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8/2/2014 c1 13creativesm75
nice.
6/16/2012 c1 14malevolent-deceiver
I love this! It's given me inspiration to write more on my ongoing story, Writing on The Wall. Thank you!
4/3/2011 c1 71Trumpet-Geek
Interesting plot. I do love Prussia/Germany reunion fics. I do have to nit-pick though, because I'm an English major and improper grammar and spelling bothers me.

You wrote: I hope down from the building ruins, and was right in front of him. We took in the site of each other.

There are several things wrong with that sentence alone (this is just one example that I picked out from the fic). First of all, hope and site are not the correct words -hop and sight would be what you were looking for. And the tense changes in that sentence from present to past. Tenses should remain the same. Also the sentence itself is put together awkwardly. With a little rearranging of words it would flow a lot better. I suggest finding a beta to help you with anything you might overlook before posting! They're pretty helpful in the long run and will help you expand your writing skills.

Anywho... I rambled, sorry :) Good luck on your next endeavors!
1/19/2011 c1 4ladystormsea
Interesting. Is this a one-shot? =)

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