for Water and Bees Don't Mix Either3/6/2012 c1 
203BubblyShell22
I really liked this story. Yes, I feel badly for Bridget a lot because of what she had to go through with her mother. It just makes sense that she'd feel this way and then have to comfort her daughter who had a bad dream about her dying. One mistake I noticed is that you don't have commas before the quotes when someone is talking. You have to have that unless you replace it with a question mark or an exclamation mark depending on the quote and whether it's an exclamation or a question. But if it's neither, then you have to have a comma there. Other than that, good job.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
203BubblyShell22I really liked this story. Yes, I feel badly for Bridget a lot because of what she had to go through with her mother. It just makes sense that she'd feel this way and then have to comfort her daughter who had a bad dream about her dying. One mistake I noticed is that you don't have commas before the quotes when someone is talking. You have to have that unless you replace it with a question mark or an exclamation mark depending on the quote and whether it's an exclamation or a question. But if it's neither, then you have to have a comma there. Other than that, good job.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
1/19/2011 c1 Hannah Dewe
why does Eric have to die i have loved his character ever since i read the first book and have wanted to keep loving him for as long as i could
why does Eric have to die i have loved his character ever since i read the first book and have wanted to keep loving him for as long as i could
12/31/2010 c1 Guest
it's good
but why does eric die?
think about it...
it's really good though
i like how she is like MARLEY
it's good
but why does eric die?
think about it...
it's really good though
i like how she is like MARLEY