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6/30/2011 c14 5dellaslovinlife
Ok, time to find out who this creep is and why he's doing this. And great scene between Penelope and Derek. Can't wait for more :)
6/30/2011 c14 72PinkAngel17
Yay, they know who it is! Another really good chapter! Can't wait to find out who the unsub is!
6/30/2011 c14 Kimd33
Beautiful reunion. I still think it is Michelle's assistant.
6/23/2011 c13 10X-MJ-X
Firstly - who the Hell is this guy? I just want to know now - it's obviously someone we're going to recognise... I'm thinking Seaver's Dad? Hmm that's an interesting thought, you did say Seaver would play a bigger role in the mystery... But why would he go after Penelope... Ok, Ok I'm probably wrong again...

and

secondly... YOU'VE ACTUALLY KILLED ME!

or hurt me at the very least and that hurts my heart... Jeez wbhat did I ever do to you? and just where was my knight in shining armour? Oh yeah thinking about Penelope... I can't believe you've done this to me!

Admittedly it makes a nice 'twist' as you keep insisting are necessary in this but still - why me? Goodness, now I'm afraid of you and feel I should beg for my life... (the fictitious one that is) PLEASE DON'T KILL ME... PRETTY PLEASE!

I can't get over this latest twist of the knife enough to think about anything else going on in the chapter... but I shall try...

Hotch is jsut hearrt breaking and I love the way you write him - it's so gtrue to character and really shows how much the team needs him. Admist all of this crazinesss and the terrifying nature of Seaver's death he is a constant, holding it all together, well at least on the surface anyway.

As usual I love the way that you split down into the individual thought patterns and processes of each team member - it's like watching an episode of CM... I'd love to turn this into a screenplay and borrow the actors just for a while whilst we had a go at screening "CM according to Rach" - you'd definitely have people hooked by this...

I also really like the way that Hotch picks up on the unspoken things - Spencer's feelings for Ashley and also the romantic undertones of her interaction with Dave...

Then Derek - how he realises everything has suddenly become so much more than jsut about finding this guy for the sake of bringing Penelope home, but also about ridding the world and more specifically his family of this mad man... his passion for Penelope and pursuing the man who is trying to harm her never ceases to bring tears to my eyes with every chapter... I seriously cannot wait for them to catch him... I feel it is going to be somethng of an epic moment...

and then...

after potentially killing me you make everything Ok again at the end by bringing our girl home... I know this means she is preparing to go off on her own after this guy, but you know for now i'm just happy she's home and the team can keep an eye on her...

Oh that reunion.. just perfect... terrifying at first (I thought our Hot Chocolate was in danger) and then perfect. I adored how even though she was disguised he knew by instinct that it was her and how he doesn't have to think, he just goes into protective mode and then how he doesn't give her time to voice her heartbreaks and horrors concerning Seaver's death but simply kisses her so passionately that I could really feel the emotions just jumping off the page... It was gorgeous honey and I thank you for making life just a little bit brighter admist the darkness of the last couple of chapters.

As usual my love, I adored everything about this more than my words can ever tell you and I absolutely cannot wait to see where you're going with this next. You can trust that however angry or passionate my reviews may sound, I'll always be here ready to read your amazingness because I cannot get enough and that is simply the way it is.

Just be merciful with my fictitious life if you could :)

;)

Eagerly awiting the next chapter as always honey.

Much love,

Michelle xx
6/22/2011 c13 3K-Essence
As always love this chapter. Can't wait to find out who the UNSUB is. I have my ideas but still not sure. I am glad penelope is home where she belongs. Can't wait for the next chapter Darling. Please make it a long one!
6/22/2011 c13 1ShineInTheStorm
Wow, first may I just say I LOVE THIS STORY. Like A LOT. It's probably the best Derek/Penelope story I've ever read! The plot's really engaging and your writing is FANTASTIC :D

And may I also say I APPLAUD you for killing off Seaver first chance you got. Honestly, I just REALLY don't like her... Idk why, she just bothers me lol

UPDATE SOON!
6/22/2011 c13 jovianfrog
Love love this chapter! Can't wait to find out who it is, I could not believe when Michelle got attacked. I definitely reacted out loud. Please tell me the UNSUB didn't see Pen and Derek...
6/22/2011 c1 1lolyncut
Never, in a million years, did I think you were going to do that. Wow, as a writer you have guts.
6/22/2011 c13 66LoveforPenandDerek
the end of this chapter was touching and beautiful
6/22/2011 c13 5dellaslovinlife
Another brilliant chapter! Really looking forward to more :)
6/22/2011 c13 72PinkAngel17
Yay, Penelope's back! That part with Michelle was tense. Another great chapter and can't wait to see who this guy is!
6/22/2011 c13 krisphoenix
Did michelle recognize the killer? Omg. Update soon!
6/22/2011 c13 28sangreal7
You did an excellent job of showing each of the team members' reactions and feelings from Hotch's point of view.

One of the things I like most about your writing is the way in which you move the action between different persons/scenarios in the same chapter. It keeps things very fresh and exciting, and reminds me a lot of CM episodes.

I've got this little tingle that tells me I think I know who Pen's stalker is, so I'm looking forward to seeing whether I'm right.

It made perfect sense for Pen to go to Derek first, and their reunion was much as I would have expected it to be.

Excellent chapter.
6/22/2011 c13 kmn1829
Oh my God! YESSSSSS! She's back! Thank you so much! I just hope she does not do ANYTHING stupid. She should just stay with Derek and that's it. I know she's gonna feel guilty about Seaver's death,but she needs to be smart about what she does now. Please update soon.
6/22/2011 c13 Kimd33
He got Michelle too. Is it her assistance.
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