for Juliet:A Maximum Ride story2/9/2011 c1 The Purple Penguin of Doom
I love the idea, but I would love if you'd put in some parentheses, too. Just saying. The story went a bit fast and somewhat confusing.
Either way, I must say, I LOOOOOOVVVVEE IT!
I love the idea, but I would love if you'd put in some parentheses, too. Just saying. The story went a bit fast and somewhat confusing.
Either way, I must say, I LOOOOOOVVVVEE IT!
2/9/2011 c1 Moriarsh
You should take this story off. It has horrible grammar, horrible spelling, and a horrible plot. Really bad, you need a lot more years in school..
You should take this story off. It has horrible grammar, horrible spelling, and a horrible plot. Really bad, you need a lot more years in school..
2/9/2011 c1 raven at midnight
Good story. I like the name Juliet. It's very pretty.
Anyways. I'd just like to give you a little CC if that's okay?
When someone is talking, you put what they say in quotations. Fang said, "Hey, no swearing missy!" Also, when someone talks, you're supposed to start a new paragraph. Some description of your character's features would be nice (the link you posted doesn't work, by the way). And it's best if you don't use chatspeak.
That's all. Other than those few things, your story is good. It has a lot of potential.
-Kait
Good story. I like the name Juliet. It's very pretty.
Anyways. I'd just like to give you a little CC if that's okay?
When someone is talking, you put what they say in quotations. Fang said, "Hey, no swearing missy!" Also, when someone talks, you're supposed to start a new paragraph. Some description of your character's features would be nice (the link you posted doesn't work, by the way). And it's best if you don't use chatspeak.
That's all. Other than those few things, your story is good. It has a lot of potential.
-Kait