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1/16/2015 c4 Alessandra Fell
new here and really looking for cho/harry fanfic cuz i really love them together tha but i tagged her as the don't know for posting and pls update soon
12/26/2011 c4 7Marauder Neyo
'Harry Potter and the Return to Hogwarts'. This story was fantastic! My praise to the author. ;)
6/11/2011 c4 overlord of hell 2012
really enjoying your story and cant wait to read more
5/7/2011 c4 1Jarjaxle
This rather interesting Story. Plz Update as soon as Possible.

There isn't Many good HarryXCho Pairing Stories in my Opnion. This is One the Greatest. I respect J.K.Rowlings Decision about Harry x Ginny, but HarryXCho somehow stayed in my mind before harry abnd Ginny started to Date
3/18/2011 c1 14RenaJo
While the story has some merit you should not worry about making it sound british right now. what you should worry about is knowing the source material. Kingsley is not Mr. Kingsley he is Mr. Shacklebolt as that is his last name. Also you referred to the weasely home as the Burrows it is the Burrow.

Here is a snippet from your story :

"Ok Harry, now that all the approved Secret-Keepers of number twelve, Grimmauld Place, we can remove the Fidelius Charm and reset it for obvious reasons. So now, let's begin."

Here you made a bit of a mistake the previous secret keeper was already dead that being Professor Dumbledore. Furthermore JKR inferred that the Fidelius may have been compromised when harry side along apparated a death eater from the ministry when he went to retrieve the locket from umbridge. Grammatically speaking the sentence is a mess as well. in that the first sentence is a run on sentence. If you changed it a little. For instance it would flow better and make sense.

The first part of the sentence

"Okay Harry! Now that we are all here, we can remove the last remnants of the older Fidelius Charm. After it is done we can then cast another."

Just some thoughts for you to think on
2/5/2011 c4 NinjaMike009
Hey great Chapter. Im also proud of your decision to join the Navy, I've been in since September and it has one of the best decisions I have ever made. You will love it in the Navy and good luck with boot camp and A School
12/31/2010 c3 StarwindX
Cool idea.

Don't really like Gnny dying bit though, but I supposeit's one of the only two ways it could work...

I'm suprised the Weasleys are so accepting of Cho though, I'd have thought they'd have not wanted anyone to move in on Haarry so fast...
12/4/2010 c2 OutlawKnight
AWESOME! this story rocks, I love the small change creating such a great story. I love the portrayal of Cho and nice bit of back story their that was a brilliant way to reallly flesh out cho's character. also an intriguing way to get Harry and cho some more time to get to know each other and to keep them at afamiliar setting. I can't wait to see more
12/2/2010 c2 10Orym Hawksong
I can't believe no one's reviewed this yet. I love what you're doing with the story. The only think i have against it is the constant jumping around in the story. I feel like you could develop more in between "jumps" but that's just my own opinion. Best of luck writing. We need more HarryXCho fics on the internet.

~Orym Hawksong

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