for Bonds with the West: Ninja & Wizards9/23/2024 c23 Guest
nice
nice
12/28/2023 c23 
4LilinAnade
Actually, I found this story because I went to your profile because reading a story named Changing What is to Come. I'm still waiting the completion of the story!
The one thing I admire the most from this story is maybe not really the story itself, but your writing progress. The first two chapters is not really a novel in my opinion, more like a dialogue from drama? But then, from the third chapter onward, you make such a rapid progress in writing it's really amazing. At the 10th chapter, I'm hooked.
The story itself is cool. The concept is there, but I think it can be better, give it more feeling you know?
Anyway thanks for sharing this story! Good luck for you rewrite!
4LilinAnadeActually, I found this story because I went to your profile because reading a story named Changing What is to Come. I'm still waiting the completion of the story!
The one thing I admire the most from this story is maybe not really the story itself, but your writing progress. The first two chapters is not really a novel in my opinion, more like a dialogue from drama? But then, from the third chapter onward, you make such a rapid progress in writing it's really amazing. At the 10th chapter, I'm hooked.
The story itself is cool. The concept is there, but I think it can be better, give it more feeling you know?
Anyway thanks for sharing this story! Good luck for you rewrite!
2/28/2023 c23 7Hokage Isamu
Liked the story and the plot, really intriguing and evolving
Could you do a one-shot sequel for this story?
Great writing, keep it up!
7Hokage IsamuLiked the story and the plot, really intriguing and evolving
Could you do a one-shot sequel for this story?
Great writing, keep it up!
12/18/2022 c5 Guest
that makes no sense. why would he make that wand if he was never going to sell it?
that makes no sense. why would he make that wand if he was never going to sell it?
4/23/2022 c23 Guest
That was an overall great story! I libe it so much, and thanks to kakashi i didnt have to mourn cedrics death :D
Really greta story 10/10 and i give it a 5 stars
That was an overall great story! I libe it so much, and thanks to kakashi i didnt have to mourn cedrics death :D
Really greta story 10/10 and i give it a 5 stars
5/6/2021 c2 just-a-nerd
Nice chapter! But it's "Nohora Rin" not Yakashi Rin. (idk if you did that on purpose or not)
Nice chapter! But it's "Nohora Rin" not Yakashi Rin. (idk if you did that on purpose or not)
4/17/2021 c8 maryam
I Love it!
I Love it!
12/29/2020 c23 Minoru
OMG this is the first time I review here and well you’ll probably never see it but I don’t care! I just love this story! It has feelings, the plot‘s perfect and how Kakashi managed to make friend is just adorable and then the end just legendary! I just saw it in front of me how Obito would scream “I NEED RAMEN” and then run out! Epic story! (I have English as my secondary language too and I couldn’t write half as good as you. So high praise!) Anyway Arigatou!
OMG this is the first time I review here and well you’ll probably never see it but I don’t care! I just love this story! It has feelings, the plot‘s perfect and how Kakashi managed to make friend is just adorable and then the end just legendary! I just saw it in front of me how Obito would scream “I NEED RAMEN” and then run out! Epic story! (I have English as my secondary language too and I couldn’t write half as good as you. So high praise!) Anyway Arigatou!
1/13/2019 c20 Guest
I know this is an old story but I want say that apart from the odd spelling mistake, your English is spot on! Really well done :) The only other thing is that since Harry Potter is set in the UK, it's somewhat important to know we don't say "mom" or "candy". That's American English. In British English we say "mum" ( or "mam" if you're from the North East of England like I am) and "sweets".
I know this is an old story but I want say that apart from the odd spelling mistake, your English is spot on! Really well done :) The only other thing is that since Harry Potter is set in the UK, it's somewhat important to know we don't say "mom" or "candy". That's American English. In British English we say "mum" ( or "mam" if you're from the North East of England like I am) and "sweets".
7/9/2018 c2 2TheWantedPoet
I'm sorry but I just had to stop reading this story in chapter 2 for one reason. You had Kakashi take is mask off. I find this quite out of character because Kakashi would never take his mask off, even for the mission (even when he was a kid).
2TheWantedPoetI'm sorry but I just had to stop reading this story in chapter 2 for one reason. You had Kakashi take is mask off. I find this quite out of character because Kakashi would never take his mask off, even for the mission (even when he was a kid).
11/30/2016 c23 koukuma
ASDFGHJKL- TT i really hope you'll write a sequel for this- or maybe just a simple bonus chapter where the golden trio or the whole hogwarts finds out about the ninjas
ASDFGHJKL- TT i really hope you'll write a sequel for this- or maybe just a simple bonus chapter where the golden trio or the whole hogwarts finds out about the ninjas
6/16/2016 c10 RainbowMaze
Amazing story so far! I really like the idea and can't wait to find out what happenes next! But I noticed a few things in this chapter about Obito's family that you got wrong, or at least I think from what I've read online. I think it's mentioned that Obito's parents died early on in life, and he didn't have any siblings or else they would have taken care of him and we would have seen them. Thena again, you might now be following the canon version exactly considering that the war ended on a peaceful note, Rin and Obito are alive, and you plan for the Kyubbi attack to never happen.
Amazing story so far! I really like the idea and can't wait to find out what happenes next! But I noticed a few things in this chapter about Obito's family that you got wrong, or at least I think from what I've read online. I think it's mentioned that Obito's parents died early on in life, and he didn't have any siblings or else they would have taken care of him and we would have seen them. Thena again, you might now be following the canon version exactly considering that the war ended on a peaceful note, Rin and Obito are alive, and you plan for the Kyubbi attack to never happen.
4/6/2016 c23 18Hiniwalay
Woah. I have to say, at the beginning of the story I was kinda bored, because it everything seems to be moving so easily and quite cliche-ly (if that's even a word XD). But you handled the Third Task and the ending really well, and I'm impressed. That was a great read, thanks. :)
I'm wondering though, how on earth did Moody smuggle a Chimera and Manticore into the Maze and Kakashi's path? That's pretty unexplainable. And you also made it so the audience couldn't see what was going on inside the maze? Because originally I think they are able to see (because what's the fun in watching a competition where you haven't even got an idea what's happening?). Anyways, what you did fit really well.
I wanted to see an all-out Kakashi fight at the end. Chidori, anyone? D: But you had the media get the information so it couldn't happen or else he'd be 'exposed' as a ninja or something. :( :( :(
Byeeee!
18HiniwalayWoah. I have to say, at the beginning of the story I was kinda bored, because it everything seems to be moving so easily and quite cliche-ly (if that's even a word XD). But you handled the Third Task and the ending really well, and I'm impressed. That was a great read, thanks. :)
I'm wondering though, how on earth did Moody smuggle a Chimera and Manticore into the Maze and Kakashi's path? That's pretty unexplainable. And you also made it so the audience couldn't see what was going on inside the maze? Because originally I think they are able to see (because what's the fun in watching a competition where you haven't even got an idea what's happening?). Anyways, what you did fit really well.
I wanted to see an all-out Kakashi fight at the end. Chidori, anyone? D: But you had the media get the information so it couldn't happen or else he'd be 'exposed' as a ninja or something. :( :( :(
Byeeee!