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4Beloved Princess
The football coverage is really interesting. It sounds a lot more complicated than soccer too but I like the insight we get on it. I also really liked the talk between Coach Yuushi and Ishimaru especially and to see what he's feeling regarding his eye.
Ace and Ishimaru's brewing rivalry, if that's the correct term, is really entertaining. Ace did and said every bad thing to mess with Ishimaru (in the nicest first impression) so I'll be anticipating their next encounter especially with all the tension standing between them already as well as the information Angie has on Solin.
Great job! I'll be looking forward to your next chapter!
4Beloved PrincessThe football coverage is really interesting. It sounds a lot more complicated than soccer too but I like the insight we get on it. I also really liked the talk between Coach Yuushi and Ishimaru especially and to see what he's feeling regarding his eye.
Ace and Ishimaru's brewing rivalry, if that's the correct term, is really entertaining. Ace did and said every bad thing to mess with Ishimaru (in the nicest first impression) so I'll be anticipating their next encounter especially with all the tension standing between them already as well as the information Angie has on Solin.
Great job! I'll be looking forward to your next chapter!
8/18/2013 c115 4DeathySophia
It was 2 am after MotoGP ended when I found this X)
Anyway, I completely have no idea about how football is played, but overall, I did enjoy the content of the chapter and Ishimaru's new conflict with Hiroto (I like his parting speech btw XD). Although, the last part feels a bit rushed. I think that's all I can say for now. I'll look forward to your next updates!
4DeathySophiaIt was 2 am after MotoGP ended when I found this X)
Anyway, I completely have no idea about how football is played, but overall, I did enjoy the content of the chapter and Ishimaru's new conflict with Hiroto (I like his parting speech btw XD). Although, the last part feels a bit rushed. I think that's all I can say for now. I'll look forward to your next updates!
8/16/2013 c114 2Windraider
Hmm...for some reasons the fights of Hori just don't have the impact that Slash or Jyan does.
I think it's a bad idea to hype your villians like that. Giving them a name and making them sound important only to defeat them in one chapter seems like a way to...well it feels like a trolling chapter.
2WindraiderHmm...for some reasons the fights of Hori just don't have the impact that Slash or Jyan does.
I think it's a bad idea to hype your villians like that. Giving them a name and making them sound important only to defeat them in one chapter seems like a way to...well it feels like a trolling chapter.
8/15/2013 c114 4DeathySophia
I really liked the fight scenes. It was wonderful, though I feel the transition at the scene where Hori answered Roku's question and the next dialogue a bit awkward. And I am glad that you showed Meida a bit of concern feeling towards Hori there; all this time I get the impression that she's a really cold person it seems like she's a puppet. Sorry about that, I'm a bit sensitive when it comes to describing feelings X) The plot itself is getting more interesting I will make sure not to miss your future chapters! Oh and I liked the foreshadowing you did in there ;D Anyway, good luck for your future chaps!
PS. I apologize for not reviewing lately. This one time of the year always gets me very busy. I mainly get free time to read at around midnight and up and get too tired then to write anything (sorry XD). But I did save the page for later reading when I get the chance.
4DeathySophiaI really liked the fight scenes. It was wonderful, though I feel the transition at the scene where Hori answered Roku's question and the next dialogue a bit awkward. And I am glad that you showed Meida a bit of concern feeling towards Hori there; all this time I get the impression that she's a really cold person it seems like she's a puppet. Sorry about that, I'm a bit sensitive when it comes to describing feelings X) The plot itself is getting more interesting I will make sure not to miss your future chapters! Oh and I liked the foreshadowing you did in there ;D Anyway, good luck for your future chaps!
PS. I apologize for not reviewing lately. This one time of the year always gets me very busy. I mainly get free time to read at around midnight and up and get too tired then to write anything (sorry XD). But I did save the page for later reading when I get the chance.
8/15/2013 c114 3stevethemime
Wonderfully written battle scene. So concise it makes me want to reread it. I must mention, however, that the scene were Hori explained his battle strategy seemed like a really cheap way for you to explain something that you could have done more effectively by having Hori come up with it in battle via inner dialogue. Plus, he doesn't seem to be the type to share secrets easily. However, that was one measly line in a fantastic chapter, and nothing can take away from that. I'm interested to see how you progress with this.
Mime out.
3stevethemimeWonderfully written battle scene. So concise it makes me want to reread it. I must mention, however, that the scene were Hori explained his battle strategy seemed like a really cheap way for you to explain something that you could have done more effectively by having Hori come up with it in battle via inner dialogue. Plus, he doesn't seem to be the type to share secrets easily. However, that was one measly line in a fantastic chapter, and nothing can take away from that. I'm interested to see how you progress with this.
Mime out.
8/14/2013 c114 4Beloved Princess
Elemento was a pretty cool Nightmare and he received a deserved, gruesome defeat, I didn't expect him to be a hassle to Hori especially with all of that extra training he's been doing. But now he needs to look out because the Black Corps will be on him soon enough. Hori building relationships is an interesting concept and if he and Slash ever get the chance to battle in the future because there's already some tension rising between them, either way, I'll be anticipating their next encounter.
Again, great work! I'll be looking forward to your next chapter!
4Beloved PrincessElemento was a pretty cool Nightmare and he received a deserved, gruesome defeat, I didn't expect him to be a hassle to Hori especially with all of that extra training he's been doing. But now he needs to look out because the Black Corps will be on him soon enough. Hori building relationships is an interesting concept and if he and Slash ever get the chance to battle in the future because there's already some tension rising between them, either way, I'll be anticipating their next encounter.
Again, great work! I'll be looking forward to your next chapter!
8/11/2013 c113 Beloved Princess
Hori and Meida have gotten new information on the ice that completely destroyed her father's yacht and there was still no body underwater. Whether he's alive or not is really starting to pique my curiosity.
Holy plot-twist. The chapters where a? bookkeeper is in danger or hurt always have me on the edge of my seat especially with someone like little Kiichiro and the Black Corps being involved. I wonder how Hori will fare against one of the Nightmares and how they will get around to rescuing Kiichiro.
Short chapters, we all have them but this one was great so I'm not complaining. Great work! I'll be looking forwarding to your next chapter!
Hori and Meida have gotten new information on the ice that completely destroyed her father's yacht and there was still no body underwater. Whether he's alive or not is really starting to pique my curiosity.
Holy plot-twist. The chapters where a? bookkeeper is in danger or hurt always have me on the edge of my seat especially with someone like little Kiichiro and the Black Corps being involved. I wonder how Hori will fare against one of the Nightmares and how they will get around to rescuing Kiichiro.
Short chapters, we all have them but this one was great so I'm not complaining. Great work! I'll be looking forwarding to your next chapter!
8/9/2013 c112 2Windraider
I should apologize for not reviewing for so long.
The truth of the matter is that I've been so frustrated about my work and the idea of a new story that I haven't really paid attention to anything else.
I'll try reviewing on monday since Saturday and Sunday are going to be so busy it's not funny.
2WindraiderI should apologize for not reviewing for so long.
The truth of the matter is that I've been so frustrated about my work and the idea of a new story that I haven't really paid attention to anything else.
I'll try reviewing on monday since Saturday and Sunday are going to be so busy it's not funny.
8/7/2013 c112 3stevethemime
I feel like this chapter could have been entirely left out...but I'm glad it wasn't! There was such an unexpected thrill to it, such a nice pace, though I still recommend paying attention to moments where a person might pause for a moment if the situation were to happen in real life; take those moments to expound upon the subtleties of their reactions. The added time we spend reading that will simulate a pause in 'real life', and make the flow more consistent. Otherwise, your pacing is on point man. ON POINT I SAY!
Oh, and one little nitpick.
"Whatever. A guy can't even than you without getting a snappy comment." Ishimaru said, rolling his eyes and walking away.
No; he rolled his eye. But that is totally unimportant. :D
Mime out.
3stevethemimeI feel like this chapter could have been entirely left out...but I'm glad it wasn't! There was such an unexpected thrill to it, such a nice pace, though I still recommend paying attention to moments where a person might pause for a moment if the situation were to happen in real life; take those moments to expound upon the subtleties of their reactions. The added time we spend reading that will simulate a pause in 'real life', and make the flow more consistent. Otherwise, your pacing is on point man. ON POINT I SAY!
Oh, and one little nitpick.
"Whatever. A guy can't even than you without getting a snappy comment." Ishimaru said, rolling his eyes and walking away.
No; he rolled his eye. But that is totally unimportant. :D
Mime out.
8/7/2013 c112 4Beloved Princess
Everything's being accomplished for everyone so far. Eve passed her reentry exam with a perfect score at that and Ishimaru's appeal has been approved and I love how his trial was made into the biggest social scandal ever. Yasu was so annoying but he made for an entertaining, cynical character, I was surprised that he found a way around everyone's defense except for Eve's but I liked her speech and the aftermath of it, including the rumors which all made me smile. I wonder if that revelation in her thoughts will actually affect what she has with Ishimaru. I'll be anticipating everyone's return to school and what Meida could or could not possibly find in the yacht wreckage.
Great work! I'll be looking forward to your next chapter!
4Beloved PrincessEverything's being accomplished for everyone so far. Eve passed her reentry exam with a perfect score at that and Ishimaru's appeal has been approved and I love how his trial was made into the biggest social scandal ever. Yasu was so annoying but he made for an entertaining, cynical character, I was surprised that he found a way around everyone's defense except for Eve's but I liked her speech and the aftermath of it, including the rumors which all made me smile. I wonder if that revelation in her thoughts will actually affect what she has with Ishimaru. I'll be anticipating everyone's return to school and what Meida could or could not possibly find in the yacht wreckage.
Great work! I'll be looking forward to your next chapter!
8/6/2013 c111 3stevethemime
I liked the dynamic that Hori and Marty have (and the others in the team, but those two in particular). It's like Hori is immune to bullshitters, so Marty is gonna have to step up his game. That will be interesting to see. Otherwise, interesting development of Meida...I am starting to have a good deal more respect for her. The Ishimaru development seems to be something gradual throughout the series, so it wasn't a surprising addition to this chapter, but the doors you've opened up for yourself with this new revelation (and no, not the 'power' kind) about his friend Seiku should be...interesting at the very least.
Good luck, and have fun!
Mime out.
3stevethemimeI liked the dynamic that Hori and Marty have (and the others in the team, but those two in particular). It's like Hori is immune to bullshitters, so Marty is gonna have to step up his game. That will be interesting to see. Otherwise, interesting development of Meida...I am starting to have a good deal more respect for her. The Ishimaru development seems to be something gradual throughout the series, so it wasn't a surprising addition to this chapter, but the doors you've opened up for yourself with this new revelation (and no, not the 'power' kind) about his friend Seiku should be...interesting at the very least.
Good luck, and have fun!
Mime out.
8/4/2013 c111 4Beloved Princess
Marty and Sly are really cunning, it seems that they play both sides. I was glad that Hori and Meida weren't swayed by their offer. Marty and Sly really left zero evidence behind but I'm anticipating what will happen if they ever meet in person.
I wasn't expecting for Seiku to confront Ishimaru about everything but how he and Daisuke also having mamodo was drawn in good and how Ishimaru will deal with all of those happenings especially with Ryu now in the equation is holding my interest. I loved the last scene too and just the whole chapter.
Great work! I'll be looking forward to your next chapter!
4Beloved PrincessMarty and Sly are really cunning, it seems that they play both sides. I was glad that Hori and Meida weren't swayed by their offer. Marty and Sly really left zero evidence behind but I'm anticipating what will happen if they ever meet in person.
I wasn't expecting for Seiku to confront Ishimaru about everything but how he and Daisuke also having mamodo was drawn in good and how Ishimaru will deal with all of those happenings especially with Ryu now in the equation is holding my interest. I loved the last scene too and just the whole chapter.
Great work! I'll be looking forward to your next chapter!
8/4/2013 c111 4DeathySophia
In actuality, I have NEVER really thought or even imagine about Meida doing those stuff, even more so with her being the CEO, however, this will be interesting to watch XD. Anyway, dang, Marty and Sly survived after all! I couldn't help think "Wow these guys are unbelievable!" when they openly confronted Meida and Hori and talked about the Black Corps, but turned out it was just a hologram... I should be anticipating the time they would finally confront each other. And finally, Seiku! That's such a twist! I've been wondering when you will get him into the fray, and now that you do, his situation is really interesting, even much more when Ryu is involved to that! I wonder what Ishimaru will do next. Great chapter!
4DeathySophiaIn actuality, I have NEVER really thought or even imagine about Meida doing those stuff, even more so with her being the CEO, however, this will be interesting to watch XD. Anyway, dang, Marty and Sly survived after all! I couldn't help think "Wow these guys are unbelievable!" when they openly confronted Meida and Hori and talked about the Black Corps, but turned out it was just a hologram... I should be anticipating the time they would finally confront each other. And finally, Seiku! That's such a twist! I've been wondering when you will get him into the fray, and now that you do, his situation is really interesting, even much more when Ryu is involved to that! I wonder what Ishimaru will do next. Great chapter!
8/1/2013 c110 3stevethemime
Ah, thickening like a fine custard. Well done. Well done indeed...
Mime out.
3stevethemimeAh, thickening like a fine custard. Well done. Well done indeed...
Mime out.
7/31/2013 c110 4Beloved Princess
Terrifying dream for Ishimaru to have (and then to wake up to Eve's snappiness) but it'll be cool to read him play football instead of soccer. The chapters with sports coverage are always interesting.
Meida's officially the CEO! That's pretty awesome but what wasn't so much was Toru, it's terrible what he had done to her father and he still wanted his fortune all along. Her father must've known something wasn't right. Meida will have to watch her back with what could happen next with Toru's boss's obligations. She'll be in for a rough time so it'll have my curiosity to see how she handles that and her new title.
Great job! I'll be looking forward to your next chapter!
4Beloved PrincessTerrifying dream for Ishimaru to have (and then to wake up to Eve's snappiness) but it'll be cool to read him play football instead of soccer. The chapters with sports coverage are always interesting.
Meida's officially the CEO! That's pretty awesome but what wasn't so much was Toru, it's terrible what he had done to her father and he still wanted his fortune all along. Her father must've known something wasn't right. Meida will have to watch her back with what could happen next with Toru's boss's obligations. She'll be in for a rough time so it'll have my curiosity to see how she handles that and her new title.
Great job! I'll be looking forward to your next chapter!