for A Voice in the Darkness3/30/2011 c1 AsktheMagic8Ball
"And I hate him regardless of his clothes or his face or his name."
Perfect. So many have been blinded by the Edward effect which makes atrocities acceptable in their minds.
Well done; be proud for writing and posting.
"And I hate him regardless of his clothes or his face or his name."
Perfect. So many have been blinded by the Edward effect which makes atrocities acceptable in their minds.
Well done; be proud for writing and posting.
3/30/2011 c1 blueeyes11354
I'm reviewing but I took your warning and only read your A/N and the bits I caught in scrolling. I must confess I read a story with a variation on this theme and feel slightly guilty about it now. Though in my defense, it wasn't particularly violent, with respect to E/B's relationship anyways. And it's not anything I'd seek out ordinarily or ever will again. As a woman especially I should have perhaps been less accepting of it but I rationalized it was only fiction. But this is fiction also, albeit quite a bit more realistic, and I couldn't read it. Thanks for opening my eyes.
I'm reviewing but I took your warning and only read your A/N and the bits I caught in scrolling. I must confess I read a story with a variation on this theme and feel slightly guilty about it now. Though in my defense, it wasn't particularly violent, with respect to E/B's relationship anyways. And it's not anything I'd seek out ordinarily or ever will again. As a woman especially I should have perhaps been less accepting of it but I rationalized it was only fiction. But this is fiction also, albeit quite a bit more realistic, and I couldn't read it. Thanks for opening my eyes.
3/30/2011 c1 
1FoiPur
I kind of wish I hadn't read this first thing in the morning, because I'm going to be thinking about it all day. This story is absolutely horrific.
But it's incredible, too. It's honest, well crafted, and very well told. Thank you for writing it.
1FoiPurI kind of wish I hadn't read this first thing in the morning, because I'm going to be thinking about it all day. This story is absolutely horrific.
But it's incredible, too. It's honest, well crafted, and very well told. Thank you for writing it.
3/30/2011 c1 Kitkatr
Thanks for the warning on your story...that said, it was very sad but well written! Edward certainly was no prince charming. It's hard to comprehend that this really exists!
Thanks for the warning on your story...that said, it was very sad but well written! Edward certainly was no prince charming. It's hard to comprehend that this really exists!
3/30/2011 c1 19BellaFlan
I can't believe you didn't tell me you were writing this! I kept thinking someone needs to write a slavery fic from the victim's pov to provide some perspective. I think even if an author clarifies they do not condone slavery (obviously), maybe, just maybe, taking a horrific situation and turning it into a romance IS romanticizing it - despite the author's intentions.
I had to skim your fic, bb. It depressed me, but it needed to be said.
love you lots!
19BellaFlanI can't believe you didn't tell me you were writing this! I kept thinking someone needs to write a slavery fic from the victim's pov to provide some perspective. I think even if an author clarifies they do not condone slavery (obviously), maybe, just maybe, taking a horrific situation and turning it into a romance IS romanticizing it - despite the author's intentions.
I had to skim your fic, bb. It depressed me, but it needed to be said.
love you lots!
3/30/2011 c1 Halawia
I know you said you were worried about posting this, but honestly... there was no reason to be. It was done fantastically. And not in a... omg I would love to read more kind of way, but in a way that was like a sucker punch to the gut. Done in a way that makes you open your eyes up to the horror that exists out there. And it does. Even bringing that world into fiction... it carries over in a way that can speak to just about anyone. And so many people should be more aware that this type of thing exists, and it's not romantic or beautiful and almost all the time, there is never an HEA. This fic really brought to light a lot of the reality of these situations. The way the girl feels.
I have to tell you, as someone who's been in an abusive relationship, someone who's had to go through these types of things first hand... I was really drawn to Bella. You really captured the way it feels to have everything taken away from you. To feel like nothing. I've experienced those feelings before. Thankfully I managed to come out of it okay, but... others don't and it's a heartbreaking thing. I know you said the end wasn't an HEA, but... I can't of felt it was. At least where Bella was concerned because she got to do something she hadn't in a long time. She got to make a choice. And that's more important than anything
Keep on writing, bb. I hope more people read this and see just how affecting these things are, and how harsh the reality of it actually is. I especially liked the facts at the end about slavery. That added a whole nother element to your fic. Great job. Now I'm going to go drown my little angst up heart in some fluff lol
xx 3
Hal
I know you said you were worried about posting this, but honestly... there was no reason to be. It was done fantastically. And not in a... omg I would love to read more kind of way, but in a way that was like a sucker punch to the gut. Done in a way that makes you open your eyes up to the horror that exists out there. And it does. Even bringing that world into fiction... it carries over in a way that can speak to just about anyone. And so many people should be more aware that this type of thing exists, and it's not romantic or beautiful and almost all the time, there is never an HEA. This fic really brought to light a lot of the reality of these situations. The way the girl feels.
I have to tell you, as someone who's been in an abusive relationship, someone who's had to go through these types of things first hand... I was really drawn to Bella. You really captured the way it feels to have everything taken away from you. To feel like nothing. I've experienced those feelings before. Thankfully I managed to come out of it okay, but... others don't and it's a heartbreaking thing. I know you said the end wasn't an HEA, but... I can't of felt it was. At least where Bella was concerned because she got to do something she hadn't in a long time. She got to make a choice. And that's more important than anything
Keep on writing, bb. I hope more people read this and see just how affecting these things are, and how harsh the reality of it actually is. I especially liked the facts at the end about slavery. That added a whole nother element to your fic. Great job. Now I'm going to go drown my little angst up heart in some fluff lol
xx 3
Hal
3/30/2011 c1 Guest
Thank you.
Thank you.
3/30/2011 c1 houkutus fiktio62680
I know that you mentioned that you were nervous about posting this, but I can't tell you how happy I am that you did.
THIS is the true face of slavery and human sex trafficking, NOT the romanticized notion presented in most fics. Sure, people often read fic to escape reality and have a little fun for a bit, but someone needed to come along and write something that presents the truth in the most brutal, honest way.
I don't have enough words to say how needed this piece was, and how poignant you were in its presentation.
Be proud, sweetheart. I know I am proud for you. :)
-midge
I know that you mentioned that you were nervous about posting this, but I can't tell you how happy I am that you did.
THIS is the true face of slavery and human sex trafficking, NOT the romanticized notion presented in most fics. Sure, people often read fic to escape reality and have a little fun for a bit, but someone needed to come along and write something that presents the truth in the most brutal, honest way.
I don't have enough words to say how needed this piece was, and how poignant you were in its presentation.
Be proud, sweetheart. I know I am proud for you. :)
-midge
3/30/2011 c1 3withany
I've been sitting here for about 15 minutes trying to think what to say, but there's so much, and I think you've said almost all in this, anyway. So, just one point that I learned when a colleague used to work on a helpline. The likes of this man will never consider they've done anything wrong. He'll always find a way to pin it on her - you've drawn attention to this. Once she's gone, he'll think he's the victim of her duplicity and expect sympathy.
Mad world.
3withanyI've been sitting here for about 15 minutes trying to think what to say, but there's so much, and I think you've said almost all in this, anyway. So, just one point that I learned when a colleague used to work on a helpline. The likes of this man will never consider they've done anything wrong. He'll always find a way to pin it on her - you've drawn attention to this. Once she's gone, he'll think he's the victim of her duplicity and expect sympathy.
Mad world.