
5/22/2011 c19
10Twilight Kyu
As Chester A. Bum from That Guy With The Glasses said... "OH MY GOD, THIS IS THE GREATEST FIC I EVER SEEN IN MY LIFE!"
The plot thickens as they reaching this arc's climax. I'm really interested with the new Core Medal that O's is going to get.
Keep it up!

As Chester A. Bum from That Guy With The Glasses said... "OH MY GOD, THIS IS THE GREATEST FIC I EVER SEEN IN MY LIFE!"
The plot thickens as they reaching this arc's climax. I'm really interested with the new Core Medal that O's is going to get.
Keep it up!
5/18/2011 c1 return null
Nice opening. Love the horrific scene at the museum.
And BTW, isn't the drug that was given to Shinichi was said to be "invisible" within the human body? So how did Agasa managed to come out with something with the blood sample that makes it posibble for Shinichi to chamge between his adult and child state? (The APTX thing should have been dissolved completely in the blood stream...)
Still, nice chapter to start with! (Man, how I need to improve my skills in writing (and giving reviews!))
Nice opening. Love the horrific scene at the museum.
And BTW, isn't the drug that was given to Shinichi was said to be "invisible" within the human body? So how did Agasa managed to come out with something with the blood sample that makes it posibble for Shinichi to chamge between his adult and child state? (The APTX thing should have been dissolved completely in the blood stream...)
Still, nice chapter to start with! (Man, how I need to improve my skills in writing (and giving reviews!))
5/17/2011 c18
33Enji86
I pick Ankh to control Shinichi's body.
He seems more reliable in such situation.
Update!

I pick Ankh to control Shinichi's body.
He seems more reliable in such situation.
Update!
5/17/2011 c18
10Twilight Kyu
Uva, that hot-headed Greed. Still, feel a bit sorry for Miyo.
Keep it up!

Uva, that hot-headed Greed. Still, feel a bit sorry for Miyo.
Keep it up!
5/6/2011 c17 Twilight Kyu
Well, I guess that Shinichi and Ankh are going to stay together for a long time. *smiles* hope they'll get along.
And things started to get heat up.
Keep it up!
Well, I guess that Shinichi and Ankh are going to stay together for a long time. *smiles* hope they'll get along.
And things started to get heat up.
Keep it up!
5/6/2011 c16 Twilight Kyu
I totally didn't expect that it is Shinichi speaking for the first time. Hope that it's a good sign since they still need Ankh to keep Shinichi alive.
I totally didn't expect that it is Shinichi speaking for the first time. Hope that it's a good sign since they still need Ankh to keep Shinichi alive.
5/5/2011 c17
33Enji86
Poor Kyuji.
He seems very confused with Ankh and Shinichi switch.
I think it will be safer if Kyuji become O when they sneak to Tokyo.
Update!

Poor Kyuji.
He seems very confused with Ankh and Shinichi switch.
I think it will be safer if Kyuji become O when they sneak to Tokyo.
Update!
5/5/2011 c11
2Lucaris
The belt is called OOO-Driver. Never use a single "O" when referring to OOO. It just looks lazy.
Again, the script format was used. Fix that. Adding the opening and ending songs to a fic is really a bad move. Readers do not care about that sort of thing. In the end, it's just a waste of space. And makes it seem like the chapter is longer than it is.

The belt is called OOO-Driver. Never use a single "O" when referring to OOO. It just looks lazy.
Again, the script format was used. Fix that. Adding the opening and ending songs to a fic is really a bad move. Readers do not care about that sort of thing. In the end, it's just a waste of space. And makes it seem like the chapter is longer than it is.
5/5/2011 c5 Lucaris
A lot of forced dialogue here. Try to tone down on that. Also, don't use the script format. Do not copy and paste what happened in the last chapter onto a new chapter. It's not only lazy, but cumbersome to a reader to go what happened again. More often than not, I just skip over those parts.
A lot of forced dialogue here. Try to tone down on that. Also, don't use the script format. Do not copy and paste what happened in the last chapter onto a new chapter. It's not only lazy, but cumbersome to a reader to go what happened again. More often than not, I just skip over those parts.
5/2/2011 c16
33Enji86
It's so tragic that Irie is died.
I hope they can find the cure so no one die anymore.
Update!

It's so tragic that Irie is died.
I hope they can find the cure so no one die anymore.
Update!
4/28/2011 c15 Twilight Kyu
This is getting more intense with more revelations showing up.
Keep it up!
This is getting more intense with more revelations showing up.
Keep it up!
4/23/2011 c14
33Enji86
So interesting.
I wonder what happen with Ankh aka Shinichi.
Do they will get Medals in every arc?
Update!

So interesting.
I wonder what happen with Ankh aka Shinichi.
Do they will get Medals in every arc?
Update!
4/18/2011 c13
10Twilight Kyu
Everything starts to get more intense especially that Mezuru's Yummy is loose.
Keep it up!

Everything starts to get more intense especially that Mezuru's Yummy is loose.
Keep it up!