for The Mystery of Why Bowser Kidnaps Peach4/29/2012 c1 Random101
I agree with Peach the Hedgehog.
I agree with Peach the Hedgehog.
4/29/2012 c1 Random101
@ThatNintendoFangirl - You know, just because a fic could be better, doesn't mean you have to be rude.
@ThatNintendoFangirl - You know, just because a fic could be better, doesn't mean you have to be rude.
4/8/2011 c1 
59Angel Peach Blossom
Could be better, but that is my opinion. I wonder what your version of why Peach always kidnapped by Bowser is. When you think about it, there is more than one reason why.
Toadsworth is one word because that is his name. And Partners in Time has shown that Bowser has been kidnapping Peach since they were babies. So saying that it all started on her 14th birthday doesn't make a lot of sense to me.
Aside from that, the only other thing I can suggest is a lot more description. And I mean a lot more. There isn't really much here, and that isn't a good thing. We need more to help paint a picture in our heads.
I do think this is a good idea, especially if you do something different from everyone else. I just think it needs a little work is all.
59Angel Peach BlossomCould be better, but that is my opinion. I wonder what your version of why Peach always kidnapped by Bowser is. When you think about it, there is more than one reason why.
Toadsworth is one word because that is his name. And Partners in Time has shown that Bowser has been kidnapping Peach since they were babies. So saying that it all started on her 14th birthday doesn't make a lot of sense to me.
Aside from that, the only other thing I can suggest is a lot more description. And I mean a lot more. There isn't really much here, and that isn't a good thing. We need more to help paint a picture in our heads.
I do think this is a good idea, especially if you do something different from everyone else. I just think it needs a little work is all.
1/27/2011 c1 ThatNintendoFangirl
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