for Unintended Consequences12/12/2010 c11 
16morgo7kc
Oh god...this chapter, and whole story really, is amazing. The angst is eating me alive! Everybody's shooting everybody else, and Peter still thinks Neal betrayed him! At least Frank won't be able to cause anymore problems, being dead and all, (I'm assuming that was a kill shot). Unless he just feigned death but was secretly wearing Kelvar. Well that would be a twist. Anyway, update soon plz!
16morgo7kcOh god...this chapter, and whole story really, is amazing. The angst is eating me alive! Everybody's shooting everybody else, and Peter still thinks Neal betrayed him! At least Frank won't be able to cause anymore problems, being dead and all, (I'm assuming that was a kill shot). Unless he just feigned death but was secretly wearing Kelvar. Well that would be a twist. Anyway, update soon plz!
12/12/2010 c11 17MaraudingSnitch1314
Oh, not a cliffhanger! Good going for Grace, taking charge against her manipulative husband. I hope Peter's okay. Maybe Neal rescues him?
17MaraudingSnitch1314Oh, not a cliffhanger! Good going for Grace, taking charge against her manipulative husband. I hope Peter's okay. Maybe Neal rescues him?
12/12/2010 c10 MaraudingSnitch1314
Awesome chapter! Everything's coming to a head. I'm really glad that Peter doesn't believe Neal's betrayal. :)
Awesome chapter! Everything's coming to a head. I'm really glad that Peter doesn't believe Neal's betrayal. :)
12/11/2010 c11 97peppe1951
Peter is wearing a vest...right? they have got to get Neal to the hospital quick...great chapter
97peppe1951Peter is wearing a vest...right? they have got to get Neal to the hospital quick...great chapter
12/7/2010 c10 16morgo7kc
Oh. My. God. UPDATE SOON! What is this guys problem? Why does he hate everybody so much? At least his whole plan is failing. The painting isn't at Peter's house, El is safe, Neal was wearing a vest (Mozz thankfully took care of those things) and this whole confession of Frank's is caught on tape. I still can't figure out why this dude has had it out for Peter and Grace for 20 yrs, and why is he mad at Neal? Plz write more ASAP! I hate it when Peter believes Neal betrayed him, and vise versa-makes me lose sleep at night. Okay not really, but you get the picture. I still can't get over the coincedence that Neal knows Peter's sister. Amazing story!
16morgo7kcOh. My. God. UPDATE SOON! What is this guys problem? Why does he hate everybody so much? At least his whole plan is failing. The painting isn't at Peter's house, El is safe, Neal was wearing a vest (Mozz thankfully took care of those things) and this whole confession of Frank's is caught on tape. I still can't figure out why this dude has had it out for Peter and Grace for 20 yrs, and why is he mad at Neal? Plz write more ASAP! I hate it when Peter believes Neal betrayed him, and vise versa-makes me lose sleep at night. Okay not really, but you get the picture. I still can't get over the coincedence that Neal knows Peter's sister. Amazing story!
12/3/2010 c9 17MaraudingSnitch1314
Vey well-written suspense. If Grace really was there and both Peter and Neal came to rescue her, don't tell me Peter shot Neal on accident...
Keep up the great work and please update again soon!
17MaraudingSnitch1314Vey well-written suspense. If Grace really was there and both Peter and Neal came to rescue her, don't tell me Peter shot Neal on accident...
Keep up the great work and please update again soon!
12/3/2010 c9 collarchick
Ohhhh... Very clever... I can't wait for the fireworks between peter and neal in the next chapter - wooo hooo... Great plot!
Ohhhh... Very clever... I can't wait for the fireworks between peter and neal in the next chapter - wooo hooo... Great plot!
12/1/2010 c8 13last1stnding
Good chapter. Like El and Mozzie together. I also enjoyed getting to know the history of Peter and his sister and the fact that Jones and Diana are going to support Peter whether its 'personal' or Bureau business.
13last1stndingGood chapter. Like El and Mozzie together. I also enjoyed getting to know the history of Peter and his sister and the fact that Jones and Diana are going to support Peter whether its 'personal' or Bureau business.
11/30/2010 c8 17MaraudingSnitch1314
Good chapter. I enjoyed the Moz-and-Elle scene at "Thursday," lol. Nice reveal of Peter's history with his sister. All that's left is for something to happen to Neal...
17MaraudingSnitch1314Good chapter. I enjoyed the Moz-and-Elle scene at "Thursday," lol. Nice reveal of Peter's history with his sister. All that's left is for something to happen to Neal...
11/25/2010 c7 13last1stnding
I have been enjoying this story but I confess to being somewhat disappointed in this chapter. I think Peter is OOC in this, immediately leaping to the conclusion that Neal would kidnap Elizabeth. Suspect Neal of stealing a painting, yes. Neal running his own agenda behind Peter's back - well, we've seen him do that now, haven't we? But kidnap - no way. If Peter had ever thought Neal would be a danger to his wife, there would have been no deal made with Neal in the first place.
The rest of the story is still very good. It will be interesting when Peter and Neal discover they've both been working the same case all along.
13last1stndingI have been enjoying this story but I confess to being somewhat disappointed in this chapter. I think Peter is OOC in this, immediately leaping to the conclusion that Neal would kidnap Elizabeth. Suspect Neal of stealing a painting, yes. Neal running his own agenda behind Peter's back - well, we've seen him do that now, haven't we? But kidnap - no way. If Peter had ever thought Neal would be a danger to his wife, there would have been no deal made with Neal in the first place.
The rest of the story is still very good. It will be interesting when Peter and Neal discover they've both been working the same case all along.
11/25/2010 c7 97peppe1951
I wished Peter had stopped to think this over before he accused Neal...if he had stopped to think he would have known that Neal didn't do it and to think who else it might have been...eventually he;s going to think of Mozzie...I sure hope the cops leave soon so El can call and reassure her husband...great chapter
97peppe1951I wished Peter had stopped to think this over before he accused Neal...if he had stopped to think he would have known that Neal didn't do it and to think who else it might have been...eventually he;s going to think of Mozzie...I sure hope the cops leave soon so El can call and reassure her husband...great chapter