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1/1/2014 c2 harunosakura471
Next part!
2/13/2011 c1 Kage no Yuki
Its good.. I enjoy reading it. but don't u think nami a bit ooc? juts from my point of view ^_^. cos i think Nami is a person with a big self denial when it comes to love. maybe a litle describe about self denial in the begining will improve the story.

Keep update...i'm waiting! ganbatte!
2/2/2011 c1 Perry The Platypus
DUDE! THIS STORY IS FCKIN AWESOMEEH PLS UPDATE IT!
1/31/2011 c1 50Eleamaya
I miss SanNa fic in english! Update it!

Well, you should divide dialogues from 2 people into different paragraph.

You write like this:

Sanji raised an eyebrow, "Anything else, Nami-swan?" She sighed. "No Sanji-kun." He lit up a cigarette and sat down in the chair next to her. She took a bite of his delicious food and smiled, he always made the best food. Once the last bite was finished, she leaned over to Sanji and gave him a kiss on the cheek. "Arigatou, Sanji-kun." He swooned. "N-Nami-swan?" He fell off the chair and landed with a loud thump.

And the right is:

Sanji raised an eyebrow, "Anything else, Nami-swan?"

She sighed. "No Sanji-kun."

He lit up a cigarette and sat down in the chair next to her. She took a bite of his delicious food and smiled, he always made the best food. Once the last bite was finished, she leaned over to Sanji and gave him a kiss on the cheek.

"Arigatou, Sanji-kun."

He swooned. "N-Nami-swan?" He fell off the chair and landed with a loud thump

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