for The Misunderstanding1/12/2011 c1 eye1
what a great idea, im likeing the story so far. I hope you do more chapters !
some advice, when a different person speaks you should change to a new line it's a better structure and easyer to read that way.
otherwise a great story so far ! x
what a great idea, im likeing the story so far. I hope you do more chapters !
some advice, when a different person speaks you should change to a new line it's a better structure and easyer to read that way.
otherwise a great story so far ! x
1/11/2011 c1 
5sammie77
Interesting concept - could be a good story but difficult to read. I know English is not your first language. This could be very good - you need to look for a beta reader who could help you fine tune this and make it readable! I would like to read it, but not if it's too much work to understand.
5sammie77Interesting concept - could be a good story but difficult to read. I know English is not your first language. This could be very good - you need to look for a beta reader who could help you fine tune this and make it readable! I would like to read it, but not if it's too much work to understand.