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5/28/2011 c4 3kamikage86
Damn this story is getting good, please update soon, the suspense kills me.
5/27/2011 c1 9Mappadouji
You know there was something I forgot to ask about chapter 3: Since Heero was the one provided the comfort or at the very least the shoulder to cry on and, happens to be the piloting the new Gundam that's taking coordinators out left and right. Will Flay try to use him the same way that she used Kira in Seed? if so then I think you should have Heero help her try to see beyond her need for revenge. Also, another example of the Zero System taking control and forcing the pilot to do what it wants is when Heero first piloted Epyon. Epyon had manage to force him into fighting both the enemy and allies resulting in Heero eliminating everyone.
5/22/2011 c3 Mappadouji
Awesome chapter! I like the way that you had Heero handle Flay because, it shows that gentle side that Heero usually keeps behind his emotionless mask. The fact that the Wing Zero is being shown off to be a powerful machine, it can only mean that you are going to have ZAFT step up its game if they want to defeat the Archangel. Also, I remember that there is a review about how the only the Zero system 2.0 and 2.5 can do certain things, like activate Zero. While that maybe true to some extent in Gundam Wing it has been shown that the Gundam's are actually semi conscious, one example being when Quatre was planning to self destruct with the Sandrock to allow the others to make to outer space and, Sandrock activate it self and had Quatre leave the cockpit and moved to self destruct on its own. Another instance would be when Heero first Piloted Wing Zero, If I remember correctly the OZ soldiers that had capture the pilots where trying to use Heero's combat data on the suit and had only power up the cockpit while keeping the rest of the suit inactive. However, as Heero was piloting it; Zero activated itself and started manipulating him to attack the people in the base.
5/21/2011 c3 28SkywalkerT-65
Great story. I suppose it is to be expected that the Wing Zero is so much more powerful than the Strike (it would be, timeline wise more along with the Freedom after all) but please don't make this like most other WingxSEED stories I've seen where the Wing owns anything and everything in the CE. Other than that, I am looking forward to the next update.
5/21/2011 c3 Cloves
Haa! Interesting so Hero will be paired up with Murrue.. I think they look good with one another :3 but i think Heero's attitude here is kinda.. hmm to soft? but it's still good keep it up man.
5/19/2011 c3 3kamikage86
I'm really liking this story, please keep up the pace and update soon, please.
5/18/2011 c3 no name
i was wondering how wing zero move on it own since it just version 1.0. only version 2.5that the zero system can move the suit on it own when it deem fit.

if you do not know zero version 1.0 can only cause pilot to see everyone as the enemy. version 2.0 actually forced them to follow the paths that it has chosen and version 2.5 can taking control of the mobile suit sometimes when activated.

http:/www.mahq.net/mecha/gundam/tielsimpulse/xxxg-00w0l.htm - zero version 2.0

http:/www.mahq.net/mecha/gundam/tielsimpulse/xxxg-00w0s.htm - zero version2.5

also which wing zero that you use did?

is it regular zero or custom zero.

other than these flaws in your story everything else is interesting. good luck with the story.

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5/17/2011 c3 Dornkorn
this is pretty good and differant from ive seen so far from fallen angel not that im tring to match them at all but instead can wait to see where and how you take this
5/16/2011 c2 betafish123
Great start to the story.
5/15/2011 c2 Katie
I am really enjoying this story so far, and am looking forward to seeing where it goes. I do have one suggestion for you though. Right now when you are writing conversation you are doing this: "person one talking" "person two talking". The proper format for dialogue is:

"person one talking"

"Person two talking"

Anyway, I am looking forward to more! ^_^
5/14/2011 c2 Katosuki
amusing ...
5/14/2011 c2 3YoshinoYuy-DeadAccount
Another fantastic Chapter. The hacking and information were thoroughly explained, something that most GSxGW fanfics have neglected. The explanation for Heero's action in regards to joining the Archangel, perfect. You've also done something that I haven't seen people done. You used gundanium as the reason behind Wing Zero being operational ( I can't say I'm certain that you are original for doing this, as I'm selective about the fanfictions I read, so others may have had a similar idea.)

There is really on one issue I have it is when you present back and forth conversations. I enjoy that you have in paragraph form but I got a little agitated seeing quotes next to quotes in some paragraphs in this chapter. An example being:

"Then how did you come by that suit?" "I took it," he said, "simple as that." "From whom?"

It was easy to figure out who was talking but I'm use to having it separated. This is merely a suggestion to separate it with actions or push the return button during conversations.

Other than that I've no problems with the story and how its going. You've obviously put a lot of thought and time into this.

Great work.

Keep writing, reading, reviewing, or doing whatever it is you want ~YoshinoYuy
5/14/2011 c1 YoshinoYuy-DeadAccount
This was REALLY well written. I got hooked on this after the firs paragraph. I an see you put a lot, (and I mean that with great emphasis) of thought into the chapter/story before posting. I can't wait to see what Chapter 2's like.

Keep writing, reading, reviewing, or doing what you want; ~Yoshinoyuy
5/13/2011 c2 9Mappadouji
Awesome story thus far! The only thing that I have to nitpick is you're comparison of A.C. Gundams to C.E. Gundams. The reason for it is that the A.C. Gundams such as Wing Zero are actually about a head shorter then the C.E. Gundams and mobile suits. That has me believe that the people of the Cosmic Century would underestimate Wing Zero until they see it in action.
5/13/2011 c2 Naruko Uzumaki Darkness
awesome story...update soon please
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