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3/29/2011 c4 Lucy Ash Hawthorne
cool!
3/29/2011 c3 bh
honestly, you really need to proof-read your work and try to establish a story-telling pace.
3/29/2011 c3 Guest
have him with hinata as well
3/29/2011 c3 Lucy Ash Hawthorne
awesome!
3/29/2011 c2 Lucy Ash Hawthorne
cool!
3/29/2011 c1 Lucy Ash Hawthorne
cool!
3/29/2011 c2 UMMX
Killer bee brother name is E. or you can say EE as it sounds
3/29/2011 c3 19Reishin Amara
nice
3/29/2011 c3 guy
great story keep it up
3/29/2011 c3 120991ln
continue
3/29/2011 c3 1FerPeinRikudou
Please update sooooon.
3/29/2011 c3 lightningblade49
pretty good i pick dragon contract and fu and konan for harem.
3/29/2011 c2 legacy
what the fuck is this crap asshole.are you writing a fucking satire.plus your fic just doesn't make any sense it just feels like a pathetic rip off from a fic i read which depicted minato and kushina ressurected.

I'd advise you to make amendments in the first two chapters.since you have adopted a dark theme you have to stick to it and not make it into a fuckin' comedy.i'd suggest you to seek help from namikazekyuubi or the author who writes black flames dance in the wind.
3/26/2011 c2 5Esus927
Seriously, Minato and Kushina are this indifferent to the fact that their child was TORTURED, RAPED, AND HATED FOR HIS ENTIRE LIFE?

Seriously, if you're going to go this route, then you need to either have Minato be much more severe and merciless, or don't have Naruto be tortured, raped and hated.
3/23/2011 c3 Diablo200030002002
Question why have you not had Minato announce tothe village wo his son was?
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