for The Phoenix of Destiny5/4/2015 c17 DigDug1
Why u no update?!
Why u no update?!
8/25/2012 c15 
1Kaneshiro-Sama
Leon's back?! I thought he quit DOA after the 3rd tournament. What could be his motive this time?
1Kaneshiro-SamaLeon's back?! I thought he quit DOA after the 3rd tournament. What could be his motive this time?
8/6/2012 c6 Kaneshiro-Sama
And so the sisters have a destined battle. And a brutal one at that. Still doesn't beat throwing your son off a volcano or gunning them in the head LOL! Anyway, awesome fight chapter! For improvement, you could use a bit more detail on the moves they're doing namely the ninjitsu techniques they use (like the Virtua Fighter show). And I also like how you've put your own spin on the "Kunoichi's like us" story. I can definitely see Takashi in DOA5 (if Team Ninja pays attention to your fanfic in which they don't).
P.S: Your fanfic is more of "T" rated material from what I've seen so far compared to Damon Black. Just wanted to say what I thought. And Shun is like my character Sean LOL (xcept you came with the cool dude concept first. oops!)
And so the sisters have a destined battle. And a brutal one at that. Still doesn't beat throwing your son off a volcano or gunning them in the head LOL! Anyway, awesome fight chapter! For improvement, you could use a bit more detail on the moves they're doing namely the ninjitsu techniques they use (like the Virtua Fighter show). And I also like how you've put your own spin on the "Kunoichi's like us" story. I can definitely see Takashi in DOA5 (if Team Ninja pays attention to your fanfic in which they don't).
P.S: Your fanfic is more of "T" rated material from what I've seen so far compared to Damon Black. Just wanted to say what I thought. And Shun is like my character Sean LOL (xcept you came with the cool dude concept first. oops!)
7/18/2012 c17 Natsu Kaneshiro
Great chapter as always! But will you add Akira Yuki since your story is based on DOA5? Just a recommendation. I look forward to your next chapter (hopefully during summer vacation)!
Great chapter as always! But will you add Akira Yuki since your story is based on DOA5? Just a recommendation. I look forward to your next chapter (hopefully during summer vacation)!
6/14/2012 c17 5Kage69
like Z said, good chapter, noticed a few wording problems... where it should've been such and such said, you put asked, when it wasn't even a question... lol
also, you put the clan as Mugen Tensi, it's Tenshin...lol
just a few small critiques, but thats what we're here for bro...lol
and i do agree with Z about very short for such a long wait...lol but it was still a good chapter none the less
5Kage69like Z said, good chapter, noticed a few wording problems... where it should've been such and such said, you put asked, when it wasn't even a question... lol
also, you put the clan as Mugen Tensi, it's Tenshin...lol
just a few small critiques, but thats what we're here for bro...lol
and i do agree with Z about very short for such a long wait...lol but it was still a good chapter none the less
6/13/2012 c17 17Projekt-Z
Heh, that was good. Long wait for such a short chapter, but it was still a nice chapter. Can't wait for more fights.
17Projekt-ZHeh, that was good. Long wait for such a short chapter, but it was still a nice chapter. Can't wait for more fights.
2/27/2012 c16 Projekt-Z
Dude! The fights are what make the story. You should at least finish round one's fights.
Dude! The fights are what make the story. You should at least finish round one's fights.
2/27/2012 c16 5Kage69
great chapter bit short, but good none the less, hoping next chapter won't take so long... ^^
Keep up the good work.
5Kage69great chapter bit short, but good none the less, hoping next chapter won't take so long... ^^
Keep up the good work.
1/12/2012 c15 Kage69
good chapter, a bit short, just have one problem... Tina is American, but she's talking like she's Japanese. Keeps calling Takashi "Taka-kun", not something an American would say...
good chapter, a bit short, just have one problem... Tina is American, but she's talking like she's Japanese. Keeps calling Takashi "Taka-kun", not something an American would say...
1/11/2012 c15 2SHADOW92990
Ayane didn't really LOSE to Takashi, did she? No. She didn't. Their fight was postponed. That is all. Ayane is too powerful to lose against any beast. She did it in ninja gaiden, so, no, she can't lose to Takashi.
2SHADOW92990Ayane didn't really LOSE to Takashi, did she? No. She didn't. Their fight was postponed. That is all. Ayane is too powerful to lose against any beast. She did it in ninja gaiden, so, no, she can't lose to Takashi.
12/22/2011 c14 5Kage69
been to lazy to write a review, love the story. One error i noticed early on in the story, Ayane has purple hair, but you described her as having pink hair when both she and Ryu were reporting to Hayate about Takashi. also, ive noticed on several occasions when a guy was speaking you'd say "she" said, and sometimes vice-versa when a girl was speaking you occasionally wrote "he" said...
as you asked about fight suggestions, an early fight i'd like to see is Ayane vs. Christie.
5Kage69been to lazy to write a review, love the story. One error i noticed early on in the story, Ayane has purple hair, but you described her as having pink hair when both she and Ryu were reporting to Hayate about Takashi. also, ive noticed on several occasions when a guy was speaking you'd say "she" said, and sometimes vice-versa when a girl was speaking you occasionally wrote "he" said...
as you asked about fight suggestions, an early fight i'd like to see is Ayane vs. Christie.