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10/20/2020 c14 1Paratus007
Just a quick question. How did they get toast in narnia? Last I checked, narnia was not advanced enough to make toasters. Great story though!
11/3/2019 c10 5jnjohnson
Love that ending line!
11/3/2019 c8 jnjohnson
I like your set up! Great story so far. One thing I would suggest is spending time rereading your chapter slowly before you post it. I know as an fanfic author, my phone creates errors when I type or let Siri write for me (cuz that just makes life so much easier)! I noticed in the last chapter what should have been ‘tension’ was misspelled as ‘attentionit happens to the best of us!Overall, I like your vision for the story, but there’s no need to rush. Spend some time gathering the characters thoughts, especially when it comes down to dialogue, as it can be confusing after a long piece of dialogue without context, and readers may find themselves lost on who is saying what. Maybe some details about body language, I know that helps me!Love your story. Hopefully these tips help. Keep up the great work!
10/13/2017 c8 AwesomeEevee
This IS a great story. I love it and it is very rare I see such awesome content!
3/22/2016 c8 QuirkyKim
It's good, just a bit if grammar problems.
1/20/2016 c20 17Child of Dreams
(sighs contentedly)
1/20/2016 c8 Child of Dreams
Stone table, then battle.
3/31/2015 c16 Evil Narnian
omg! i cried when i saw this part of the movie too!
3/31/2015 c3 Guest
pride ad prejudice is a really boring book
3/30/2015 c21 Guest
3/30/2015 c17 Guest
i thought it was Edmund who was stabbed by Jadis
3/30/2015 c8 Guest
Katie should be at the stone table with Lucy! I love the story. SO GOOD!
3/30/2015 c6 Guest
this is really good. you r basing this off of the movie, not books, right?
3/30/2015 c4 Guest
what about Katie? maybe an royal advisor in stead?
3/30/2015 c1 Guest
how old is Katie, Susan, and Edmund? Peter15, Lucy8, but what about the other ages
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