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7CSpacian
Hey! I didn't even know you started your own story! So, yeah...this is my first review. I like it so far, keep up the good work with everything!
Good luck with the writing.
7CSpacianHey! I didn't even know you started your own story! So, yeah...this is my first review. I like it so far, keep up the good work with everything!
Good luck with the writing.
8/22/2011 c6 5fallen-wolfborn
Bounty/Epithet: 20,000 ‘Powder Keg’
Name: Gola ‘Powder Keg’ Church – 20,000
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Birthday: 9th October
Personality: Gola is the sort of person that isn’t fearless; it’s just that dangerous things don’t really register. He knows his limits and is confident in them. Sarcasm is one of his best friends. It takes a hell of a lot to anger him but when he is, the Molotovs start flying. The only sure fire way to annoy him is to interrupt him when he is watching the clouds. He is incredibly lazy and only works hard at the things he enjoys.
Appearance: Gola’s skin is darkly tanned and he is athletic. He isn’t the tallest at about 5’6, and he has dark brown hair tied back into dreadlocks and secured with a head wrap. His eyes are dark blue and he has three silver studs in his left ear and a single gold hoop in his right.
He normally wears baggy jeans secured with a rope belt and a sleeveless red chequed shirt. His signature fingerless sharkskin gloves are always somewhere on his person. Attached to the rope belt is a small sack of beli, a canteen of palm resin and a whalebone powder flask from where he gets his nickname.
Likes: Anyone who makes the effort to get to know his, the few people who know they’re the best and accept it humbly, or the others who want to be the best and are prepared to fight for their lives to get there. He also enjoys music, drinking and reading and won’t say no to a sword fight. As far as food goes, the spicier, the better.
Dislikes: He harbours a deep dislike for the World Nobility. He sees them as stuck-up, inbred and pathetic. However he only sees the Marines as misguided idiots. To him there is no such thing as absolute justice, just victims, criminals and the bumbling morons who think they have it sorted out. He really doesn’t seawater for obvious reasons and doesn’t like Sea Kings because they’re way too big to cook in his opinion.
Strengths: Completely calm in any battle. He’s a very, very good listener.
Weaknesses: Gola is one lazy bastard if he can get away with it.
History: Gola doesn’t know who his parents were, only that he thinks his father was a marine. He was found on the beach of Loguetown at the age of three years old, a passenger ship having been wrecked during a storm the night before. He grew up quickly in the town and began working in the local tavern at age thirteen. At age fifteen, he bought fruit for the owner of the bar and ate one, not knowing it was a Devil Fruit until a patron groped a waitress and he punched him through a wall, blinding everyone in the bar. When the owner died four years later, Gola took over the bar renaming it ‘The Lucky Albatross’. He still works in the bar, but that’s the only thing holding him to Loguetown.
Affliation(s) and Position: Pirate. Lookout.
Idol: Fisher Tiger
Dream: All he really wants in life are a few bottles of whiskey, a pack of cigarettes and to be near the sea. A family would be nice but it doesn’t bother him. However he would like to sign on to a crew if nothing more than for the freedom and banter. In the back of his mind is a so-far small desire to burn down Mariejois to the ground.
Fighting Style:
-Weapons: Flintlock Pistol
-Devil Fruit: Gola has the power of the Flash Flash Fruit. This enables his to superheat his hands on command, creating a flash of blinding light.
-How: Gola normally uses this by coating his fingerless sharkskin gloves in palm resin and a thin film of gunpowder, which make for powerful and explosive punches.
Other: Gola will often be found sprawled out in the sun in the evening. If someone says something stupid or obvious he will remark on the ‘brilliance of the moron species’ or something to that effect.
5fallen-wolfbornBounty/Epithet: 20,000 ‘Powder Keg’
Name: Gola ‘Powder Keg’ Church – 20,000
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Birthday: 9th October
Personality: Gola is the sort of person that isn’t fearless; it’s just that dangerous things don’t really register. He knows his limits and is confident in them. Sarcasm is one of his best friends. It takes a hell of a lot to anger him but when he is, the Molotovs start flying. The only sure fire way to annoy him is to interrupt him when he is watching the clouds. He is incredibly lazy and only works hard at the things he enjoys.
Appearance: Gola’s skin is darkly tanned and he is athletic. He isn’t the tallest at about 5’6, and he has dark brown hair tied back into dreadlocks and secured with a head wrap. His eyes are dark blue and he has three silver studs in his left ear and a single gold hoop in his right.
He normally wears baggy jeans secured with a rope belt and a sleeveless red chequed shirt. His signature fingerless sharkskin gloves are always somewhere on his person. Attached to the rope belt is a small sack of beli, a canteen of palm resin and a whalebone powder flask from where he gets his nickname.
Likes: Anyone who makes the effort to get to know his, the few people who know they’re the best and accept it humbly, or the others who want to be the best and are prepared to fight for their lives to get there. He also enjoys music, drinking and reading and won’t say no to a sword fight. As far as food goes, the spicier, the better.
Dislikes: He harbours a deep dislike for the World Nobility. He sees them as stuck-up, inbred and pathetic. However he only sees the Marines as misguided idiots. To him there is no such thing as absolute justice, just victims, criminals and the bumbling morons who think they have it sorted out. He really doesn’t seawater for obvious reasons and doesn’t like Sea Kings because they’re way too big to cook in his opinion.
Strengths: Completely calm in any battle. He’s a very, very good listener.
Weaknesses: Gola is one lazy bastard if he can get away with it.
History: Gola doesn’t know who his parents were, only that he thinks his father was a marine. He was found on the beach of Loguetown at the age of three years old, a passenger ship having been wrecked during a storm the night before. He grew up quickly in the town and began working in the local tavern at age thirteen. At age fifteen, he bought fruit for the owner of the bar and ate one, not knowing it was a Devil Fruit until a patron groped a waitress and he punched him through a wall, blinding everyone in the bar. When the owner died four years later, Gola took over the bar renaming it ‘The Lucky Albatross’. He still works in the bar, but that’s the only thing holding him to Loguetown.
Affliation(s) and Position: Pirate. Lookout.
Idol: Fisher Tiger
Dream: All he really wants in life are a few bottles of whiskey, a pack of cigarettes and to be near the sea. A family would be nice but it doesn’t bother him. However he would like to sign on to a crew if nothing more than for the freedom and banter. In the back of his mind is a so-far small desire to burn down Mariejois to the ground.
Fighting Style:
-Weapons: Flintlock Pistol
-Devil Fruit: Gola has the power of the Flash Flash Fruit. This enables his to superheat his hands on command, creating a flash of blinding light.
-How: Gola normally uses this by coating his fingerless sharkskin gloves in palm resin and a thin film of gunpowder, which make for powerful and explosive punches.
Other: Gola will often be found sprawled out in the sun in the evening. If someone says something stupid or obvious he will remark on the ‘brilliance of the moron species’ or something to that effect.
4/24/2011 c4 7Nezumimaru
Name: Johu Copper
Age: 29
Gender: Male
Race: Longarm
Affiliation: Bounty Hunter (teamed with Gaiko and Bam)
Appearance: Black hair tied into three long Chinese braids, a red Chinese style shirt with gold trim, black baggy pants, straw sandals.
History: Growing up, Johu always wanted to be a bounty hunter and catch bad guys for the glory. He tried making an agency in his teens, but did not accomplish much other than find lost toys and rescue pets stuck in trees. As he got older, he saw Marine corruption and pirate villainy, solidifying his belief that bounty hunters are the true law bringers in the world. The team he has made to catch pirates has yet to catch any, yet.
Personality: Highly intelligent,Johu thinks himself a genius, though due to his pride, many of his plans are usually too extravagant to work, causing him to move to a plan B, which is more realistic. When something goes his way by accident, he tries to pass it off as part of one of his plans, and is always trying to make himself look better or stronger than he really is. His greatest skill is the ability to make convincing disguises in a matter of minutes. He is also very concerned with the well-being of Gaiko and Bam, and has let many bounties get away to save them from danger.
Devil Fruit: Johu utilizes the Hebi Hebi No Mi: Model Cottonmouth, though most people mistake it for a Copperhead, given his surname. In hybrid and animal form he can secrete poison from his fangs, and in hybrid form gains claws that also secrete poison. He can control what kind of poison is used, from harmless knockout to pure acid. Also increases his reflexes and grants contortionist abilities in all forms.
Dream: to be a world famous bounty hunter.
Name: Gaiko Nure
Age: 27
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Affiliation: Bounty Hunter team with Johu and Bam
Appearance: neon green hair tied into several knots, brown eyes, white tank top(Double-D chest), tight blue jeans and blue tennis shoes. wears black formfitting gloves.
History: Gaiko has fabricated her past so many times, she no longer remembers what her true past is before joining up with Johu 4 years ago.
Personality: Very ditsy and not all too bright. Her redeeming qualities are her perky, up beat, never say die attitude and unending optimism, though is known to fret about her looks from time to time. Her greatet skill is her ability to generate sob stories and uses them to persuade people. Very close with her friends Johu and Bam.
Weapons: Gaiko uses a pair of bladed tonfas, and is skilled in their use. Can also deliver strong kicks. Has been seen doing various "Matrix" style movements in combat.
Dream: Same as Johu and Bam
Name: Bam Zilla
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Affiliation: Bounty Hunter team with Johu and Gaiko
Appearance: wears a simple brown shirt and blue overalls. Tan skin, bald with squinty eyes. 7'6" and 400 lbs of combined fat and muscle.
History: Bam drifted from town to town doing odd jobs that made use of his incredible strength and girth, never really thinking of anything other than the next job. That is until he met Johu, who invited him to join his bounty hunting team, and gave Bam a purpose in life: catch criminals and make the world a better place.
Personality: Like Gaiko, Bam is not the sharpest tool in the shed, but his size, strength and straightforwardness makes up for it. Completely loyal to Johu to a fault, willing does anything for him. Will go out of his way to protect animals, especially cute baby ones. Can be very gentle when he wants to be, and is surprisingly good at puzzles, and really likes Rubik's cubes, and has one he has solved dozens of times but still scrambles it and solves it again, just for fun. It's his most treasured possession. Close friends with Johu and Gaiko
Weapons: fights with a large morning star, using his size and power to keep an opponent off balanced. Known to lift three-story buildings over his head effortlessly.
Dream: Same as Gaiko and Johu
7NezumimaruName: Johu Copper
Age: 29
Gender: Male
Race: Longarm
Affiliation: Bounty Hunter (teamed with Gaiko and Bam)
Appearance: Black hair tied into three long Chinese braids, a red Chinese style shirt with gold trim, black baggy pants, straw sandals.
History: Growing up, Johu always wanted to be a bounty hunter and catch bad guys for the glory. He tried making an agency in his teens, but did not accomplish much other than find lost toys and rescue pets stuck in trees. As he got older, he saw Marine corruption and pirate villainy, solidifying his belief that bounty hunters are the true law bringers in the world. The team he has made to catch pirates has yet to catch any, yet.
Personality: Highly intelligent,Johu thinks himself a genius, though due to his pride, many of his plans are usually too extravagant to work, causing him to move to a plan B, which is more realistic. When something goes his way by accident, he tries to pass it off as part of one of his plans, and is always trying to make himself look better or stronger than he really is. His greatest skill is the ability to make convincing disguises in a matter of minutes. He is also very concerned with the well-being of Gaiko and Bam, and has let many bounties get away to save them from danger.
Devil Fruit: Johu utilizes the Hebi Hebi No Mi: Model Cottonmouth, though most people mistake it for a Copperhead, given his surname. In hybrid and animal form he can secrete poison from his fangs, and in hybrid form gains claws that also secrete poison. He can control what kind of poison is used, from harmless knockout to pure acid. Also increases his reflexes and grants contortionist abilities in all forms.
Dream: to be a world famous bounty hunter.
Name: Gaiko Nure
Age: 27
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Affiliation: Bounty Hunter team with Johu and Bam
Appearance: neon green hair tied into several knots, brown eyes, white tank top(Double-D chest), tight blue jeans and blue tennis shoes. wears black formfitting gloves.
History: Gaiko has fabricated her past so many times, she no longer remembers what her true past is before joining up with Johu 4 years ago.
Personality: Very ditsy and not all too bright. Her redeeming qualities are her perky, up beat, never say die attitude and unending optimism, though is known to fret about her looks from time to time. Her greatet skill is her ability to generate sob stories and uses them to persuade people. Very close with her friends Johu and Bam.
Weapons: Gaiko uses a pair of bladed tonfas, and is skilled in their use. Can also deliver strong kicks. Has been seen doing various "Matrix" style movements in combat.
Dream: Same as Johu and Bam
Name: Bam Zilla
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Affiliation: Bounty Hunter team with Johu and Gaiko
Appearance: wears a simple brown shirt and blue overalls. Tan skin, bald with squinty eyes. 7'6" and 400 lbs of combined fat and muscle.
History: Bam drifted from town to town doing odd jobs that made use of his incredible strength and girth, never really thinking of anything other than the next job. That is until he met Johu, who invited him to join his bounty hunting team, and gave Bam a purpose in life: catch criminals and make the world a better place.
Personality: Like Gaiko, Bam is not the sharpest tool in the shed, but his size, strength and straightforwardness makes up for it. Completely loyal to Johu to a fault, willing does anything for him. Will go out of his way to protect animals, especially cute baby ones. Can be very gentle when he wants to be, and is surprisingly good at puzzles, and really likes Rubik's cubes, and has one he has solved dozens of times but still scrambles it and solves it again, just for fun. It's his most treasured possession. Close friends with Johu and Gaiko
Weapons: fights with a large morning star, using his size and power to keep an opponent off balanced. Known to lift three-story buildings over his head effortlessly.
Dream: Same as Gaiko and Johu
4/24/2011 c5 Nezumimaru
Name: "Gladiator" Goro Machlu
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Race: Long-Arm
Description: Stands at 6'8" and has a very muscular frame and thick arms. Goro wears a black muscle shirt, camo pants, army boots and biker gloves. His jet black hair is styled into dreadlocks, and a soul patch on his chin. Has dark green eyes and a crooked nose.
Personality: Overall a nice enough guy, Goro is slightly socially awkward but tries to hide this by being overly confident and macho, so he's always trying to be the tough guy. He's slow to understand different customs and cultures of various islands and nations, but is very quick to pick up fighting techniques, tactics and battle strategies, and spot physical weak points in others. He's also barely literate and has strong feelings against slavery and so-called "nobles".
History: Taken from his home at a very young age, Goro was sold as a slave to a man who own gigantic ship that served as a mobile gladiator arena. As a slave, Goro was forced to fight death matches against other slaves for the amusement of paying spectators. He hated having to fight the only people he's ever know to be his family, for people he doesn't know, for a cause he doesn't believe in. In his off time he has taught him self to read, though only enough to gleam off the only reading material given to slaves: old newspapers. Inspired by the deeds of various pirates, and encouraged by his fellow slaves, Goro managed to catch a guard near his holding cell and snapped his neck, and took the cell keys from his body. A large jailbreak soon followed, but in the end Goro was the only one to get away. The others were either caught or killed. Goro vowed that he would get stronger, and return one day to free the others from their torment.
Skills: Goro is a skilled fighter in closed range combat, and wields a pair of round steel shields 5 feet in diameter. The shields are edged, not enough to slice, but enough to make them effective as offensive weapons as well as defensive. Due to Goro's long and dual jointed arms, he can defend himself from almost any direction. Hearing that people give names to swords, Goro gave his shields names and painted them on the fronts: Smashy is the left one and Bashy is the right one. Goro can also throw his shields like discus at an enemy, as they usually return to him either through ricochet or by a boomerang effect.
Goro is also very strong and durable, even considered to have superhuman strength. He will also use his head, in the form of a head-butt, and almost never uses his feet to fight with.
Affiliation: Pirate
Other: Goro's nose twitches when he lies, and he has a fondness of baby animals, especially kittens. Greatly dislikes spicy foods.
Name: "Gladiator" Goro Machlu
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Race: Long-Arm
Description: Stands at 6'8" and has a very muscular frame and thick arms. Goro wears a black muscle shirt, camo pants, army boots and biker gloves. His jet black hair is styled into dreadlocks, and a soul patch on his chin. Has dark green eyes and a crooked nose.
Personality: Overall a nice enough guy, Goro is slightly socially awkward but tries to hide this by being overly confident and macho, so he's always trying to be the tough guy. He's slow to understand different customs and cultures of various islands and nations, but is very quick to pick up fighting techniques, tactics and battle strategies, and spot physical weak points in others. He's also barely literate and has strong feelings against slavery and so-called "nobles".
History: Taken from his home at a very young age, Goro was sold as a slave to a man who own gigantic ship that served as a mobile gladiator arena. As a slave, Goro was forced to fight death matches against other slaves for the amusement of paying spectators. He hated having to fight the only people he's ever know to be his family, for people he doesn't know, for a cause he doesn't believe in. In his off time he has taught him self to read, though only enough to gleam off the only reading material given to slaves: old newspapers. Inspired by the deeds of various pirates, and encouraged by his fellow slaves, Goro managed to catch a guard near his holding cell and snapped his neck, and took the cell keys from his body. A large jailbreak soon followed, but in the end Goro was the only one to get away. The others were either caught or killed. Goro vowed that he would get stronger, and return one day to free the others from their torment.
Skills: Goro is a skilled fighter in closed range combat, and wields a pair of round steel shields 5 feet in diameter. The shields are edged, not enough to slice, but enough to make them effective as offensive weapons as well as defensive. Due to Goro's long and dual jointed arms, he can defend himself from almost any direction. Hearing that people give names to swords, Goro gave his shields names and painted them on the fronts: Smashy is the left one and Bashy is the right one. Goro can also throw his shields like discus at an enemy, as they usually return to him either through ricochet or by a boomerang effect.
Goro is also very strong and durable, even considered to have superhuman strength. He will also use his head, in the form of a head-butt, and almost never uses his feet to fight with.
Affiliation: Pirate
Other: Goro's nose twitches when he lies, and he has a fondness of baby animals, especially kittens. Greatly dislikes spicy foods.
4/24/2011 c6 Nezumimaru
Name: Landon Duran
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Physical Description: Blue messy hair, black eyes with half closed eyelids, continuous bored look on his face. Landon is almost never seen without his music player or his bulky headphones. Has a tribal tattoo over his left eye. Wears a standard issue Marine uniform, but never wears the cap.
Personality: Landon has been described as being lazy and having an attitude problem against authority, rarely listening to anyone who speaks to him and is often found listening to his music player or sleeping when he should be working. In reality, Landon does all his work diligently, he just finishes so fast that he has a lot of time left over to do other stuff. As for the listening part, he actually has nothing against authority, he just rather be listening to music than a boring speech. He often misses important detail told to him because of this, but he is know to give out many words of wisdom and logic, as if he more attentive than he initially lets on. But for the most part, he isn't riled up easily, keeping a level head regardless of the situation.
History: Landon spent most of his youth as he does know, listening to music and sleeping more often than others thinks is necessary. Due to his placid and unmotivated outlook on life, his parents signed him up to the Marines hoping that Navy life would change him for the better. So far nothing has changed except his wardrobe. Landon doesn't care, though. His superiors are nothing compared to his domineering parents. His trainers at boot camp have made some good remarks about his fighting capabilities, even if they are a bit unorthodox. But this is usually the only form of praise Landon gets.
Fighting: Landon's fighting style is what he calls Crazy Dancing. It's a freestyle martial art that grants him increases to his abilities depending on what kind of music he's listening to. Rage-filled metal music increases his strength to near super human, while faster-pace hip-hop allows him to move and attack more quickly. Power Ballads, with a more somber tone, allow him to weave in and out of any attack at him at the expense of being unable to attack back. While he fights, his eye remain closed so he can focus on the music rather than his environment, though his does not seem to hamper his awareness of his surrounds or location of his opponent.
"Heavy Striker": switches music to heavy metal, increasing his strength and striking power
"Speed-Hopping": switches music to hip-hop, increasing attack/movement speed
"Power Defense": switches music to a more somber Power Ballads, allowing his to dodge and deflect any attack but leaves him unable to attack back
"Ten Thousand Fists": powerful 'Heavy Striker' attack that unleashes a barrage of punches
"Bullet with Butterfly wings": 'Heavy Striker' punch that radiates a pair of butterfly wings as he strikes
"Space Bound": 'Speed-Hopping' attack that launches opponent high into the air with a series of kicks
"Jump Around": 'Speed-Hopping' attack that has Landon attacks his opponent several times as Landon bounces around the area at high speeds.
"The Zone": If a battle lasts long enough, Landon will enter 'The Zone' a state of mind where all aspects of his being reaches superhuman levels, regardless of the kind of music is playing.
(You can make more attacks if you want)
Marines: Chore Boy, but has the fighting capability rivaling a captain or commodore.
Likes: Heavy metal, hip-hop, punk, and alternative rock music; sleeping; staring off into space
Dislikes: classical music, country music, people who interrupt his 'beat'
Dream: to become a world-renown music performer.
Other: can play guitar, favors an electric. Often Landon will zone out or fall asleep when someone takes along time to explain something, even when he asked for the explanation.
Name: Landon Duran
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Physical Description: Blue messy hair, black eyes with half closed eyelids, continuous bored look on his face. Landon is almost never seen without his music player or his bulky headphones. Has a tribal tattoo over his left eye. Wears a standard issue Marine uniform, but never wears the cap.
Personality: Landon has been described as being lazy and having an attitude problem against authority, rarely listening to anyone who speaks to him and is often found listening to his music player or sleeping when he should be working. In reality, Landon does all his work diligently, he just finishes so fast that he has a lot of time left over to do other stuff. As for the listening part, he actually has nothing against authority, he just rather be listening to music than a boring speech. He often misses important detail told to him because of this, but he is know to give out many words of wisdom and logic, as if he more attentive than he initially lets on. But for the most part, he isn't riled up easily, keeping a level head regardless of the situation.
History: Landon spent most of his youth as he does know, listening to music and sleeping more often than others thinks is necessary. Due to his placid and unmotivated outlook on life, his parents signed him up to the Marines hoping that Navy life would change him for the better. So far nothing has changed except his wardrobe. Landon doesn't care, though. His superiors are nothing compared to his domineering parents. His trainers at boot camp have made some good remarks about his fighting capabilities, even if they are a bit unorthodox. But this is usually the only form of praise Landon gets.
Fighting: Landon's fighting style is what he calls Crazy Dancing. It's a freestyle martial art that grants him increases to his abilities depending on what kind of music he's listening to. Rage-filled metal music increases his strength to near super human, while faster-pace hip-hop allows him to move and attack more quickly. Power Ballads, with a more somber tone, allow him to weave in and out of any attack at him at the expense of being unable to attack back. While he fights, his eye remain closed so he can focus on the music rather than his environment, though his does not seem to hamper his awareness of his surrounds or location of his opponent.
"Heavy Striker": switches music to heavy metal, increasing his strength and striking power
"Speed-Hopping": switches music to hip-hop, increasing attack/movement speed
"Power Defense": switches music to a more somber Power Ballads, allowing his to dodge and deflect any attack but leaves him unable to attack back
"Ten Thousand Fists": powerful 'Heavy Striker' attack that unleashes a barrage of punches
"Bullet with Butterfly wings": 'Heavy Striker' punch that radiates a pair of butterfly wings as he strikes
"Space Bound": 'Speed-Hopping' attack that launches opponent high into the air with a series of kicks
"Jump Around": 'Speed-Hopping' attack that has Landon attacks his opponent several times as Landon bounces around the area at high speeds.
"The Zone": If a battle lasts long enough, Landon will enter 'The Zone' a state of mind where all aspects of his being reaches superhuman levels, regardless of the kind of music is playing.
(You can make more attacks if you want)
Marines: Chore Boy, but has the fighting capability rivaling a captain or commodore.
Likes: Heavy metal, hip-hop, punk, and alternative rock music; sleeping; staring off into space
Dislikes: classical music, country music, people who interrupt his 'beat'
Dream: to become a world-renown music performer.
Other: can play guitar, favors an electric. Often Landon will zone out or fall asleep when someone takes along time to explain something, even when he asked for the explanation.
2/22/2011 c6 6Key and Lock
Great story. I like all of the characters and you've done a great job showing their pasts. I can't wait to see more.
6Key and LockGreat story. I like all of the characters and you've done a great job showing their pasts. I can't wait to see more.
2/14/2011 c5 Rockstar Jubilee
ur welcome :) n good job on another chapter :D i rly liked it if u need some original characters i can give u some
ur welcome :) n good job on another chapter :D i rly liked it if u need some original characters i can give u some
2/13/2011 c5 21Mareo and Anime
D3 This is looking great now. Could do with a 'Character List' on who's who at the moment though- there's a lot of new people to keep in mind. XD
You want more characters? Okay! ^_^
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Name: Jincha Nukegara
AKA: 'Countdown' Jincha
Age: 28
Race: Human
Position: Enemy Captain of the 'Untouchables', a crew that's renowned for being hard to lay a hand on, literally, be that through Devil Fruit abilities, ninjutsu-like skills, acrobatic skills or simply being very greasy.
Physical Appearance: Beady black eyes with thick eyebrows and greasy, neck-length black hair tied off into a ponytail. Has an extremely pointed jaw and wide mouth, constantly showing all his teeth even when relaxed. His build is quite stacked, with squared shoulders, thick legs and just the beginnings of a gut showing.
Clothing: Dark green, long-sleeved shirt with a long grey trench-coat over his shoulders, with leather pants and leather boots. Wears a knight's visor on his forehead which he can slip over his eyes when counting down.
Personality: Stupidly overconfident and arrogantly slimy, he's afraid of nothing, smiling and nodding even with a gun aimed between his eyes. (Given his fruit power, he has reason to be.) Maliciously honourable, he always gives his enemy a timer from 1-10 to run, letting them think they can escape from him before taking them out on the count of 10. (If they run, he just knocks them out. If they stand their ground, they're dead.) Fast, deadly, with impeccable manners, he's near the top of sophisticated evil. He hates to be called a coward though: At the mere mention of the word, he freezes, asking them to repeat it. Even if they don't, he looks towards them with uncontrollable rage, his eyes becoming bloodshot, and counts down from three to one before slaughtering them without mercy. He's relatively relaxed around his crew though, even letting them try to assassinate him for fun when they're bored, letting his yell at them to relieve his own boredom.
Ability: A curved Scimitar and the Paramicea Devil Fruit; The Shed-Shed Fruit- This ability allows him to shed parts of his body to be replaced with new ones almost instantly, for example, if his arm is cut off. The severed limb would crumble into grey powder and disappear to be instantly replaced with a new one with no pain for the user. If he's shot between the eyes, he would fall backwards dead, but as he does a new body would remain standing in the old body's place, leaving the old body to fall down and crumble into grey dust behind him, leaving him completely unharmed. This also allows him to take dangerous falls in his stride, simply 'shedding' his dead body as soon as he hits the ground, letting his new one stand in its place- Altogether a very versatile ability.
Weakness: Even though the process is almost instantaneous, it's a passive ability which can be turned against him. Each time he 'sheds', it saps some of his energy, and a 'full-body' shed is only effected a few times in a row. The severed parts also creates 'grey dust' which, whilst disintegrating almost instantly, can cause a smokescreen effect to hide other attacks. Whilst sudden blows do nothing, steady pressure from weights will force him to constantly dissolve and re-form under it until it is moved aside, letting his reform properly. Being a fruit user, he suffers from the drawbacks- inability to swim and being susceptible to Haki and Seastone.
History: Was stuck as a Lookout on another Pirate ship for a long time and became the butt of many jokes, being called 'Peach-Skin' due to his body being very easy to bruise, something his captain took particular pleasure in. Jincha despised his Captain, but couldn't do anything to fight back due to his body's condition. After a night on the town in a port, the captain managed to get his hands on two Devil-Fruits.
After the Captain ate one and gained the ability of the 'Hammer-Hammer Fruit', A Fruit that turned the users arms into literal jack-hammers, he wanted to test his new-found powers on someone. Lucky Jincha. Pleading for a sporting chance, he was given the other fruit to eat. Barely giving him a chance to swallow it, the Captain hit him full-blast in the chest, sending grey dust everywhere. To the Captain's surprise and horror, Jincha was completely unharmed. Gleeful and full of malicious hate, Jincha stole the Captain's scimitar and gave him until the count of ten to apologise for everything he'd done to him. Terrified, the Captain tried over-and-over to kill him with his ability, but to no avail, as nothing could stop his countdown.
The next day, Jincha disappeared to start his own crew, and the old captain was found all around town. Literally...
Likes: Taunting people's helplessness, Raw fish, raw veg, raw meat- anything raw to eat, His pirate flag- A wide-jawed skull surrounded by a cloud of smoke.
Dislikes: Being called a coward, reckless heroes, people unexpectedly disturbing his thoughts by trying to assassinate him,
Dream: To show the world that he's untouchable.
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Hope you like him! I kinda designed him to be the 'Buggy' of the series if you need one. ;)
21Mareo and AnimeD3 This is looking great now. Could do with a 'Character List' on who's who at the moment though- there's a lot of new people to keep in mind. XD
You want more characters? Okay! ^_^
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Name: Jincha Nukegara
AKA: 'Countdown' Jincha
Age: 28
Race: Human
Position: Enemy Captain of the 'Untouchables', a crew that's renowned for being hard to lay a hand on, literally, be that through Devil Fruit abilities, ninjutsu-like skills, acrobatic skills or simply being very greasy.
Physical Appearance: Beady black eyes with thick eyebrows and greasy, neck-length black hair tied off into a ponytail. Has an extremely pointed jaw and wide mouth, constantly showing all his teeth even when relaxed. His build is quite stacked, with squared shoulders, thick legs and just the beginnings of a gut showing.
Clothing: Dark green, long-sleeved shirt with a long grey trench-coat over his shoulders, with leather pants and leather boots. Wears a knight's visor on his forehead which he can slip over his eyes when counting down.
Personality: Stupidly overconfident and arrogantly slimy, he's afraid of nothing, smiling and nodding even with a gun aimed between his eyes. (Given his fruit power, he has reason to be.) Maliciously honourable, he always gives his enemy a timer from 1-10 to run, letting them think they can escape from him before taking them out on the count of 10. (If they run, he just knocks them out. If they stand their ground, they're dead.) Fast, deadly, with impeccable manners, he's near the top of sophisticated evil. He hates to be called a coward though: At the mere mention of the word, he freezes, asking them to repeat it. Even if they don't, he looks towards them with uncontrollable rage, his eyes becoming bloodshot, and counts down from three to one before slaughtering them without mercy. He's relatively relaxed around his crew though, even letting them try to assassinate him for fun when they're bored, letting his yell at them to relieve his own boredom.
Ability: A curved Scimitar and the Paramicea Devil Fruit; The Shed-Shed Fruit- This ability allows him to shed parts of his body to be replaced with new ones almost instantly, for example, if his arm is cut off. The severed limb would crumble into grey powder and disappear to be instantly replaced with a new one with no pain for the user. If he's shot between the eyes, he would fall backwards dead, but as he does a new body would remain standing in the old body's place, leaving the old body to fall down and crumble into grey dust behind him, leaving him completely unharmed. This also allows him to take dangerous falls in his stride, simply 'shedding' his dead body as soon as he hits the ground, letting his new one stand in its place- Altogether a very versatile ability.
Weakness: Even though the process is almost instantaneous, it's a passive ability which can be turned against him. Each time he 'sheds', it saps some of his energy, and a 'full-body' shed is only effected a few times in a row. The severed parts also creates 'grey dust' which, whilst disintegrating almost instantly, can cause a smokescreen effect to hide other attacks. Whilst sudden blows do nothing, steady pressure from weights will force him to constantly dissolve and re-form under it until it is moved aside, letting his reform properly. Being a fruit user, he suffers from the drawbacks- inability to swim and being susceptible to Haki and Seastone.
History: Was stuck as a Lookout on another Pirate ship for a long time and became the butt of many jokes, being called 'Peach-Skin' due to his body being very easy to bruise, something his captain took particular pleasure in. Jincha despised his Captain, but couldn't do anything to fight back due to his body's condition. After a night on the town in a port, the captain managed to get his hands on two Devil-Fruits.
After the Captain ate one and gained the ability of the 'Hammer-Hammer Fruit', A Fruit that turned the users arms into literal jack-hammers, he wanted to test his new-found powers on someone. Lucky Jincha. Pleading for a sporting chance, he was given the other fruit to eat. Barely giving him a chance to swallow it, the Captain hit him full-blast in the chest, sending grey dust everywhere. To the Captain's surprise and horror, Jincha was completely unharmed. Gleeful and full of malicious hate, Jincha stole the Captain's scimitar and gave him until the count of ten to apologise for everything he'd done to him. Terrified, the Captain tried over-and-over to kill him with his ability, but to no avail, as nothing could stop his countdown.
The next day, Jincha disappeared to start his own crew, and the old captain was found all around town. Literally...
Likes: Taunting people's helplessness, Raw fish, raw veg, raw meat- anything raw to eat, His pirate flag- A wide-jawed skull surrounded by a cloud of smoke.
Dislikes: Being called a coward, reckless heroes, people unexpectedly disturbing his thoughts by trying to assassinate him,
Dream: To show the world that he's untouchable.
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Hope you like him! I kinda designed him to be the 'Buggy' of the series if you need one. ;)
2/13/2011 c5 3Unbia-Mon
You know what i have been reading your story and i have decided to let you have one of my most favorite OC's hope you like her.
Name: Xana D. Tyrant
Age: 15
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Position: Musician
Weapons: she has a devil fruit and it is called the Kokoro-kokoro no mi(mind-mind) she has the ability to control people and objects with her mind and also erase minds too.
Appearance: she is 4’9” has white hair(on the left half)and black hair(on the right half)her bangs cover her eyes and the rest is a little off her shoulders her left eye is violet with black surrounding it and then her pupil is a red slit. And over her left eye is a huge scar that starts at forehead to her chin. And then her right eye is just violet with a white slit going down the middle. She has a devious cat-like smile and lots of freckles all over her cheeks(whish she has very high cheek bones) her face is very thin and has very pointy teeth. Her skin is very pale and she wears long black shirt and skin tight gray jeans.
History: Xana was always beaten as a little kid by her father and was always blamed. Her father was an alcoholic and would always come home and beat her. But as she grew up she started fighting back to protect her siblings but when her father found out that she had eaten a devil fruit she kicked her out and warned her to never come back. Xana was 13 years old and then she met her now boyfriend Deaven when her father had found out she was living with him and going out with him her freaked and then attacked them. He then got rid of Xana and Deaven or so he thought. Deaven had given Xana a boat and he had his own so he had told her to leave and she had to. So now she is 15 and is still looking for him.
Family: Xana has a twin named Sarah who is younger than her(by 3 hours!)an older brother named Jason and then a younger brother named Alekane.
Personality: Xana can be a bitch but deep down inside she is really cool she is more of a loner she looks a lot like a boy and she really doesn’t give a damn about what people say. She like to help but sometimes she can be a little sadist. . . And a little perverted but put that aside and she is perfect with friends
Likes: dark things, friends, to be complimented(Even though she says she doesn’t), adventures, and to just have fun
Dislikes: jerks, crowds, marines, cowards, people that think they are better than anyone else, pink, and to be called a sissy.
Aims: to be free and find her boyfriend.
Other: she drinks
So yeah I think I got it all I hope you like her!
3Unbia-MonYou know what i have been reading your story and i have decided to let you have one of my most favorite OC's hope you like her.
Name: Xana D. Tyrant
Age: 15
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Position: Musician
Weapons: she has a devil fruit and it is called the Kokoro-kokoro no mi(mind-mind) she has the ability to control people and objects with her mind and also erase minds too.
Appearance: she is 4’9” has white hair(on the left half)and black hair(on the right half)her bangs cover her eyes and the rest is a little off her shoulders her left eye is violet with black surrounding it and then her pupil is a red slit. And over her left eye is a huge scar that starts at forehead to her chin. And then her right eye is just violet with a white slit going down the middle. She has a devious cat-like smile and lots of freckles all over her cheeks(whish she has very high cheek bones) her face is very thin and has very pointy teeth. Her skin is very pale and she wears long black shirt and skin tight gray jeans.
History: Xana was always beaten as a little kid by her father and was always blamed. Her father was an alcoholic and would always come home and beat her. But as she grew up she started fighting back to protect her siblings but when her father found out that she had eaten a devil fruit she kicked her out and warned her to never come back. Xana was 13 years old and then she met her now boyfriend Deaven when her father had found out she was living with him and going out with him her freaked and then attacked them. He then got rid of Xana and Deaven or so he thought. Deaven had given Xana a boat and he had his own so he had told her to leave and she had to. So now she is 15 and is still looking for him.
Family: Xana has a twin named Sarah who is younger than her(by 3 hours!)an older brother named Jason and then a younger brother named Alekane.
Personality: Xana can be a bitch but deep down inside she is really cool she is more of a loner she looks a lot like a boy and she really doesn’t give a damn about what people say. She like to help but sometimes she can be a little sadist. . . And a little perverted but put that aside and she is perfect with friends
Likes: dark things, friends, to be complimented(Even though she says she doesn’t), adventures, and to just have fun
Dislikes: jerks, crowds, marines, cowards, people that think they are better than anyone else, pink, and to be called a sissy.
Aims: to be free and find her boyfriend.
Other: she drinks
So yeah I think I got it all I hope you like her!