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13last1stnding
Love that line about the unidentified coffee. g I did wonder when Neal was ever going to get around to tell Peter about Grace though. No wonder Peter is getting sick, with all the stress he's been through. Nice chapter.
13last1stndingLove that line about the unidentified coffee. g I did wonder when Neal was ever going to get around to tell Peter about Grace though. No wonder Peter is getting sick, with all the stress he's been through. Nice chapter.
2/12/2011 c21 17MaraudingSnitch1314
Great chapter and a very clever resolution to Neal's Vermeer dilemma. Loved the bonding between Peter and Neal as opposed to a confrontation between Agent Burke and Caffrey. Such a happy ending, I nearly forgot about Grace.
Excellent, as usual! :)
17MaraudingSnitch1314Great chapter and a very clever resolution to Neal's Vermeer dilemma. Loved the bonding between Peter and Neal as opposed to a confrontation between Agent Burke and Caffrey. Such a happy ending, I nearly forgot about Grace.
Excellent, as usual! :)
2/6/2011 c20 Georgiamomma123yahoo.com
Oh, the twists and turns, very good! Can't wait to see if it is all in the plan! Update soon!
Oh, the twists and turns, very good! Can't wait to see if it is all in the plan! Update soon!
2/6/2011 c20 15lizarding
Wow what an original story and so compelling...excellent stuff!
I especially love the lines,
"Any gray hair I may have now or in the future will most definitely have your name written all over it."
"And which name would that be? You know I have several." So Neal!
That made me laugh my head off...well done.
Can't wait to read more!
15lizardingWow what an original story and so compelling...excellent stuff!
I especially love the lines,
"Any gray hair I may have now or in the future will most definitely have your name written all over it."
"And which name would that be? You know I have several." So Neal!
That made me laugh my head off...well done.
Can't wait to read more!
2/5/2011 c20 13last1stnding
Sorry I missed reviewing a chapter but these last two are very good. You do a nice job with the partnership, which is a rarity on this forum. Keep up the good work.
13last1stndingSorry I missed reviewing a chapter but these last two are very good. You do a nice job with the partnership, which is a rarity on this forum. Keep up the good work.
2/5/2011 c20 17MaraudingSnitch1314
An exciting, well-written chapter with so many characters involved. Very good work!
17MaraudingSnitch1314An exciting, well-written chapter with so many characters involved. Very good work!
1/31/2011 c19 MaraudingSnitch1314
Great chapter. I wish that Jones would trust Neal and that Neal didn't have to con Jones. Enjoyed the scene between Elizabeth and Grace, too. :)
Great chapter. I wish that Jones would trust Neal and that Neal didn't have to con Jones. Enjoyed the scene between Elizabeth and Grace, too. :)
1/23/2011 c18 18aliceann
I really enjoy the intricacy of your plot and the pacing. It's nice seeing Neal so proactive,and asserting his position in the team. Good tension, I am looking forward to what comes next.
18aliceannI really enjoy the intricacy of your plot and the pacing. It's nice seeing Neal so proactive,and asserting his position in the team. Good tension, I am looking forward to what comes next.
1/23/2011 c18 13last1stnding
Powerful chapter; I like the strong emotion. Nice to have Neal realize what his actions have done and, more importantly, how important Peter's trust is to him. Good job.
13last1stndingPowerful chapter; I like the strong emotion. Nice to have Neal realize what his actions have done and, more importantly, how important Peter's trust is to him. Good job.
1/22/2011 c18 17MaraudingSnitch1314
Great chapter, and we got to see a more driven side of Neal. I really liked your comment about rule books getting in the way of saving lives - we couldn't function without the law, but the law sometimes impedes the good that people like Neal want to achieve.
Looking forward to the next chapter. :)
17MaraudingSnitch1314Great chapter, and we got to see a more driven side of Neal. I really liked your comment about rule books getting in the way of saving lives - we couldn't function without the law, but the law sometimes impedes the good that people like Neal want to achieve.
Looking forward to the next chapter. :)