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10hannahsmetana
These are great! George was a triumph, I think you did a great job of characterizing how Neal would play a con, and the Neal in custody bit was a nice change from the usual arrest/ in prison fic. Great work :-)
10hannahsmetanaThese are great! George was a triumph, I think you did a great job of characterizing how Neal would play a con, and the Neal in custody bit was a nice change from the usual arrest/ in prison fic. Great work :-)
12/21/2011 c3 4ButtermilkCavalry
This was strong. And honest. And upfront. Usually, I don't like the general idea of an abusive childhood as a background for Neal, because it always seemed a little bit too simple for me but this scene won over my doubts. And the fact that Neal put on his pokerface again was great. As was the Christmas card.
4ButtermilkCavalryThis was strong. And honest. And upfront. Usually, I don't like the general idea of an abusive childhood as a background for Neal, because it always seemed a little bit too simple for me but this scene won over my doubts. And the fact that Neal put on his pokerface again was great. As was the Christmas card.
12/21/2011 c2 ButtermilkCavalry
I didn't like it in Monte Carlo. But I think I know why Neal does. The temptation this place holds has to be unbearable him and Nick Halden absolutely fits. Another great chapter. "he passed his losses off with a nonchalant ease, his winnings with reservation and poise." This was great. Tells a lot, about Neal, about you.
I didn't like it in Monte Carlo. But I think I know why Neal does. The temptation this place holds has to be unbearable him and Nick Halden absolutely fits. Another great chapter. "he passed his losses off with a nonchalant ease, his winnings with reservation and poise." This was great. Tells a lot, about Neal, about you.
12/21/2011 c1 ButtermilkCavalry
Finally I got to read this... And I think I need to break my own rule and comment on every chapter...
This was so... Dorian Gray. And I just loved it. I wouldn't mind to read a whole story about this con, it's intelligent, devious and it has everything it needs to show how people can play with their own and other ones' nature. Loved it.
Finally I got to read this... And I think I need to break my own rule and comment on every chapter...
This was so... Dorian Gray. And I just loved it. I wouldn't mind to read a whole story about this con, it's intelligent, devious and it has everything it needs to show how people can play with their own and other ones' nature. Loved it.
10/25/2011 c3 14Wondo
Enjoyed all three chapters. Wonderful writing.
Loved chapter three. Great portrayal of Peter Burke. His compassion does make him stand out from most people. Thanks for the story.
14WondoEnjoyed all three chapters. Wonderful writing.
Loved chapter three. Great portrayal of Peter Burke. His compassion does make him stand out from most people. Thanks for the story.
6/23/2011 c3 KiwiHunch
This chapter almost made me cry, it was sooo sad...but then good ol' Caffrey brought it bacl to humor, lol. I could sooooo see this being a story, and, personally, would love to see one by you!
:D
This chapter almost made me cry, it was sooo sad...but then good ol' Caffrey brought it bacl to humor, lol. I could sooooo see this being a story, and, personally, would love to see one by you!
:D
5/28/2011 c3 5iamhere23
absolutely love the neal caffrey chapter! peter pushing neal into something, getting a reastion to something... i don't think he would've done that if he'd known the reaction he would get. Anyway, well done.
5iamhere23absolutely love the neal caffrey chapter! peter pushing neal into something, getting a reastion to something... i don't think he would've done that if he'd known the reaction he would get. Anyway, well done.
2/7/2011 c3 21Miran Anders
Wow, this was good. Emotional, yes, and a little harsh at times, but very good. The way Peter pushed the situation, and then felt guilty about abusing this oddly trusting 'criminal'... it actually stayed very nicely in character. I can't imagine Peter pushing it that far if he actually thought it would have affected Neal that way, and I liked the resolution of the intensity of the moment.
I also liked the way that Neal put the 'rules' back in place as soon as he could - very Caffrey, that.
Again, congratulations on some excellent work. If you ever need a reader for the random language bits, I'd be happy to read for you. Thanks!
Miran
21Miran AndersWow, this was good. Emotional, yes, and a little harsh at times, but very good. The way Peter pushed the situation, and then felt guilty about abusing this oddly trusting 'criminal'... it actually stayed very nicely in character. I can't imagine Peter pushing it that far if he actually thought it would have affected Neal that way, and I liked the resolution of the intensity of the moment.
I also liked the way that Neal put the 'rules' back in place as soon as he could - very Caffrey, that.
Again, congratulations on some excellent work. If you ever need a reader for the random language bits, I'd be happy to read for you. Thanks!
Miran
2/7/2011 c1 Miran Anders
Excellent! I really enjoyed this. Having visited your profile, I wasn't sure what to expect - but this English major found only a few missteps in the language department. The plot flowed very nicely, the character Neal encountered (and played) were very true to the show.
Favorite line: "Ten days can seem like forever when your waiting to run. The longest starting pistol in the world with a slow motion start."
It feels very much like what goes on in Neal's head. I look forward to reading more!
Excellent! I really enjoyed this. Having visited your profile, I wasn't sure what to expect - but this English major found only a few missteps in the language department. The plot flowed very nicely, the character Neal encountered (and played) were very true to the show.
Favorite line: "Ten days can seem like forever when your waiting to run. The longest starting pistol in the world with a slow motion start."
It feels very much like what goes on in Neal's head. I look forward to reading more!
11/8/2010 c2 16morgo7kc
AWESOME! this chap was sad, but i liked reading it, and the small humour balanced it out nicely. cant wait for more!
16morgo7kcAWESOME! this chap was sad, but i liked reading it, and the small humour balanced it out nicely. cant wait for more!
11/8/2010 c1 8govgal
I like this character study. It gives depth to Neal's alias in The Portrait. Nice job for your first fiction. Looking forward to more.
8govgalI like this character study. It gives depth to Neal's alias in The Portrait. Nice job for your first fiction. Looking forward to more.
11/6/2010 c1 PEMDAS
great!
great!
11/6/2010 c1 shaw
xo
xo