACK, and NOBODY noticed it, in all the time he was in a prison, SHOWS even the CANON writer thought of him as NOTHING but a joke! (He then proceeded to make the "curse seal potion".. In the toilet of his cell.. And it killed him. *to repeat... A cuse seal, chakra "magic potion" made in a prison toilet! From a TATTOO nobody noticed, that covered HIS WHOLE BACK! Made with ingredients he smuggled into prison with no allies, and hid THEM too! NOBODY can take this guy seriously.. I dunno why FF authors seem to want to.*) (he might as well be a character that "slipped on a banana peel, and knocked himself out". Then "built a cannon in jail that he used to shoot himself to the moon, only to find out, there isn't air in space and die on the trip!" It makes about as much sense, and has the same level of absurdity!).. So yeah "a SKILLED PROFESSIONAL"? That naruto is worried about here? ROFL suuuuuurrrrrrre. And the Kazekage has some nice lush, verdant farmland to sell him too.
6/20/2024 c1 DarkHunter10
They were talking about the first's wife.. AND NOBODY RECOGNIZED THE NAME UZUMAKI? I doubt very seriously that naruto wouldn't have "perked up" AT HIS OWN NAME! Or shika wouldn't have noticed.. And they would have HAD to say her name... They know what color underwear the first was wearing on the 1st day of the second month of the 4th year of the second shinobi war, after all! Saying they didn't say her name would have thrown up ALL KINDS of "red flags" to even KIDS! I think they just keep repeating the battles and history OF THEIR nins... (NOT the wives or ANYONE else) ad nauseam... THUS "teaching" the kids absolutely NOTHING but through CONSTANT repetition, just brow-beating them into BRAIN-WASHING that "konoha is great". (nothing helpful.. NOTHING useful... NOTHING that has any bearing on their careers or world... JUST PLATITUDES).
They were talking about the first's wife.. AND NOBODY RECOGNIZED THE NAME UZUMAKI? I doubt very seriously that naruto wouldn't have "perked up" AT HIS OWN NAME! Or shika wouldn't have noticed.. And they would have HAD to say her name... They know what color underwear the first was wearing on the 1st day of the second month of the 4th year of the second shinobi war, after all! Saying they didn't say her name would have thrown up ALL KINDS of "red flags" to even KIDS! I think they just keep repeating the battles and history OF THEIR nins... (NOT the wives or ANYONE else) ad nauseam... THUS "teaching" the kids absolutely NOTHING but through CONSTANT repetition, just brow-beating them into BRAIN-WASHING that "konoha is great". (nothing helpful.. NOTHING useful... NOTHING that has any bearing on their careers or world... JUST PLATITUDES).