for Desire11/27/2010 c1 
23youcanreachthestars
This was exquisite, it really was. I adore Lily/Snape, it's my OTP, and you wrote it really well. I actually wrote a similar story, except far more angsty. .
I absolutely loved this line, "He had never been the stag to Lily's doe," it was so accurate and heartwrenching, well done!
~Stars
23youcanreachthestarsThis was exquisite, it really was. I adore Lily/Snape, it's my OTP, and you wrote it really well. I actually wrote a similar story, except far more angsty. .
I absolutely loved this line, "He had never been the stag to Lily's doe," it was so accurate and heartwrenching, well done!
~Stars
11/26/2010 c1 13excessivelyperky
But Snape _did_ apologize; apparently he doesn't remember that part, or that Lily shot him down forever after.
What a pity he couldn't see St. Lily for what she really was, and forever blamed himself for her shallowness. (sorry, you don't marry a bully without knowing what he really is, unless you really hate his victim).
Good story.
13excessivelyperkyBut Snape _did_ apologize; apparently he doesn't remember that part, or that Lily shot him down forever after.
What a pity he couldn't see St. Lily for what she really was, and forever blamed himself for her shallowness. (sorry, you don't marry a bully without knowing what he really is, unless you really hate his victim).
Good story.
11/26/2010 c1 7Very Small Prophet
Poor Sev! He's so thoroughly crushed that he can't imagine Lily begging HIS forgiveness for calling him Snivellus and mocking his poverty. And she did it without even the excuse of being choked on soap and dangled upside-down. Any panicked Slytherin can shout "Mudblood!" It takes a friend to know so precisely where to place the dagger and just how far to twist it for maximum pain.
7Very Small ProphetPoor Sev! He's so thoroughly crushed that he can't imagine Lily begging HIS forgiveness for calling him Snivellus and mocking his poverty. And she did it without even the excuse of being choked on soap and dangled upside-down. Any panicked Slytherin can shout "Mudblood!" It takes a friend to know so precisely where to place the dagger and just how far to twist it for maximum pain.
11/26/2010 c1 Afton
This is a really good story. I like how you genuinely made me feel sympathy for Snape. You do a good job of characterizing him and showing his softer side.
For further writing, you may be interested in this site:
w w w . sapientimagic . com (without the spaces)
It's a role playing site based on the Harry Potter world.
Either way, good luck with your writing and I look forward to reading more.
Afton Stokes, SUM student
This is a really good story. I like how you genuinely made me feel sympathy for Snape. You do a good job of characterizing him and showing his softer side.
For further writing, you may be interested in this site:
w w w . sapientimagic . com (without the spaces)
It's a role playing site based on the Harry Potter world.
Either way, good luck with your writing and I look forward to reading more.
Afton Stokes, SUM student