for The Paintball Test4/14/2011 c1 
5Zeroguymice
Remus and Sirius together? What? that just is wrrronngggggggggg. like wayy wrong! like its so wrong that its nott funny! i mean if sirius and remus were actually gay, then they would be a great coulple. but with them nott being gay...yeah.no. but it was a great one-shot! haha i can picture lily fakeing just to make sure james is a sweet as sweet can be:)
5ZeroguymiceRemus and Sirius together? What? that just is wrrronngggggggggg. like wayy wrong! like its so wrong that its nott funny! i mean if sirius and remus were actually gay, then they would be a great coulple. but with them nott being gay...yeah.no. but it was a great one-shot! haha i can picture lily fakeing just to make sure james is a sweet as sweet can be:)
4/13/2011 c1 19r.a.b. shoulda lived
allright good story, dialogue needs a little work, and don't use the boys in your intro, you suck at it XD lastly, the remus sirius thing, i can't even tell.
ps make a new paragraph when there is a new speaker, i know it seems stupid but, its correct. new chapter of my crossover should be up next week if i can get out of writers' block.
19r.a.b. shoulda livedallright good story, dialogue needs a little work, and don't use the boys in your intro, you suck at it XD lastly, the remus sirius thing, i can't even tell.
ps make a new paragraph when there is a new speaker, i know it seems stupid but, its correct. new chapter of my crossover should be up next week if i can get out of writers' block.