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6/28/2017 c1 Guest
Can you please write short stories based off of this?! Like some during holidays or at the fair.
8/18/2014 c1 Hit the tegrat
I think you did a great job Michelle Winchester
12/18/2010 c1 4Starlover4ever
I liked the morel of the story, good work.

However, now this is just constructive criticism, there are some points in the story where a period or comma should be used. I saw a few run-on sentences on here, but they can easily be fixed.

The style you used in this piece is different, and makes the story very easy to read. Just work on the sentences and it'll be perfect ;)

~Starlover~

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