for The Dark Lord's Equal3/11/2022 c6 LAB1
This story was very funny and amusing until the big fight scene. Then it seemed to rapidly change in feel and went on forever. Harry going back was great though!
This story was very funny and amusing until the big fight scene. Then it seemed to rapidly change in feel and went on forever. Harry going back was great though!
3/7/2022 c6 Roxtous
I wish the fic quotes had titles instead of authors... (or in addition to) it would make it way easier to find the fics.
I wish the fic quotes had titles instead of authors... (or in addition to) it would make it way easier to find the fics.
3/6/2022 c4 Guest1138
That was a whole bunch of incongruencies and it was quite difficult to follow. Who was in the room again? Both times? Who was he training? What were they gathering for? How is Harry working? Is school out, despite it still being June and school's in session? Why isn't he back at the Dursleys if school's out? Where is he living? Who is he living with? What's going on?
It's all very confusing. You need a serious rewrite to clear things up and actually give the reader (especially me) some situational awareness as to who is actually involved in each scene. There was a few times there when I had no idea who was the narrator, and in most cases, who they were talking to!
That was a whole bunch of incongruencies and it was quite difficult to follow. Who was in the room again? Both times? Who was he training? What were they gathering for? How is Harry working? Is school out, despite it still being June and school's in session? Why isn't he back at the Dursleys if school's out? Where is he living? Who is he living with? What's going on?
It's all very confusing. You need a serious rewrite to clear things up and actually give the reader (especially me) some situational awareness as to who is actually involved in each scene. There was a few times there when I had no idea who was the narrator, and in most cases, who they were talking to!
3/2/2022 c1 Terracotta Tortilla
Very OOC. Good luck in the future, but I can see why this isn't the most well loved story
Very OOC. Good luck in the future, but I can see why this isn't the most well loved story
2/16/2022 c6 thomaseliot
I am cackling SO madly. On a bit of a nostalgia reread of HP fic, and didn't expect to find this I've so far up the 'last updated' list. Idk how much is original or what you've changed, but either way it was so much fun! Had so much fun with all the little references to other fics and fandoms; some obvious and structural like the cloneserpents stuff, some blink-missable like Pterry's trousers of time. And you know what, I think I recognised every single one of those fanfic quotes, either the quote itself or the author. Now I wanna go back and reread them all! I have a full time job, damn you! Ahem.
Last note: I LOVE the whole perpendicular universe thing - and that's a good name for it too. I have ideas like that all the time, but never manage to write them down (never managed to write any fic down tbh, it's a problem I have). But it brings me so much joy to see someone else doing it, so go you! Thanks heaps for writing. xD
I am cackling SO madly. On a bit of a nostalgia reread of HP fic, and didn't expect to find this I've so far up the 'last updated' list. Idk how much is original or what you've changed, but either way it was so much fun! Had so much fun with all the little references to other fics and fandoms; some obvious and structural like the cloneserpents stuff, some blink-missable like Pterry's trousers of time. And you know what, I think I recognised every single one of those fanfic quotes, either the quote itself or the author. Now I wanna go back and reread them all! I have a full time job, damn you! Ahem.
Last note: I LOVE the whole perpendicular universe thing - and that's a good name for it too. I have ideas like that all the time, but never manage to write them down (never managed to write any fic down tbh, it's a problem I have). But it brings me so much joy to see someone else doing it, so go you! Thanks heaps for writing. xD
2/1/2022 c1 ymrgf
I know why this fic is not very popular. The author using bizarre order to write his story that many can't catch the tail or the head of this story.
I know why this fic is not very popular. The author using bizarre order to write his story that many can't catch the tail or the head of this story.
1/30/2022 c3 Makimass
holy shit this fic is one of the worse fic I've read, how can anyone even read this with the annoying random perspective..4th wall breaking? Narcissistic harry? Bad characterizations? Cringey Dialogues? Switching perspectives where you have to guess who's bloody talking? It's all in this fic..
holy shit this fic is one of the worse fic I've read, how can anyone even read this with the annoying random perspective..4th wall breaking? Narcissistic harry? Bad characterizations? Cringey Dialogues? Switching perspectives where you have to guess who's bloody talking? It's all in this fic..
1/24/2022 c3 Guest
The way you described Molly means you like being fucked in the ass and being henpicked by any women because you lack a spine, balls, and any kind of solidarity that would make you have any value. Go back to sucking shit you loser.
The way you described Molly means you like being fucked in the ass and being henpicked by any women because you lack a spine, balls, and any kind of solidarity that would make you have any value. Go back to sucking shit you loser.
1/14/2022 c6 Grenn
I forgot that I already read it, and so I went and read it again. Second time. Because it's damn hilarious reading, creative and level headed and showing a deep undertstanding of people's psych. Don't why I haven't favorited it before, but I'm going to do that now.
You know, this Harry's obsession with other men's wives got me thinking. And the more I think about it, the more sure I am that trying to marry Hermione yourself is a very bad idea. You may have decent table manners, and you never snore, but the moment will come when you forget to lower the toilet seat or throw your sock on a chair, or something else you can't really predict. And then it will start. You filling the role Ron used to play, the enemy. Kind of a relation she'd be happy to put a blood curse on, or memory charm into identity loss. It's a gamble when you stake everything on the idea that your wand is magical enough to make her forget about any flaw you might have.
In fact, I've got a quote on the matter. It's from a great fic in Russian about Filch reinventing his life after haveing a stroke. Here's my translation:
"Oh, Molly! If you had a quarter as much brains as you have tits, we would have a carnival. Without the brains starts the comparison of the lover and the husband, then comes by the novatory idea of making the carnival everlasting. To start hating your chubby man, to humiliate him, to rob. To build a new nest out of the stolen shards, only to one day realize that a carnaval always comes to an end."
Edvin, "Argus".
I forgot that I already read it, and so I went and read it again. Second time. Because it's damn hilarious reading, creative and level headed and showing a deep undertstanding of people's psych. Don't why I haven't favorited it before, but I'm going to do that now.
You know, this Harry's obsession with other men's wives got me thinking. And the more I think about it, the more sure I am that trying to marry Hermione yourself is a very bad idea. You may have decent table manners, and you never snore, but the moment will come when you forget to lower the toilet seat or throw your sock on a chair, or something else you can't really predict. And then it will start. You filling the role Ron used to play, the enemy. Kind of a relation she'd be happy to put a blood curse on, or memory charm into identity loss. It's a gamble when you stake everything on the idea that your wand is magical enough to make her forget about any flaw you might have.
In fact, I've got a quote on the matter. It's from a great fic in Russian about Filch reinventing his life after haveing a stroke. Here's my translation:
"Oh, Molly! If you had a quarter as much brains as you have tits, we would have a carnival. Without the brains starts the comparison of the lover and the husband, then comes by the novatory idea of making the carnival everlasting. To start hating your chubby man, to humiliate him, to rob. To build a new nest out of the stolen shards, only to one day realize that a carnaval always comes to an end."
Edvin, "Argus".
12/28/2021 c4 
60EdTheBeast
Sorry but Deadwoodpecker is a H/G fan. No can do, think it is a potion hazard. Now H/G/HG is fine, H/G/LL is also, or any Harry/ other girl or harem with Ginny is OK.
60EdTheBeastSorry but Deadwoodpecker is a H/G fan. No can do, think it is a potion hazard. Now H/G/HG is fine, H/G/LL is also, or any Harry/ other girl or harem with Ginny is OK.
10/31/2021 c5 BerserkLittleCook
For most of the shifts I'm like "wtf is happening!" and it's not the fault of the first person perspective. It's just your total refusal to describe places and circumstances in any length at all
For most of the shifts I'm like "wtf is happening!" and it's not the fault of the first person perspective. It's just your total refusal to describe places and circumstances in any length at all
10/31/2021 c4 BerserkLittleCook
If you either kill everyone or create a new world which doesn't change the present world, isn't the whole plan pointless either way? Unless you managed to later merge the two worlds into one without killing anyone
If you either kill everyone or create a new world which doesn't change the present world, isn't the whole plan pointless either way? Unless you managed to later merge the two worlds into one without killing anyone
10/25/2021 c6 Yasmanian Devil
I have to tell you, even if I didn’t get all of the references I still enjoyed reading this story so very much! It was really awesome and the last 2 lines of chapter 6 made it even more spectacular! Thanks for sharing!
I have to tell you, even if I didn’t get all of the references I still enjoyed reading this story so very much! It was really awesome and the last 2 lines of chapter 6 made it even more spectacular! Thanks for sharing!