for Learning to Speak4/23/2012 c3 
3ShadowedFang
This is a lovely peice of work. All of it flows well, and you capture the emotions perfectly. I hope to see this continued in the future.
3ShadowedFangThis is a lovely peice of work. All of it flows well, and you capture the emotions perfectly. I hope to see this continued in the future.
11/22/2011 c3 7Zero612
I like this story, it flows between characters well and it's very nice and endearing.
7Zero612I like this story, it flows between characters well and it's very nice and endearing.
2/18/2011 c2 SgtSmoothy
Can't help but think of Gustavo as the Bear Jew now from Inglorious Bastards XD. Glad to see this fic updated, excellent writing as usual. Although, there were a few instances where you were using 'quart' yard instead of 'court' yard. There were a few other grammatical errors but that's the only one that really stood out to me.
Maybe I missed something in the writing, but it was a little unclear why they were at Ezio's old home. I'd assume for some family heirloom Ezio had wanted retrieved from the ruins; it still would have been good to mention it briefly somewhere in there.
At first I was a bit discontent with how abruptly the story seemed to end, but I actually quite like it now that I've read it through a second time. I think the obscurity of their mission was the only thing that bothered me.
Anywho, that's my 2 cents. I really do enjoy your writing.
Can't help but think of Gustavo as the Bear Jew now from Inglorious Bastards XD. Glad to see this fic updated, excellent writing as usual. Although, there were a few instances where you were using 'quart' yard instead of 'court' yard. There were a few other grammatical errors but that's the only one that really stood out to me.
Maybe I missed something in the writing, but it was a little unclear why they were at Ezio's old home. I'd assume for some family heirloom Ezio had wanted retrieved from the ruins; it still would have been good to mention it briefly somewhere in there.
At first I was a bit discontent with how abruptly the story seemed to end, but I actually quite like it now that I've read it through a second time. I think the obscurity of their mission was the only thing that bothered me.
Anywho, that's my 2 cents. I really do enjoy your writing.
1/3/2011 c1 SgtSmoothy
I quite enjoyed that. Ever since I acquired my own Assassins in the game, I thought of writing a fic or two from the perspective of the recruits. Decided to check here first and was pleasantly surprised to stumble on this.
I've never been able to offer much in the way of constructive criticism, but your style has a very nice flow to it. I only wish that it had been longer. I realize that one-shots aren't necessarily meant to be long, but I'd like to get to know these Assassins just a -little- bit better.
Regardless, I'm looking forward to reading more from you.
I quite enjoyed that. Ever since I acquired my own Assassins in the game, I thought of writing a fic or two from the perspective of the recruits. Decided to check here first and was pleasantly surprised to stumble on this.
I've never been able to offer much in the way of constructive criticism, but your style has a very nice flow to it. I only wish that it had been longer. I realize that one-shots aren't necessarily meant to be long, but I'd like to get to know these Assassins just a -little- bit better.
Regardless, I'm looking forward to reading more from you.