for Who Am I?8/20/2013 c6 Roseybelle2
Very fun story! I love that he went back to when he first met Jack. Very fun little extra details thrown in too. Thanks for this! :)
Very fun story! I love that he went back to when he first met Jack. Very fun little extra details thrown in too. Thanks for this! :)
8/17/2011 c5 
21Kirsten Erin
This is hilarious! I love the idea and Jack getting to see himself through someone else's eyes.
"When I get out to Santa Fe," blurted out David suddenly as his bloodshot eyes snapped open and he struggled to get back to his feet, "I'm gonna ride the women and court the horses!"
Jack stood up first."Give it to me."
^I almost died.
Race shook his head. "Hit him again, Jack."
^That made it worse.
Lol. Racetrack would come up with a hair-brained scheme like that.
21Kirsten ErinThis is hilarious! I love the idea and Jack getting to see himself through someone else's eyes.
"When I get out to Santa Fe," blurted out David suddenly as his bloodshot eyes snapped open and he struggled to get back to his feet, "I'm gonna ride the women and court the horses!"
Jack stood up first."Give it to me."
^I almost died.
Race shook his head. "Hit him again, Jack."
^That made it worse.
Lol. Racetrack would come up with a hair-brained scheme like that.
5/18/2011 c6 1silenceEchoes
Oh my goodness, this story was so cute. It was good to have this and RED to alternate between, a little comedy here, a little drama there. But I loved this story, and I just love Jack so much. I'm excited for this Jack-centric multi-chapter story that you mentioned...
So, as always, amazing writing, great story, I seriously couldn't get enough of this one :)
~Jordyn
1silenceEchoesOh my goodness, this story was so cute. It was good to have this and RED to alternate between, a little comedy here, a little drama there. But I loved this story, and I just love Jack so much. I'm excited for this Jack-centric multi-chapter story that you mentioned...
So, as always, amazing writing, great story, I seriously couldn't get enough of this one :)
~Jordyn
5/9/2011 c6 Spin Bray
Stress~
Another review for another great story. I've slowly been catching up to your writing (this is my last one, for now!) but I am also trying to read the Soulmate series at the same time. Not to mention, real, non-newsie related life, but who needs that anyway? :) So here we go! As usual, I am writing as I go.
-Heheh, I really enjoy Tumbler being the only one who continues to listen to "Jacks" stories.
-Love the bit about waking up Boots.
-It sounds very odd when Kloppman says "hitting him over the head again yet?" I knew what you were getting at, but again and yet sound strange together. I think you could do with just one, for example "did you try hitting him over the head again?"
-Davids eyes WERE dazed but alert. You just said "they dazed but alert."
I love it! I love The little "epilogue but not quite" thing. So great! And I agree, playing with Jack is just too much fun! I hope you do give him a starring role in a new fic after Red, like you mentioned. Heads up, as soon as I find a suitable title, I will begin posting the beginnings of my very first fic! I will let you know when I do, in case you wanna read it. This humor fic was a stroke of genius! Great job.
~Tipps
Stress~
Another review for another great story. I've slowly been catching up to your writing (this is my last one, for now!) but I am also trying to read the Soulmate series at the same time. Not to mention, real, non-newsie related life, but who needs that anyway? :) So here we go! As usual, I am writing as I go.
-Heheh, I really enjoy Tumbler being the only one who continues to listen to "Jacks" stories.
-Love the bit about waking up Boots.
-It sounds very odd when Kloppman says "hitting him over the head again yet?" I knew what you were getting at, but again and yet sound strange together. I think you could do with just one, for example "did you try hitting him over the head again?"
-Davids eyes WERE dazed but alert. You just said "they dazed but alert."
I love it! I love The little "epilogue but not quite" thing. So great! And I agree, playing with Jack is just too much fun! I hope you do give him a starring role in a new fic after Red, like you mentioned. Heads up, as soon as I find a suitable title, I will begin posting the beginnings of my very first fic! I will let you know when I do, in case you wanna read it. This humor fic was a stroke of genius! Great job.
~Tipps
5/9/2011 c6 84Rosebud5
Wonderful ending, wonderful story...wonderful material for a sequel! LOL But seriously, I didn't stop laughing through the whole thing! Jack's me fave too...Ain't he fun to mess with? Hahaha Poor Jacky...Anyway, I loved this so much! GREAT GREAT GREAT job, me dear!
~Rosey
84Rosebud5Wonderful ending, wonderful story...wonderful material for a sequel! LOL But seriously, I didn't stop laughing through the whole thing! Jack's me fave too...Ain't he fun to mess with? Hahaha Poor Jacky...Anyway, I loved this so much! GREAT GREAT GREAT job, me dear!
~Rosey
5/8/2011 c6 164Kitty O
Ah, I loved it. The end, where he called Jack's name and Jack dropped him, was adorable.
164Kitty OAh, I loved it. The end, where he called Jack's name and Jack dropped him, was adorable.
4/20/2011 c5 Spin Bray
Stress-
This is good stuff. I need something light every once in a while. I got caught up on Red today, so after reading about Squints this was good to get my mind off it. I especially love the bit about the frying pan and him becoming Medda for a minute. Cant wait to read the end! Carry the Banner.
-Tipps
Stress-
This is good stuff. I need something light every once in a while. I got caught up on Red today, so after reading about Squints this was good to get my mind off it. I especially love the bit about the frying pan and him becoming Medda for a minute. Cant wait to read the end! Carry the Banner.
-Tipps
4/7/2011 c5 1silenceEchoes
Another wonderful, hilarious chapter. I love Jack's conscience— and the way it's voice doesn't come up much. Also, it was only a matter of time before Race came up with an idea. The logic behind it is great: Jack, you can smack him on the head with a frying pan since he's your best friend. I love it :) Can't wait to see where this goes.
~Jordyn
1silenceEchoesAnother wonderful, hilarious chapter. I love Jack's conscience— and the way it's voice doesn't come up much. Also, it was only a matter of time before Race came up with an idea. The logic behind it is great: Jack, you can smack him on the head with a frying pan since he's your best friend. I love it :) Can't wait to see where this goes.
~Jordyn
4/5/2011 c5 Adren
Man I love this. :D
"When I get out to Santa Fe," blurted out David suddenly as his bloodshot eyes snapped open and he struggled to get back to his feet, "I'm gonna ride the women and court the horses!"
LOl! Davey's lines at the end were hysterical.
I'm sad to see that this fic is almost over; its so funny! :( Keep it up Stress!
CTB!
~Adren
Man I love this. :D
"When I get out to Santa Fe," blurted out David suddenly as his bloodshot eyes snapped open and he struggled to get back to his feet, "I'm gonna ride the women and court the horses!"
LOl! Davey's lines at the end were hysterical.
I'm sad to see that this fic is almost over; its so funny! :( Keep it up Stress!
CTB!
~Adren
4/5/2011 c5 84Rosebud5
"When I get out to Santa Fe," blurted out David suddenly as his bloodshot eyes snapped open and he struggled to get back to his feet, "I'm gonna ride the women and court the horses!"
Yes. That just made my day. This is amazing. Fantastic. I love it. Update. Please. :)
A very happy Rosebud5 signing off!
84Rosebud5"When I get out to Santa Fe," blurted out David suddenly as his bloodshot eyes snapped open and he struggled to get back to his feet, "I'm gonna ride the women and court the horses!"
Yes. That just made my day. This is amazing. Fantastic. I love it. Update. Please. :)
A very happy Rosebud5 signing off!
4/5/2011 c5 164Kitty O
Lol. Poor dear, getting whacked over the head. Really it's Jack's fault. If he wasnt so wild, David wouldn't be :)
164Kitty OLol. Poor dear, getting whacked over the head. Really it's Jack's fault. If he wasnt so wild, David wouldn't be :)
4/5/2011 c5 mayday321
Yay! New Chpt! Lollll... Poor Skittery...
And Racetrack! But... where did he get that frying pan? o.O
Yay! New Chpt! Lollll... Poor Skittery...
And Racetrack! But... where did he get that frying pan? o.O
4/2/2011 c4 84Rosebud5
I. Love. This. Story! It's HYSTERICAL! Oh poor Jacky...I can't wait to see what happens next! It makes me want to write another humor Newsie-fic:)
UPDATE! PLEASE!
~Rosey
84Rosebud5I. Love. This. Story! It's HYSTERICAL! Oh poor Jacky...I can't wait to see what happens next! It makes me want to write another humor Newsie-fic:)
UPDATE! PLEASE!
~Rosey
3/20/2011 c4 164Kitty O
Jack had to swallow back his groan. Did he really sound like such a letch when he thought he was being charming?
Probably. This was great!
164Kitty OJack had to swallow back his groan. Did he really sound like such a letch when he thought he was being charming?
Probably. This was great!
3/20/2011 c4 1AdrenalineRush16
AHH! WHY HAVEN'T I REVIEWED THIS YET? Sorry Stress!
Anyway, love this.
"The real Jack tried to pretend he couldn't hear how sweet and charming Sarah was being to someone that wasn't him. Even if it was to her brother. Even if she was acting like she was speaking to him. He didn't have to like it and he sure as hell didn't."
Even though the kinda-incest-but-not-really-cuz-Davey-is-off-his-rocker is gross, its also very funny. :) The 'Frank' thing also cracked me up but what you nailed was how David sees Jack. Jack's feelings on that ("am I really like that?") keeps making me giggle. Serves Jack right! (Sorry Stress, but he does a bit too much pride at times...)
Yay! Update soon please!
~Adren
1AdrenalineRush16AHH! WHY HAVEN'T I REVIEWED THIS YET? Sorry Stress!
Anyway, love this.
"The real Jack tried to pretend he couldn't hear how sweet and charming Sarah was being to someone that wasn't him. Even if it was to her brother. Even if she was acting like she was speaking to him. He didn't have to like it and he sure as hell didn't."
Even though the kinda-incest-but-not-really-cuz-Davey-is-off-his-rocker is gross, its also very funny. :) The 'Frank' thing also cracked me up but what you nailed was how David sees Jack. Jack's feelings on that ("am I really like that?") keeps making me giggle. Serves Jack right! (Sorry Stress, but he does a bit too much pride at times...)
Yay! Update soon please!
~Adren