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9/15/2014 c1 BakerStreetIsLastRefugeOfHope
Very well written.
10/14/2012 c1 3Call Brandybuck
This is a great start :-) I think you should keep going this sounds great so far!
4/1/2011 c1 Shosana
Love it!
3/31/2011 c1 summersidefolly
This is probably one of the best 'first' LOTR stories that I've read at this site. You had a few punctuation errors (mostly commas) and a few of the sentences need to be re-worded to flow better, but it was very, very good. Interesting even!

An example of re-wording: 'This feeling was heightened when Merry's question saw her storm over to them.' It might flow better to say: 'This feeling was heightened when Merry's question sent her storming over to them.'

Punctuation example: 'Have a good day did we?' It should probably be 'Have a good day, did we?' Same with 'Well she weas in a frightful mood wasn't she?' Again, it probably be: 'Well, she was in a frightful mood, wasn't she?'

You got Pippin's character down pretty well.

Overall, a great job! Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading more.

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