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4/1/2011 c2 avelinette
Okay, 1)This is impossible. You don't tell people about any of your OC's. It's great that you have your world perfectly detailed and everything is connected. Now, if you could just tell us about it?

And 2) "Andromeda" literally SCREAMS "Mary Sue,". If you plan to disagree, here is the proof from this chapter alone:

1) A three year old killed people. No. Not possible. People don't even start remembering things until they are three. Not even halfbloods. Maybe gods, but no one else.

2) Poseidon, Artemis, and Hecate? Even LESS possible. Maiden goddess? Helloo? Anybody home? I guess not.

3)Really? Ashley has basically no realistic feelings whatsoever.

That enough proof for you? Reboot your brain and see if you can get the kinks worked out. I think with explanation and Non-Mary Sue-ing, this could be a really good story. Right now, I had trouble following the first chapter.
3/19/2011 c2 9Logical Fallacy
Need. A beta. That's all I can say for now...
2/21/2011 c2 7The Girl of the Moon
I am sorry' but I kind of lost you in this chap... but I like the idea! ;)

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