for Grassfire1/1/2011 c1 
15whisperasweknowit
I'm going to admit that I was rather excited about this story. The summary seemed pretty cool, and I wanted to read it.
However, when I opened it up, the huge block of text just made me dizzy. /Paragraphs/, dear. You did it in the second chapter, but I don't know if it's any good because I couldn't get through the first.
Regards,
~Whisper~
15whisperasweknowitI'm going to admit that I was rather excited about this story. The summary seemed pretty cool, and I wanted to read it.
However, when I opened it up, the huge block of text just made me dizzy. /Paragraphs/, dear. You did it in the second chapter, but I don't know if it's any good because I couldn't get through the first.
Regards,
~Whisper~
1/1/2011 c2 dandy
Great story. I really like the names you came up with. Write more!
Great story. I really like the names you came up with. Write more!
1/1/2011 c1 29Bramblepaw
Hmm. I wouldn't call it bad, or good. Its okay, I think it needs a little bit more work though. Try charming it up a bit, and also please try to space the paragraphs out. Its hard to read such a big clump of stuff.
29BramblepawHmm. I wouldn't call it bad, or good. Its okay, I think it needs a little bit more work though. Try charming it up a bit, and also please try to space the paragraphs out. Its hard to read such a big clump of stuff.