for Not Enough1/24/2013 c1 
48Catmint
This is really nice writing. Painful and heartwrenching, you've captured the emotions perfectly. Wonderfully sweet and tender at the end.
48CatmintThis is really nice writing. Painful and heartwrenching, you've captured the emotions perfectly. Wonderfully sweet and tender at the end.
1/29/2011 c1 10knivespast
I like the concept and the characterization. My only criticism is that at the beginning, you repeatedly use the word uncomprehend-able, which is not actually a word. The word you were looking for is incomprehensible. Otherwise, well done!
10knivespastI like the concept and the characterization. My only criticism is that at the beginning, you repeatedly use the word uncomprehend-able, which is not actually a word. The word you were looking for is incomprehensible. Otherwise, well done!
11/11/2010 c1 18Liraeyn
I had to laugh at the end. That is so NCIS of you, to kill the mood like that. I think they're best kill-the-mood moment has to be the beginning of Kill Ari, part 2. That's hilarious.
18LiraeynI had to laugh at the end. That is so NCIS of you, to kill the mood like that. I think they're best kill-the-mood moment has to be the beginning of Kill Ari, part 2. That's hilarious.
11/8/2010 c1 8beautifulmind016
That was wonderful! You really do need to add more to it though, it just has an "unfinished" feeling. Just one or two more chapters to wrap it up :)
8beautifulmind016That was wonderful! You really do need to add more to it though, it just has an "unfinished" feeling. Just one or two more chapters to wrap it up :)
11/2/2010 c1 11Searching4sanity
It was so sad, yet funny at the end in an ironic Gibbs head lapping kind of way!
11Searching4sanityIt was so sad, yet funny at the end in an ironic Gibbs head lapping kind of way!
11/2/2010 c1 Betherzz
good story ;) glad it ended with a little gibbs slap to make us smile just a little...
good story ;) glad it ended with a little gibbs slap to make us smile just a little...
11/2/2010 c1 22rumpleswagskin
Okay...normally there are the people that say "Ohh sequel, extra chapter, continue," and I am the one that goes "No, some things are better left off as a one-shot."
This is an exception.
The story isn't finished! There's more...I know it! At least make it a two-shot or a three-shot or something! It needs to have a conclusion, an ending...something! It's not over!
Brilliant writing though :)
22rumpleswagskinOkay...normally there are the people that say "Ohh sequel, extra chapter, continue," and I am the one that goes "No, some things are better left off as a one-shot."
This is an exception.
The story isn't finished! There's more...I know it! At least make it a two-shot or a three-shot or something! It needs to have a conclusion, an ending...something! It's not over!
Brilliant writing though :)
11/1/2010 c1 3weallliveincastles
Liv,
Ziva reminds me of someone. Three guesses who. In other news, it was really good! Also sad, but at least gibbs knocked some sense into her in the end!
~ dftbamy
3weallliveincastlesLiv,
Ziva reminds me of someone. Three guesses who. In other news, it was really good! Also sad, but at least gibbs knocked some sense into her in the end!
~ dftbamy