
3/8/2014 c33 Guest
As always, I LOVED it! Can't get enough of this story :) shiki always makes me laugh with his comments. By the way, I'm glad you won't change the plot, it IS your story and you're the only one who should decide what to put in it ;) I'm looking forward for the next chapter :D
As always, I LOVED it! Can't get enough of this story :) shiki always makes me laugh with his comments. By the way, I'm glad you won't change the plot, it IS your story and you're the only one who should decide what to put in it ;) I'm looking forward for the next chapter :D
3/7/2014 c33
26Winged Element
I love Ichijo, always happy, but don't assume things Takuma! You know what happens when you assume things! Thanks for the update!

I love Ichijo, always happy, but don't assume things Takuma! You know what happens when you assume things! Thanks for the update!
2/22/2014 c15 nemesisswan
Good chapter. :) But I don't understand how Aidou can think he is gonna be allowed to keep her for a whole weekend in his room. *sweatdrop*
Good chapter. :) But I don't understand how Aidou can think he is gonna be allowed to keep her for a whole weekend in his room. *sweatdrop*
2/22/2014 c14 nemesisswan
Good chapter... except for one part that is obvious. It's sad this one ugly thing ruins my joy of reading every single time.
Good chapter... except for one part that is obvious. It's sad this one ugly thing ruins my joy of reading every single time.
2/22/2014 c13 nemesisswan
See? No childhood friend and the chapter is great. Well. maybe except for one sentence. ;) But I'm not really sure what to think about the end of this chapter. Original idea, that's for sure. But we'll see what comes next. Now, shall we? :)
See? No childhood friend and the chapter is great. Well. maybe except for one sentence. ;) But I'm not really sure what to think about the end of this chapter. Original idea, that's for sure. But we'll see what comes next. Now, shall we? :)
2/22/2014 c12 nemesisswan
Is there a point to bath in a lukewarm water if you are cold? There is a reason, one says only a hot bath will make you feel warmer. But then again your character never was the one to know how much good bathing can do.
It's not bad you don't know how your OC looks like. It's being topped by the sheer fact he exists in this story.
Is there a point to bath in a lukewarm water if you are cold? There is a reason, one says only a hot bath will make you feel warmer. But then again your character never was the one to know how much good bathing can do.
It's not bad you don't know how your OC looks like. It's being topped by the sheer fact he exists in this story.
2/22/2014 c11 nemesisswan
I don't mind this little cat and mouse chase since it's quite entertaining but it gets on my last nerves the reason is so weird and pointless. :(
I don't mind this little cat and mouse chase since it's quite entertaining but it gets on my last nerves the reason is so weird and pointless. :(
2/22/2014 c9 nemesisswan
Yup. Story is going down, all right. And in the worst possible way. Not sure what you need anime plot for if you seem happy enough to write this lovey-dovey unreadable chapters between two OC.
Yup. Story is going down, all right. And in the worst possible way. Not sure what you need anime plot for if you seem happy enough to write this lovey-dovey unreadable chapters between two OC.
2/22/2014 c8 nemesisswan
Have you noticed your character has a real problem with her hygiene? Not only she prefers to put fresh clothes on without cleaning herself and washing her hair but she does nothing in the morning, opting only to put her hair in a ugly ponytail instead of washing them or spending some time to make them look good.
I wonder if you will drop this friend idea and not ruin your story more or a disappointment waits for me in future chapters.
Gosh... I should like a real b*tch. And in your case, I would gladly stop myself from being like that. I mean, I DO like your story. The best proof of that, is the simple fact I am still here while any other story with - oh so great - childhood friend crappy idea had me dropping the story immediately. I like your sense of humour, little things you add here and there but this Rei thing puts the whole story in a dark. It's impossible for me to stay neutral and ignore him if he ruin half of every single chapter since he had made his sorry appearance. :(
Have you noticed your character has a real problem with her hygiene? Not only she prefers to put fresh clothes on without cleaning herself and washing her hair but she does nothing in the morning, opting only to put her hair in a ugly ponytail instead of washing them or spending some time to make them look good.
I wonder if you will drop this friend idea and not ruin your story more or a disappointment waits for me in future chapters.
Gosh... I should like a real b*tch. And in your case, I would gladly stop myself from being like that. I mean, I DO like your story. The best proof of that, is the simple fact I am still here while any other story with - oh so great - childhood friend crappy idea had me dropping the story immediately. I like your sense of humour, little things you add here and there but this Rei thing puts the whole story in a dark. It's impossible for me to stay neutral and ignore him if he ruin half of every single chapter since he had made his sorry appearance. :(
2/22/2014 c7 nemesisswan
Sorry to say that (honestly) but the second part of this chapter is so stupid and tasteless it literally made feel sick for a moment... If I wanted to read a useless crap like that I would reach for a different kind of fanfics. :(
Sorry to say that (honestly) but the second part of this chapter is so stupid and tasteless it literally made feel sick for a moment... If I wanted to read a useless crap like that I would reach for a different kind of fanfics. :(
2/22/2014 c6 nemesisswan
Why for God's sake do you have to insist to add this stupid soap opera about idiotic childhood friend? :( You had made a huge mistake of a size of a mountain by adding it in the first place and now you are only digging a deeper and deeper grave for your good story. :(
Why for God's sake do you have to insist to add this stupid soap opera about idiotic childhood friend? :( You had made a huge mistake of a size of a mountain by adding it in the first place and now you are only digging a deeper and deeper grave for your good story. :(
2/22/2014 c5 nemesisswan
Is there any point in this pathetic soap opera of a chapter I somehow completely miss? - _ - Sweetie, you really had NOT had any ideas at that time, had you? I can recall, I was writing such crap too when I was young teen, had no idea how to write some part of my stories so I was writing nonsenses like you did here.
Is there any point in this pathetic soap opera of a chapter I somehow completely miss? - _ - Sweetie, you really had NOT had any ideas at that time, had you? I can recall, I was writing such crap too when I was young teen, had no idea how to write some part of my stories so I was writing nonsenses like you did here.
2/22/2014 c4 nemesisswan
Childhood friend? You had a nice to read story and you had thrown it into a dirty mud adding A CHILDHOOD FRIEND!? Have you any idea how pathetic, old-fashioned, bored, not original, cheap idea it is? EVERY single one writer who has no talent puts a damn childhood friend into their stories. It's sooo lame. :( Your story is not bad for you to feel desperate enough to add one. Why did you have to add one too? :( I had read thousands stories and NO decent story had this crappy childhood friend crap. It's like a premonition of a disaster.
Childhood friend? You had a nice to read story and you had thrown it into a dirty mud adding A CHILDHOOD FRIEND!? Have you any idea how pathetic, old-fashioned, bored, not original, cheap idea it is? EVERY single one writer who has no talent puts a damn childhood friend into their stories. It's sooo lame. :( Your story is not bad for you to feel desperate enough to add one. Why did you have to add one too? :( I had read thousands stories and NO decent story had this crappy childhood friend crap. It's like a premonition of a disaster.