for In the Beginning10/30/2012 c8 
12Rosalie.rock
gd but i think she doesnt like to be called sammy because thats what ruby called her
12Rosalie.rockgd but i think she doesnt like to be called sammy because thats what ruby called her
8/27/2012 c8 Gudero
Hi. I love your story. i read it in two days. I couldn‘t stop reading.
I just want to say thanks for this great story.
I have one question, how you came up with the story? Love your creativity.
Forgive my english, I hope you understand what I‘m trying to say.
Thanks :)
See you around...
Hi. I love your story. i read it in two days. I couldn‘t stop reading.
I just want to say thanks for this great story.
I have one question, how you came up with the story? Love your creativity.
Forgive my english, I hope you understand what I‘m trying to say.
Thanks :)
See you around...
8/11/2012 c1 saikiko
Hi I like the idea so far but you really need to proofread this again. The snake is only 3years old but samantha got her when she was six, considering she is in highschool im guessing shes not 9
Hi I like the idea so far but you really need to proofread this again. The snake is only 3years old but samantha got her when she was six, considering she is in highschool im guessing shes not 9
7/18/2012 c1 3Xtreme Nuisance
P.S.- I'm "Guest". I'm not hiding behind the lack of username, I swear. has changed a little bit since I've last signed in and I guess I just didn't sign in properly. :P
3Xtreme NuisanceP.S.- I'm "Guest". I'm not hiding behind the lack of username, I swear. has changed a little bit since I've last signed in and I guess I just didn't sign in properly. :P
7/17/2012 c4 Guest
Leukemia? Really? REALLY? I'm trying VERY hard not to be mean, but that's stupid. Even if she didn't want to have chemo, any smart parent wouldn't have given her the choice. And there are other options. Pills are available nowadays. Radiation therapy. And if she doesn't have any sort of treatment at all, OF COURSE IT'S GOING TO SPREAD. That's what cancer does. It SPREADS and it KILLS you.
I mean... are you serious? ARE YOU SERIOUS. I don't mean to be so angry but as a cancer survivor, it infuriates me that you didn't even bother doing your research on diseases such as FRICKEN CANCER. I'm sorry. Just... do your research. They say write what you know-judging from your profile you're rather young and, fortunately, blessed enough to be a healthy girl. So write about healthy girls. Make them as Mary Sue-like as you want, but stay away from diseases if you're not going to do some sort of research and/or write about them properly. I can't think of any possible way to construct this review so that it doesn't sound like a flame, because I don't want to discourage you, so that's some constructive criticism.
The good is that your characters are likeable and you have woven a semi-believable thing with the whole... Phoenix thing. The tattoos are a little unbelievable (are they born with them? Do they form when they meet their animal friends? Or are their parents also so irresponsible as to take their kids to a tattoo parlor (especially when one of the kids has cancer-cancer weakens the immune system, by the way. Especially when you're undergoing chemotherapy)? And the fact that people would "burn them at the stake" nowadays is a little unbelievable. You have a solid idea with The Phoenix thing and it's a big enough thought that you should be able to build your story around that without throwing in diseases that should have killed her.
Best of luck. :/
Leukemia? Really? REALLY? I'm trying VERY hard not to be mean, but that's stupid. Even if she didn't want to have chemo, any smart parent wouldn't have given her the choice. And there are other options. Pills are available nowadays. Radiation therapy. And if she doesn't have any sort of treatment at all, OF COURSE IT'S GOING TO SPREAD. That's what cancer does. It SPREADS and it KILLS you.
I mean... are you serious? ARE YOU SERIOUS. I don't mean to be so angry but as a cancer survivor, it infuriates me that you didn't even bother doing your research on diseases such as FRICKEN CANCER. I'm sorry. Just... do your research. They say write what you know-judging from your profile you're rather young and, fortunately, blessed enough to be a healthy girl. So write about healthy girls. Make them as Mary Sue-like as you want, but stay away from diseases if you're not going to do some sort of research and/or write about them properly. I can't think of any possible way to construct this review so that it doesn't sound like a flame, because I don't want to discourage you, so that's some constructive criticism.
The good is that your characters are likeable and you have woven a semi-believable thing with the whole... Phoenix thing. The tattoos are a little unbelievable (are they born with them? Do they form when they meet their animal friends? Or are their parents also so irresponsible as to take their kids to a tattoo parlor (especially when one of the kids has cancer-cancer weakens the immune system, by the way. Especially when you're undergoing chemotherapy)? And the fact that people would "burn them at the stake" nowadays is a little unbelievable. You have a solid idea with The Phoenix thing and it's a big enough thought that you should be able to build your story around that without throwing in diseases that should have killed her.
Best of luck. :/
1/29/2012 c7 Queen Puppy Lover
It has been so long since you have last updated this story. I keep coming back to see if it has and am so sad when I see that it is not. I absolutely LOVE this story and can't wait to see what you have in store. Please, please, PLEASE update soon!
It has been so long since you have last updated this story. I keep coming back to see if it has and am so sad when I see that it is not. I absolutely LOVE this story and can't wait to see what you have in store. Please, please, PLEASE update soon!
8/5/2011 c7 5ShannonMay
You did a great job on this chapter. I loved how you wrote this. I enjoyed seeing both points of view. I'm glad that she woke up too. I can't wait to read more. You are a good writer. Update soon please.
5ShannonMayYou did a great job on this chapter. I loved how you wrote this. I enjoyed seeing both points of view. I'm glad that she woke up too. I can't wait to read more. You are a good writer. Update soon please.
8/4/2011 c6 ShannonMay
I love the story so far. I can't wait to see how things turn out. I hope that she doesn't die. That would be so horribly sad. I'd like for them to get a happy ending.
I love the story so far. I can't wait to see how things turn out. I hope that she doesn't die. That would be so horribly sad. I'd like for them to get a happy ending.
8/3/2011 c3 ShannonMay
Perfect, that would indeed be the perfect revenge on Tyler. I can't wait to see how he handles talking to the others.
Perfect, that would indeed be the perfect revenge on Tyler. I can't wait to see how he handles talking to the others.
8/3/2011 c2 ShannonMay
I love the story so far. I like Tyler's character so far as well as the triplets.
I can't wait to read more.
I love the story so far. I like Tyler's character so far as well as the triplets.
I can't wait to read more.