for Do You Feel Better Now?9/15/2011 c1 
9LindsaylovesPacey
I liked it! The Finchel friendship is sweet...add in yummy Puck? Dream team : )
9LindsaylovesPaceyI liked it! The Finchel friendship is sweet...add in yummy Puck? Dream team : )
9/5/2011 c1 3BabyD-MontanaGirl
I like it so far...just wondering if you are going to be posting more or if it's complete as is? I really like how both boys are on her side and ready to protect her, LOVE how they gave Jesse what he deserved, and am now wondering what will come next?
3BabyD-MontanaGirlI like it so far...just wondering if you are going to be posting more or if it's complete as is? I really like how both boys are on her side and ready to protect her, LOVE how they gave Jesse what he deserved, and am now wondering what will come next?
7/20/2011 c1 8onceawarbleralwaysawarbler
GAH.
I love protective!Puck & Finn.
This story was amazing. I like the way you wrote Jesse as a jackass. Very good. (:
8onceawarbleralwaysawarblerGAH.
I love protective!Puck & Finn.
This story was amazing. I like the way you wrote Jesse as a jackass. Very good. (:
5/7/2011 c1 RosieeGleek
ahhhh! i love it!
i love the dynamic of Pucklberry Finn and this story explores it so well! i think that if you wanted to, you should continue this, because it could be really good!
awesome, so much potential! :D
ahhhh! i love it!
i love the dynamic of Pucklberry Finn and this story explores it so well! i think that if you wanted to, you should continue this, because it could be really good!
awesome, so much potential! :D
4/25/2011 c1 35bridgetlynn
This is really well written on a technical level. The writing and plot is very good as well as in character. I can see Jesse being very possessive and jealous - which often does turn into abusive. Rachel as she said to Puck in Mash-up "always wants everything too much" and she's been written on the show as almost needing to be in a relationship so I can see her taking Jesse back and staying with him as long as things were good. I can also see her developing a very strong friendship with Puck (and maybe in a perfect world Finn, if the show writers would decide what kind of personality they want him to have rather then have him be nice one week and a total dbag the next).
Now, my criticism (as it were) is more about the type of research you may have done for this. I only point it out because it will hopefully help you in future stories. I live in New York, specifically on Long Island (about 20 minutes from Hofstra's campus) - so when you say they're living together (with Jesse at Hofstra and Rachel at Julliard) you should pick a place (and then specify where) like Queens (Jamaica or Kew Gardens - driving for Jesse would make sense and Rachel could jump a train right into Manhattan easily) because the commute wouldn't make sense for them otherwise. It's an hour and a half drive each way on a good light traffic day from Uniondale to Manhattan. Also, unless someone has a LOT of money, no one in Manhattan has cars because parking is either a nightmare or 30+ dollars a day. It's things like what I just pointed out that can really make or break a plot because it takes away from any realism (these are also all things that can be found by checking out school websites and google maps).
35bridgetlynnThis is really well written on a technical level. The writing and plot is very good as well as in character. I can see Jesse being very possessive and jealous - which often does turn into abusive. Rachel as she said to Puck in Mash-up "always wants everything too much" and she's been written on the show as almost needing to be in a relationship so I can see her taking Jesse back and staying with him as long as things were good. I can also see her developing a very strong friendship with Puck (and maybe in a perfect world Finn, if the show writers would decide what kind of personality they want him to have rather then have him be nice one week and a total dbag the next).
Now, my criticism (as it were) is more about the type of research you may have done for this. I only point it out because it will hopefully help you in future stories. I live in New York, specifically on Long Island (about 20 minutes from Hofstra's campus) - so when you say they're living together (with Jesse at Hofstra and Rachel at Julliard) you should pick a place (and then specify where) like Queens (Jamaica or Kew Gardens - driving for Jesse would make sense and Rachel could jump a train right into Manhattan easily) because the commute wouldn't make sense for them otherwise. It's an hour and a half drive each way on a good light traffic day from Uniondale to Manhattan. Also, unless someone has a LOT of money, no one in Manhattan has cars because parking is either a nightmare or 30+ dollars a day. It's things like what I just pointed out that can really make or break a plot because it takes away from any realism (these are also all things that can be found by checking out school websites and google maps).