for LoveHenge8/31/2022 c1 catspats31
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While the writing quality of your story is good in terms of spelling and grammar, please note this part of the Content Guidelines:
"Please note FanFiction does not accept explicit content, Fiction Rating: MA, and the rating is only presented for reference."
Remove all of the detailed descriptions of physical interaction of sexual or violent nature in this story if you want it to remain at this site, or upload it to a site where "Fiction MA" content is allowed like Archive Of Our Own.
1/10/2011 c1 levebreaks
"His voice comes from a tantalizing short distance asking me to tell him what I want, and the sinful words pour out of me. They are fantastically naughty. Words like kiss, fuck, yours, mine. And all the words in between." - I absolutely loved this part. Great word usage.
"Like Chinese brushes, his digits glide over my feet, my legs, my thighs and hips, tracing intricate patterns." - Wonderful simile. Paints such a vivid picture.
"His ambrosia lips are dripping nectar of the Gods." - Wow. That's very dramatic, but it totally works.
"Like crumbs of the sun and moon." - Oooo that's lovely.
That was really unique. You have a very strong writer's voice. I really enjoyed your style and wonderful vocabulary. You made that story really magical and mystical feeling. It really took me to another place when I read it. Really enjoyed your take on this.
"His voice comes from a tantalizing short distance asking me to tell him what I want, and the sinful words pour out of me. They are fantastically naughty. Words like kiss, fuck, yours, mine. And all the words in between." - I absolutely loved this part. Great word usage.
"Like Chinese brushes, his digits glide over my feet, my legs, my thighs and hips, tracing intricate patterns." - Wonderful simile. Paints such a vivid picture.
"His ambrosia lips are dripping nectar of the Gods." - Wow. That's very dramatic, but it totally works.
"Like crumbs of the sun and moon." - Oooo that's lovely.
That was really unique. You have a very strong writer's voice. I really enjoyed your style and wonderful vocabulary. You made that story really magical and mystical feeling. It really took me to another place when I read it. Really enjoyed your take on this.
1/6/2011 c1 
4svmfan1
That was so beautiful. It read like poetry to me. You really have a very distinct style of writing. I enjoyed this Sookie/Eric piece very much. Thanks for sharing your talent and Happy New Year!
4svmfan1That was so beautiful. It read like poetry to me. You really have a very distinct style of writing. I enjoyed this Sookie/Eric piece very much. Thanks for sharing your talent and Happy New Year!
12/24/2010 c1 59apirateslifeforme123
Oh, I love this! I love the language, I love how you take us closer to true things with short phrases - I tried to pick out a favorite line, and it was DIFFICULT, because there's so much beauty in this fic. but, i think it was: "...his soul reaching from the darkness that held it captive, reaching for mine." bravo, loved it!
59apirateslifeforme123Oh, I love this! I love the language, I love how you take us closer to true things with short phrases - I tried to pick out a favorite line, and it was DIFFICULT, because there's so much beauty in this fic. but, i think it was: "...his soul reaching from the darkness that held it captive, reaching for mine." bravo, loved it!
12/23/2010 c1 Stibine
Amazing story!
Love how you manage to write making love without going down the porn slide.
Thank you.
Amazing story!
Love how you manage to write making love without going down the porn slide.
Thank you.
12/23/2010 c1 2SouthernLady23
With Eric, fangs, and lemons you can't go wrong! LOL Loved this piece and Sookie's little fantasy!
Merry Christmas and many Blessings for the New Year! Thanks for sharing this story! *million kisses back* :D
2SouthernLady23With Eric, fangs, and lemons you can't go wrong! LOL Loved this piece and Sookie's little fantasy!
Merry Christmas and many Blessings for the New Year! Thanks for sharing this story! *million kisses back* :D
12/23/2010 c1 14YoungBoho
I know I went over (and over) this when I beta'ed for you, but the imagery really is amazing in this. You don't need the dialogue or the "extra" description because you can understand everything perfectly.
You gave us just the bare bones of the story and it worked beautifully. : )
14YoungBohoI know I went over (and over) this when I beta'ed for you, but the imagery really is amazing in this. You don't need the dialogue or the "extra" description because you can understand everything perfectly.
You gave us just the bare bones of the story and it worked beautifully. : )
12/23/2010 c1 17smittenskitten
Awww that was beautiful bb, Love it.
Really great Christmas nifty.
Thanks for sharing
*hugs*
17smittenskittenAwww that was beautiful bb, Love it.
Really great Christmas nifty.
Thanks for sharing
*hugs*
12/23/2010 c1 Laura BF
Wow I thought this was gonna be pure smuttiness,but I was wrong,this was soooo beautifully described!
And,well,as much as I´d love a naked viking in my path,what I really want for next year is a healthy year that helps me to stay alive with three kids at home ;)
Have a wonderful weekend!
Wow I thought this was gonna be pure smuttiness,but I was wrong,this was soooo beautifully described!
And,well,as much as I´d love a naked viking in my path,what I really want for next year is a healthy year that helps me to stay alive with three kids at home ;)
Have a wonderful weekend!