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5/15/2014 c1 6Livthefantasy
Wow beautiful
The sweat musk descriptions are on point
9/10/2012 c1 Guest
I knew they were lesbians.
11/6/2011 c1 cash
im drawn in by the way you write. very good.
4/21/2011 c1 sakldfbdkln
Oh god. Beautiful. Please write more RiPa!
3/25/2011 c1 4silverice90
This was really good. I'm glad you decided to write another one :). Thank you very much for sharing :)
3/25/2011 c1 18Juular
Honestly I meant to review this story earlier, but, my computer turned on me.

Anyway, this is a very good sophomore story. I think your strongest point here would be the descriptions. Not only are they detailed, but they are also short and sweet, so not as to distract or bore the reader with something too lengthy. Descriptive language, as well, is also another highlight I have noticed here. The sex scene itself was handled professionally, and wrapped the story up well.

Rikku and Paine are both very well in character, and you definitely let their personalities shine through in the writing. I also love how you pointed out that, unlike what some people believe, Rikku - despite certain pretenses - is NOT an imbecile.

You are a very talented writer, if I do say so myself, and I certainly hope you continue to use your gift.
3/22/2011 c1 1SinnX
I LOVE THIS STORY!
3/22/2011 c1 vikaari
I really do love this story. The descriptions of both Pine and Rikku were good. ^^
3/22/2011 c1 IchigoTenchi
Love this story *-*

I loved how you described Paine und Rikku at the begining^^

And yeah the end.. yummy ;D

I hope you keep writing more abou them^^

IchigoTenchi

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