for Love Songs in E Minor1/19/2011 c1 cebinc
Wow, great story! Thank you for sharing it with us. Such wonderful talent.
Cheryl
Wow, great story! Thank you for sharing it with us. Such wonderful talent.
Cheryl
1/19/2011 c1 Ciaobella53
Beautiful and well written! loved it!
Beautiful and well written! loved it!
1/19/2011 c1 
5AnnaLund
ok, I'm just going to go up on the roof of my apartment building, just to check. I'll be right back. Or not, depending on what I find there. Or who. Gaah, I'll bring a cup of hot chocolate, too.
I don't know about you, but this was mayor in every way, not minor.
I love how you work words, pleating, coaxing, dressing, pinching. And then, THERE: perfect.
thank you for writing. my days are a little brighter for it.
cheers
anna
(lost in the third movement)
(jason mraz and 'details in the fabric' come to mind.)
5AnnaLundok, I'm just going to go up on the roof of my apartment building, just to check. I'll be right back. Or not, depending on what I find there. Or who. Gaah, I'll bring a cup of hot chocolate, too.
I don't know about you, but this was mayor in every way, not minor.
I love how you work words, pleating, coaxing, dressing, pinching. And then, THERE: perfect.
thank you for writing. my days are a little brighter for it.
cheers
anna
(lost in the third movement)
(jason mraz and 'details in the fabric' come to mind.)
1/18/2011 c1 14RosaBella75
Gorgeous, tortured and uplifting, bb! His suffering and his music were so very vivid. Bravo!
Thanks for sharing, bb!
14RosaBella75Gorgeous, tortured and uplifting, bb! His suffering and his music were so very vivid. Bravo!
Thanks for sharing, bb!
1/18/2011 c1 43KitsuShel
Oh, Kate. That was beautiful! I really hope you do very well in the contest!
=)
Shel
43KitsuShelOh, Kate. That was beautiful! I really hope you do very well in the contest!
=)
Shel
1/18/2011 c1 miamia80
it blows my mind how you write completely different stories and they all sound and read so differently. how do you keep them straight!
i took a look at the pic. wow. you nailed it! i love a guitar playing edward. i love that he wrote these songs for her. you made him seem believable and realistic too. their conversations, especially where bella threw a mug at her boss for hitting on her was really well done.
this edward is swoonworthy. i loved these lines -
"his heart thrums thinking that maybe, just maybe, her reaction is because of the 'my' in front of the 'girl'. " - unf
"It's similar to drowning in the way she consumes him. And if he's not mistaken, she's gasping for air as well. One thing is clear: Edward and Bella match, lock and key." - swoon!
"He can actually hear himself fall in love. That's why it's so hard to play and why his face crumples to hide the embarrassing moisture in his eyes."... "It's desperation and pleading. Somewhere in the middle, he hears his heart crack." - agh! of course you put heartfail!
"I'm going to make love to you until you can't see." -aghhhh!
you kill me bb! i loved it! i think you could continue. maybe even a little novella!
mia
it blows my mind how you write completely different stories and they all sound and read so differently. how do you keep them straight!
i took a look at the pic. wow. you nailed it! i love a guitar playing edward. i love that he wrote these songs for her. you made him seem believable and realistic too. their conversations, especially where bella threw a mug at her boss for hitting on her was really well done.
this edward is swoonworthy. i loved these lines -
"his heart thrums thinking that maybe, just maybe, her reaction is because of the 'my' in front of the 'girl'. " - unf
"It's similar to drowning in the way she consumes him. And if he's not mistaken, she's gasping for air as well. One thing is clear: Edward and Bella match, lock and key." - swoon!
"He can actually hear himself fall in love. That's why it's so hard to play and why his face crumples to hide the embarrassing moisture in his eyes."... "It's desperation and pleading. Somewhere in the middle, he hears his heart crack." - agh! of course you put heartfail!
"I'm going to make love to you until you can't see." -aghhhh!
you kill me bb! i loved it! i think you could continue. maybe even a little novella!
mia
1/18/2011 c1 19edwardsisobel
I really enjoyed reading the story and the name was very well done - minor chords can be so melancholy and that is exactly how Edward appears at the start of the story. I quite enjoyed the single POV too - it make it more heartbreaking to not know (just like Edward) what went wrong until he does. I love that he is writing a third movement - I suspect he will be adding lots of major chords in that one with the sheer joy he is now feeling. Loved it.
Suz
19edwardsisobelI really enjoyed reading the story and the name was very well done - minor chords can be so melancholy and that is exactly how Edward appears at the start of the story. I quite enjoyed the single POV too - it make it more heartbreaking to not know (just like Edward) what went wrong until he does. I love that he is writing a third movement - I suspect he will be adding lots of major chords in that one with the sheer joy he is now feeling. Loved it.
Suz
1/18/2011 c1 songster
Never, ever stop writing because I will chase you down and kick your hiney then make you write. I loved this. I just wish I could read your stuff everyday all day. All kidding aside, your writing seems to improve by the piece. You've achieved a wonderful balance between description, emotional content and dialogue, both external and internal. I've never really tried writing something first person and I suppose experimenting with telling a story with only one side of it could be both interesting and challenging. I notice that a lot of stories seem to be told this way. Random note: I always love it when Edward is a musician. The other thing that I like about your stories is that you don't feel the need to push the high life; your characters are real with real lives (well except for the vamps) and they are still compelling. Great job.
Never, ever stop writing because I will chase you down and kick your hiney then make you write. I loved this. I just wish I could read your stuff everyday all day. All kidding aside, your writing seems to improve by the piece. You've achieved a wonderful balance between description, emotional content and dialogue, both external and internal. I've never really tried writing something first person and I suppose experimenting with telling a story with only one side of it could be both interesting and challenging. I notice that a lot of stories seem to be told this way. Random note: I always love it when Edward is a musician. The other thing that I like about your stories is that you don't feel the need to push the high life; your characters are real with real lives (well except for the vamps) and they are still compelling. Great job.
1/18/2011 c1 Ishouldntbehere
You said you enjoyed writing this - I enjoyed reading it, too. Very nicely crafted.
Thanks!
You said you enjoyed writing this - I enjoyed reading it, too. Very nicely crafted.
Thanks!
1/18/2011 c1 Hadley Hemingway
LOVED this - all your writing is excellent and I continue to enjoy it but this piece really resonates - well done!
LOVED this - all your writing is excellent and I continue to enjoy it but this piece really resonates - well done!
1/18/2011 c1 4BilliCullen
Kate, you write the best fucking Edward pov's ever.
I adored this, I read it and savored it like a good dessert.
Bravo bb!
4BilliCullenKate, you write the best fucking Edward pov's ever.
I adored this, I read it and savored it like a good dessert.
Bravo bb!