for A Man of Many Sides1/28/2013 c1 real
Guitar wernt invented late 15th century ad the persian empire fell in about 330bce
Guitar wernt invented late 15th century ad the persian empire fell in about 330bce
9/2/2012 c4 
1ChamuelthePeacful
I believe what should happen is that somthing happens that sends them on another adventure
1ChamuelthePeacfulI believe what should happen is that somthing happens that sends them on another adventure
8/9/2012 c1 Guest
I think your story would flow better if you structured it slightly differently - whenever someone speaks, create a new paragraph. It allows the story to flow better... with it all bunched together like this the eyes get lost in as they end one line and try to find the other. You have a good start and I think that would help you a lot.
I think your story would flow better if you structured it slightly differently - whenever someone speaks, create a new paragraph. It allows the story to flow better... with it all bunched together like this the eyes get lost in as they end one line and try to find the other. You have a good start and I think that would help you a lot.
3/19/2012 c1 Vi-Violence
I strongly recommend that you make an effort to fix up the formatting on this.
I strongly recommend that you make an effort to fix up the formatting on this.
1/8/2012 c3 Emmy
Cute! I like it!:)
Cute! I like it!:)
7/20/2011 c1 kimmyd13
i love your story so far, its lovely!
i love your story so far, its lovely!
7/19/2011 c2 2steph wwe fan
awww cute that she was worried that he would hurt himself, love the fic and dastan and tamina as a couple :D
2steph wwe fanawww cute that she was worried that he would hurt himself, love the fic and dastan and tamina as a couple :D